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Chapter 1: The legend lives…

This dark place… wasn’t always like this. In fact Lethmenith was the most beautiful place any one could live in before. Flowers, trees, and creatures of all shapes and sizes grew and flourished. 12 years everyone lived in peace until the dark lord came and took control over the thrown. He had poisoned their king and all his successors. So that he could name himself king and control the land. His name is Ariseth. Everyone in the kingdom fears the name. Because He swallowed every creature he could get his hands on and dragged them into the depths of his castle. Very few that go in those boarders are ever seen again… But a couple lucky creatures managed to escape his darkened touch. They fled to the far western boarders. And there they waited and fought. Fought for the hope that a miracle would come and even the odds. And all of them had almost given up. Then they stumbled across a cave. And what they saw had amazed them…

“Jhemanithsai, don’t go in there!” said Evana the centaur. “Why not it seems fine to me.” “You don’t know what’s in there!” “Well that’s all the more reason to look.” Jhemanithsai said as she walked inside. “It’s dark in here, any one got a light?” Evana said. Jhemanithsai rolled her eyes and let out a small orb of light. “You satisfied now?” She said. “Very much lady Jhem.” “Good now lets go.” Jhemanithsai was the leader of the rebellion at the age of about fifteen. She had paws like a lion, huge griffin ears, four legs, and a tail that looked like smoke. She crept through the cavern and watched for unwanted eyes. “Ow! Evana watch where you’re stepping!” Jhemanithsai grunted. “So sorry m’ lady.” “It’s alright let’s keep going.” She said. Then a little further down she saw a small empty space. She stepped into it and called her orb closer into the cave. She gave a small gasp. There was an egg. Evana and a couple others took a glimpse at it. “What is that m’ lady?” “I… I don’t know.” Jhemanithsai said. Then she went closer to the egg. She sniffed it. Then she tapped it lightly with her paw. The egg moved. She backed up. “I don’t like this Jhem how about we just go?” Her friend Stelliana said stepping backward. “No… I want to know what this is.” Jhemanithsai said. “You lost your parents to curiosity.” Said Evana. Jhemanithsai flashed her a look. And she stayed quiet. Then she heard the egg start to crack. She let the orb float over it to keep whatever was inside interested. Then a small horn emerged from the egg. Then another and one more. There were three horns. Then she heard a little sort of moan as if to say “let me out.” And after that a tiny cough. But what followed the cough was a huge burst of light. Jhemanithsai closed her eyes. The light was bright. Then she heard a couple eggshells fall to the ground. She opened her eyes and what she saw astonished her. “Is that what I think it is lady Jhem?!” Evana said with joy. “It is! But… I thought they were only a legend!” Jhemanithsai said. Lying in the last of the eggshell... was a baby Laraganone. It was a girl, orange in colour with huge floppy ears and two tiny wings. On her head were three horns and six diamond shaped marks on her forehead. She had red scales on her face, stomach, legs, and tail. On her hooves she had three tiny claws and a red mark around each foot. The tip of her ears, wings, and tail were yellow. And her hair was red.

“She’s beautiful.” Stelliana said. Jhemanithsai walked up to the baby. It opened its eyes and looked at Jhemanithsai. It sniffed her and made a small noise. “Don’t be afraid. I won’t hurt you.” Jhemanithsai said. Then the baby touched her muzzle against Jhemanithsai’s and nuzzled her. Evana walked up and her hooves clicked on the floor as she did so. “What shall we call her m’ lady?” She asked. Jhemanithsai looked at baby. “I think we should call her…” She thought for a moment. Then she smiled and said, “Malicona.” The baby seemed to like that name. It wagged its tiny tail a bit. “Alright Malicona it is then.” Jhemanithsai said. Then they heard footsteps coming down from where they came from. “Jhem, invaders! The kings army is here!” Nankil said. He was Jhemanithsai’s boyfriend. He looked like her except bigger and a bit more fur. Jhemanithsai looked at the group and said, “Hold them off until I can get Malicona to safety!” She said. Nankil nodded and everyone in the cave fled to help him. Jhemanithsai looked at Malicona and said, “Don’t worry I’ll keep you safe.” Then she picked her up in her mouth and started to run down another passage of the cavern. She heard swords, horns and groans of pain coming from the other direction. But if she helped them she would endanger Malicona.

