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Chapter 2: Enter Saskotaro

Malicona lay her head down on her hooves, eyes focused on the dirt and narrowed. " your request was denied again huh?" Evana said as she glided to her side. "What's it to you?" Malicona mumbled. Evana smiled and looked at her. "You know, I don't think it's right." She said. Malicona's eyes lit up with curiosity. "Don't think what's right?" She asked. Evana's smile was brighter. "To keep you here. You deserve to see the world. Well, at least a piece of it." Evana said. "Really?!" Malicona said excitement flowing through her. Evana nodded. Then Malicona's expression toned down. "But what about Jhem?" She asked looking in her direction. Evana put a hand to her perfect lips and flicked her tail around. "Mums the word. I won't tell a soul." She whispered. Malicona sprang to her feet and stretched her wings out. "Your the best Evana!" She said.

Malicona was just rushing out the back way when Evana galloped to her side. "Wait one more thing." She said. "What?" Malicona asked. Evana went over to her and said, "Don't fly to high, keep to the tree's." Malicona smiled. "You hve nothing to worry about!" She assured her. Evana smiled then saw Jhemanithsai coming in. "Hurry go!" She said. Malicona nodded and glided out of the cave and into the open air.

With one heart beat, she was in the air and gliding gracefully through the tree's. For her first time flying, she was pretty good. She took a deep breath and really stretched her wings out. "Ah, this is great!" She laughed. The leaves from the trees brushed against her fur and the sun danced on her horns. She had never felt so alive in her life. And sh had just gotten to a large feild when she heard someone or something, groan.

"Gah!" It growled. Malicona landed on a near by ledge and looked down upon the creature from a distance. "What is he doing?" She thought. The creature had gotten it's over sized wing stuck in the branches of a near by oak tree. Malicona could only stare in amazement at how perfect he looked. But at the same time she could she a couple scars. Malicona had decided he wasn't much of a threat in this condition. So she casually glided down onto one of the trees branches to get a closer look."Hey, isn't the point of flying not to get your wings stuck?" She asked with sarcasm in her voice. The creature rolled his eyes and looked up. "How about you stop being a smart ass and leave me alone." He said. Clearly he had no sence of humor. "Well excuse me Mr. helpless." Malicona teased. "Don't you have somewhere to go?" The creature asked impatiently. "Naw, not unless you like rules." Malicona said. The creature snorted. "Who are you anyway." Malicona asked. The creature, obviously taken by surprise answered with a grunt. "My name is Saskotaro. And who are you? twedle dumb or twedle dumber?" Malicona rolled her eyes, "oh hardeharhar." She said. "Well are you going to tell me or not?" Saskotaro asked. Malicona shrugged. "If you don't I can always call you-" "Ok ok!" Malicona cut in. "It's Malicona, there you happy?!" She asked. "No." Saskotaro answered. "Why not?!" Malicona asked. "Hm, let me think. Ah yes, my wing is getting ripped apart by this tree." He said.

Malicona got up and said, "And I thought boy's never needed help." Saskotaro glared at her. "Let's stop th lecturing and get to the part where you help me already." He suggested. "Gladly." Malicona laughed. With a flick of her tail the branch was cut and Saskotaro found that his wing was free. "Finally." He said. He stretched his wing out and winced a bit at the pain.

"So what are you here for huh?" Malicona asked. Saskotaro stiffened. "I'm here to find the rebellion. I... I came to join them." He said. Malicona smiled. "Why didn't you say so in the first place?!" She asked. Saskotaro shrugged. "You never asked." He said. Malicona rolled her eyes again. "Well come on I'll show you to them!" She said. They both took off and flew into the trees. But all the while Malicona wondered about Saskotaro. "Who is he? Where'd he come from? Will Jhem approve?" She could only guess...


