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Posted 7/24/09 , edited 7/24/09

Unfinished Business

It had been 13 years. He stepped over the cracked and broken stones that formed the pathway. Thirteen long, hard years. He stood before the forbidding doorway. Thirteen years of freedom. He turned the key. Thirteen years of torture. He reluctantly turned the door handle. He’s finally returned; the house seemed to say, as the door swung smoothly open on its own, after 13 years.

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It had all started there, in that forsaken building. As soon as he was old enough, he left it behind. But after being gone, he began to notice things. During the first year of his absence from the house, items would disappear for weeks but would then reappear at the foot of his bed one morning. The next year brought frightening dreams that haunted his sleep often. With each passing year, a new event reared its head. Voices, flying objects, writing on the walls, and finally, cumulating on the twelfth year, with physical apparitions and an attack.
He feared that the thirteenth year would bring with it, his death. So he decided to return to that accursed house. It would be the end of either the house or him. Unfortunately, in his haste to escape from the house, he distanced himself nearly a year away from his old home. Still early in his twelfth year, he set out as soon as he could. He made good time. He was not visited by the phantoms of the house during his trip. It seems, the house knew that he was coming and didn’t want him slowed by its hauntings.
But now, as he stepped inside the building, an evil force, worse than any he had ever felt, swept over him. The terror it caused him was powerfull that he turned around to try an escape the house, even another 13 years of torture would be nothing to this! But to his dismay, just as he reached the open door, it slammed shut before him. He didn’t even try to open the door for he knew he would be unable to open it.
“So it’s come to the, eh?” the man asked the house as he walked down a hallway, towards the kitchen.

As he walked, he didn’t bother to turn around and see, because he felt the phantoms and shadows behind him rising up with their evil intents. In the kitchen, he stepped over the remains of a table, long torn to shreds by things only he understood, to the stove. He turned the stove all the way on, letting the gas fill through the house.
And as the phantoms and shadows and evil will of the house rose up to engulf him, he reached his hand to his pocket and drew out a single match.


(Wrote this in 8th grade so not my best writing quality, but over-all, what do you guys think? )
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Posted 7/24/09
Its really good O:
A storii that actually got me to read owo
i would usually be to lazy to read it XD
nuh offense to kokochand and embie D:
your stories are awesome but iget lazii at /all the times x3
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Posted 7/24/09
Thanks lots!
I have sorta the opposite problem.
Whenever i'm writing a story that wouldve ended up being longish, i start to lose intrest around 10- pages in and end up stop writing.
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Posted 7/24/09
lol owo
same here =w=
i lose interest and ideas x.X
i have like
millions of unfinished stories
but usually when i can't seem to think of something to add. I delete em owo;;
if some are even on here their unfinished and proabbly will stay like that x.X
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Posted 7/24/09
WHOOOAA!
Awesome.
That's really the only word I can think of right now 8O
That first paragraph was so powerful, it drew me RIGHT in!
REALLY cool, Would you like this to be under "horror" in the Story list?
Posted 7/24/09
seems like by teh cmnts i should read it ! 8d
okiee dokiee, ima read it now
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Posted 7/24/09
This my friend, is made of awesome!!!!!!
Also, please do not forget to read my story.
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Posted 7/24/09
Hmm... Yea I think this would work well under horror
the assignment in school was to make a short story in Edgar Allen Poe's style
Ended up as more my style but that might be for the better
other wise i might not have understood what i wrote...

Thanks for the comments!
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Posted 7/24/09
Hahahaha XD
Yeah there's no point in writing stuff you don't understand, eh?
Adding it to the list now ^^
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Posted 7/24/09
cools
thanks
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Posted 7/24/09
Yup, no problemo :3
Now you should go read my stories and comment, return the favor >:D
lol you don't have to though ^^
Buuutt keep in mind you are my Slave >:3
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Posted 7/24/09
right
i'll get to them at sum point in the future!
hows that for specific?
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Haha, just vague enough XD
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