She galloped out into the rain. Looking for the king’s men and being cautious. One tried to jump on top of her, but she dodged and bucked him in the jaw. Then she called up some magic and started to run across the sky looking down upon the small battle-taking place. When everyone saw her they began to retreat and lost the intruders in the forest.

...And so...it began...

14 years later…

“Jhem come on why can’t I fly anywhere? I have wings!” Malicona complained. “Malicona you know why you can’t! If you fly the king will have an exact view of where to find us!” Jhemanithsai said. “You never let me go anywhere…” Malicona said. “Malicona if I could I would but right now the king is at his highest power. “Oh I’m scared now! What’s he gonna do through a water ball at me?” Malicona said. “Malicona if all he did was throw water balls at us we would have defeated him before you were ever bor-” “And why do we fear his name? It’s a name what’s it going to do it doesn’t hurt anybody see? Ariseth, Ariseth, Ariseth!” Malicona interrupted. “Malicona go back inside.” “But-” “NOW.” Malicona went inside with her head down muttering things to herself. “Don’t do this don’t do that. You know for freedom fighters we sure don’t have a lot!!!!!” She said. Then she went into the cave and laid down. “Humph.” She grunted…
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Chapter 1: The legend lives…

This dark place… wasn’t always like this. In fact Lethmenith was the most beautiful place any one could live in before. Flowers, trees, and creatures of all shapes and sizes grew and flourished. 12 years everyone lived in peace until the dark lord came and took control over the thrown. He had poisoned their king and all his successors. So that he could name himself king and control the land. His name is Ariseth. Everyone in the kingdom fears the name. Because He swallowed every creature he could get his hands on and dragged them into the depths of his castle. Very few that go in those boarders are ever seen again… But a couple lucky creatures managed to escape his darkened touch. They fled to the far western boarders. And there they waited and fought. Fought for the hope that a miracle would come and even the odds. And all of them had almost given up. Then they stumbled across a cave. And what they saw had amazed them…

“Jhemanithsai, don’t go in there!” said Evana the centaur. “Why not it seems fine to me.” “You don’t know what’s in there!” “Well that’s all the more reason to look.” Jhemanithsai said as she walked inside. “It’s dark in here, any one got a light?” Evana said. Jhemanithsai rolled her eyes and let out a small orb of light. “You satisfied now?” She said. “Very much lady Jhem.” “Good now lets go.” Jhemanithsai was the leader of the rebellion at the age of about fifteen. She had paws like a lion, huge griffin ears, four legs, and a tail that looked like smoke. She crept through the cavern and watched for unwanted eyes. “Ow! Evana watch where you’re stepping!” Jhemanithsai grunted. “So sorry m’ lady.” “It’s alright let’s keep going.” She said. Then a little further down she saw a small empty space. She stepped into it and called her orb closer into the cave. She gave a small gasp. There was an egg. Evana and a couple others took a glimpse at it. “What is that m’ lady?” “I… I don’t know.” Jhemanithsai said. Then she went closer to the egg. She sniffed it. Then she tapped it lightly with her paw. The egg moved. She backed up. “I don’t like this Jhem how about we just go?” Her friend Stelliana said stepping backward. “No… I want to know what this is.” Jhemanithsai said. “You lost your parents to curiosity.” Said Evana. Jhemanithsai flashed her a look. And she stayed quiet. Then she heard the egg start to crack. She let the orb float over it to keep whatever was inside interested. Then a small horn emerged from the egg. Then another and one more. There were three horns. Then she heard a little sort of moan as if to say “let me out.” And after that a tiny cough. But what followed the cough was a huge burst of light. Jhemanithsai closed her eyes. The light was bright. Then she heard a couple eggshells fall to the ground. She opened her eyes and what she saw astonished her. “Is that what I think it is lady Jhem?!” Evana said with joy. “It is! But… I thought they were only a legend!” Jhemanithsai said. Lying in the last of the eggshell... was a baby Laraganone. It was a girl, orange in colour with huge floppy ears and two tiny wings. On her head were three horns and six diamond shaped marks on her forehead. She had red scales on her face, stomach, legs, and tail. On her hooves she had three tiny claws and a red mark around each foot. The tip of her ears, wings, and tail were yellow. And her hair was red.

“She’s beautiful.” Stelliana said. Jhemanithsai walked up to the baby. It opened its eyes and looked at Jhemanithsai. It sniffed her and made a small noise. “Don’t be afraid. I won’t hurt you.” Jhemanithsai said. Then the baby touched her muzzle against Jhemanithsai’s and nuzzled her. Evana walked up and her hooves clicked on the floor as she did so. “What shall we call her m’ lady?” She asked. Jhemanithsai looked at baby. “I think we should call her…” She thought for a moment. Then she smiled and said, “Malicona.” The baby seemed to like that name. It wagged its tiny tail a bit. “Alright Malicona it is then.” Jhemanithsai said. Then they heard footsteps coming down from where they came from. “Jhem, invaders! The kings army is here!” Nankil said. He was Jhemanithsai’s boyfriend. He looked like her except bigger and a bit more fur. Jhemanithsai looked at the group and said, “Hold them off until I can get Malicona to safety!” She said. Nankil nodded and everyone in the cave fled to help him. Jhemanithsai looked at Malicona and said, “Don’t worry I’ll keep you safe.” Then she picked her up in her mouth and started to run down another passage of the cavern. She heard swords, horns and groans of pain coming from the other direction. But if she helped them she would endanger Malicona.

She galloped out into the rain. Looking for the king’s men and being cautious. One tried to jump on top of her, but she dodged and bucked him in the jaw. Then she called up some magic and started to run across the sky looking down upon the small battle-taking place. When everyone saw her they began to retreat and lost the intruders in the forest.

...And so...it began...

14 years later…

“Jhem come on why can’t I fly anywhere? I have wings!” Malicona complained. “Malicona you know why you can’t! If you fly the king will have an exact view of where to find us!” Jhemanithsai said. “You never let me go anywhere…” Malicona said. “Malicona if I could I would but right now the king is at his highest power. “Oh I’m scared now! What’s he gonna do through a water ball at me?” Malicona said. “Malicona if all he did was throw water balls at us we would have defeated him before you were ever bor-” “And why do we fear his name? It’s a name what’s it going to do it doesn’t hurt anybody see? Ariseth, Ariseth, Ariseth!” Malicona interrupted. “Malicona go back inside.” “But-” “NOW.” Malicona went inside with her head down muttering things to herself. “Don’t do this don’t do that. You know for freedom fighters we sure don’t have a lot!!!!!” She said. Then she went into the cave and laid down. “Humph.” She grunted…


Nice work Tasha ~! i really like it ! keep up the great work ~! ^^ .
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Chapter 1: The legend lives…

This dark place… wasn’t always like this. In fact Lethmenith was the most beautiful place any one could live in before. Flowers, trees, and creatures of all shapes and sizes grew and flourished. 12 years everyone lived in peace until the dark lord came and took control over the thrown. He had poisoned their king and all his successors. So that he could name himself king and control the land. His name is Ariseth. Everyone in the kingdom fears the name. Because He swallowed every creature he could get his hands on and dragged them into the depths of his castle. Very few that go in those boarders are ever seen again… But a couple lucky creatures managed to escape his darkened touch. They fled to the far western boarders. And there they waited and fought. Fought for the hope that a miracle would come and even the odds. And all of them had almost given up. Then they stumbled across a cave. And what they saw had amazed them…

“Jhemanithsai, don’t go in there!” said Evana the centaur. “Why not it seems fine to me.” “You don’t know what’s in there!” “Well that’s all the more reason to look.” Jhemanithsai said as she walked inside. “It’s dark in here, any one got a light?” Evana said. Jhemanithsai rolled her eyes and let out a small orb of light. “You satisfied now?” She said. “Very much lady Jhem.” “Good now lets go.” Jhemanithsai was the leader of the rebellion at the age of about fifteen. She had paws like a lion, huge griffin ears, four legs, and a tail that looked like smoke. She crept through the cavern and watched for unwanted eyes. “Ow! Evana watch where you’re stepping!” Jhemanithsai grunted. “So sorry m’ lady.” “It’s alright let’s keep going.” She said. Then a little further down she saw a small empty space. She stepped into it and called her orb closer into the cave. She gave a small gasp. There was an egg. Evana and a couple others took a glimpse at it. “What is that m’ lady?” “I… I don’t know.” Jhemanithsai said. Then she went closer to the egg. She sniffed it. Then she tapped it lightly with her paw. The egg moved. She backed up. “I don’t like this Jhem how about we just go?” Her friend Stelliana said stepping backward. “No… I want to know what this is.” Jhemanithsai said. “You lost your parents to curiosity.” Said Evana. Jhemanithsai flashed her a look. And she stayed quiet. Then she heard the egg start to crack. She let the orb float over it to keep whatever was inside interested. Then a small horn emerged from the egg. Then another and one more. There were three horns. Then she heard a little sort of moan as if to say “let me out.” And after that a tiny cough. But what followed the cough was a huge burst of light. Jhemanithsai closed her eyes. The light was bright. Then she heard a couple eggshells fall to the ground. She opened her eyes and what she saw astonished her. “Is that what I think it is lady Jhem?!” Evana said with joy. “It is! But… I thought they were only a legend!” Jhemanithsai said. Lying in the last of the eggshell... was a baby Laraganone. It was a girl, orange in colour with huge floppy ears and two tiny wings. On her head were three horns and six diamond shaped marks on her forehead. She had red scales on her face, stomach, legs, and tail. On her hooves she had three tiny claws and a red mark around each foot. The tip of her ears, wings, and tail were yellow. And her hair was red.

“She’s beautiful.” Stelliana said. Jhemanithsai walked up to the baby. It opened its eyes and looked at Jhemanithsai. It sniffed her and made a small noise. “Don’t be afraid. I won’t hurt you.” Jhemanithsai said. Then the baby touched her muzzle against Jhemanithsai’s and nuzzled her. Evana walked up and her hooves clicked on the floor as she did so. “What shall we call her m’ lady?” She asked. Jhemanithsai looked at baby. “I think we should call her…” She thought for a moment. Then she smiled and said, “Malicona.” The baby seemed to like that name. It wagged its tiny tail a bit. “Alright Malicona it is then.” Jhemanithsai said. Then they heard footsteps coming down from where they came from. “Jhem, invaders! The kings army is here!” Nankil said. He was Jhemanithsai’s boyfriend. He looked like her except bigger and a bit more fur. Jhemanithsai looked at the group and said, “Hold them off until I can get Malicona to safety!” She said. Nankil nodded and everyone in the cave fled to help him. Jhemanithsai looked at Malicona and said, “Don’t worry I’ll keep you safe.” Then she picked her up in her mouth and started to run down another passage of the cavern. She heard swords, horns and groans of pain coming from the other direction. But if she helped them she would endanger Malicona.

She galloped out into the rain. Looking for the king’s men and being cautious. One tried to jump on top of her, but she dodged and bucked him in the jaw. Then she called up some magic and started to run across the sky looking down upon the small battle-taking place. When everyone saw her they began to retreat and lost the intruders in the forest.

...And so...it began...

14 years later…

“Jhem come on why can’t I fly anywhere? I have wings!” Malicona complained. “Malicona you know why you can’t! If you fly the king will have an exact view of where to find us!” Jhemanithsai said. “You never let me go anywhere…” Malicona said. “Malicona if I could I would but right now the king is at his highest power. “Oh I’m scared now! What’s he gonna do through a water ball at me?” Malicona said. “Malicona if all he did was throw water balls at us we would have defeated him before you were ever bor-” “And why do we fear his name? It’s a name what’s it going to do it doesn’t hurt anybody see? Ariseth, Ariseth, Ariseth!” Malicona interrupted. “Malicona go back inside.” “But-” “NOW.” Malicona went inside with her head down muttering things to herself. “Don’t do this don’t do that. You know for freedom fighters we sure don’t have a lot!!!!!” She said. Then she went into the cave and laid down. “Humph.” She grunted…


It's really good Tasha~ Really good~ ^^
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