Hmmmm...it's good...but not as good as me~ xD Jk jk jk jk~ Anyway, uhhh...it's nice, but a lot of editing could be done...same with Chapter 1, but that's what you expect the writing perfectionist to say~ xD


Hahaha ! i have 10000+ more point than you XD


*sigh* Yeah...Even though I'm a perfectionist, nobody is reading for weeks...life is unfair...especially since people don't know I have new chapters out...>.<


Well ... Mimi-chii Cr isn't the only site to put your story at ~


I know Lena-chii~!!! But that's just it!!! Everybody on Deviantart.com thinks that stories are crap or not worth reading!!! It hurts to know they won't even give it a try!!!! Not even even people on CR give it a try!!! I'm never get noticed at this rate!!! It hurts to know that my own best friend on Deviantart gets TONS of attention!!! And she's not even a writer!!! She's an artist!!!! Even on MY website she gets more attention than me!!!! I know she's just starting out!!! But she has amazing story ideas and mine are bullshit!!!!!!!!!!!! *cries* My BFF is taking my dream away from me!!! I know she doesn't mean to, but it hurts!!! Even my sisters get more attention than me!!!! My sister Rebecca has one of the most beautiful singing voices I've ever heard, Vicki's artwork POPS out of her paper, and my stories DON'T get imagined or get you thinking at all!!!!!! *cries really hard* I don't care if I sound like a spoiled brat, I want people to notice me!!!!!!!


First about your friend your jealous of her , because she have things you don't ~ and that's just wrong, A person have to accept of what he have right now , If i am right your talking about Meli-chan , i saw her drawings , but i also noticed there almost the same people who comment to her .. so what that means ?? She found with her own efforts people who can support her , and comment on her drawing. If you want to be noticed do things that people notice you , or how you really feel about it , for example in my class there's is a lot of people smarter than me and i want to be like them or more noticed , but that's just wrong because i don't think a person can get smart in 5 seconds , they work hard until they reach the top , and you should do that to . If you truly love writing stories , just keep writing stories , i know you will think how much will take ?? , and did you sisters born with such ability or tired hard to reach for their dream ?



*sigh* I guess they wprked hard to get to where they are now...But I've been working hard to!!!! My Dad thinks I've haven't thought about what I want to be, but I'm 100% sure I want to be a writer! I've told him that tons of times, but he's only interested in my sister Rebecca! He doesn't even pay attention to Vicki anymore either! I'm not paid attention to by him because I'm not diabetic and they are! *silence* I'm sorry...I started talking about my sisters and my dad...I've been upset about him lately...I guess that's why I purposely cut himself in the shower with a razor...>.< I thought it would release some bad blood out of my system...*sigh* please don't tell anyone I purposely slit myself to lose blood...I know it was a bad thing. *starts crying* It seems...like my whole life in surrounded by hatred, and lonliness...no wonder I have no friends in school...I'm kind of a freak...a brainless freak who thinks she can release sadness by sliting her own body...I feel like I have nothing to live for...my best friend doesn't talk to me ever since I returned...I'm always the one who start conversations...it's like she's forgotten about me...I have no friends in school...my my and dad act like I'm not important...especially my dad...he hates me...even my grandma hates me...but she's coming to visit next week while my mom is on her Alaskan cruise, and she was angry that my mom had a third child...my oldest sister was supposed to have a twin, but her twin died before she was born...Rebecca was supposed to be the third, and my grandma said no more, but it was only 2, and my mom wanted three daughters...so...if Vicki's twin hadn't died, I wouldn't be here...*cries* I feel like I'm not wanted...or I'm just a replacement...for the twin that died...


Unfortunately I can't feel what your feeling , or what are you going through , I do wish to become you , I wish i was in your family as member to experience on what happen every day , i wish i am your twin sister for real , so i can make you feel comfortable every time you get sad , or your REAL BFF in real life , so i can call you everyday. or if we are in the same school so we can make some gossip XD , or what friends usually share. I REALLY do wish to meet you Jessica , because even i am your friend i can't help you when your in need , or when you about to cry, or anything at all ... I think i feel REALLY sad because your sad >.< , but DON'T YOU DARE GIVE UP ! OR I WILL HATE YOU FOR REST OF MY LIFE! My twiniee sister is Strong , Mutli-talented , cute , nice , lovely , and can offer you help when you need somebody to be with you , you are my friend and i won't let you go. you ARE NEEDED !! or WANTED ! , because i need to stay with me ! , if you not there or dead , or i can't contact you anymore i will cry ...~ so please ! don't give up and keep trying !


Lena...why are you always saying that stuff? Why are you always making happy enough to cry...? Why do you keep telling me to never quit, and keep on top of my dreams? Why...? Why do you always make me feel loved and confident when I talk to you? For some reason...I feel like you are the friend I am missing at school and at home...I always know there is something missing, and feel like there is a certain person I can't live without all the time...and...I think that person is you Lena-chii...you always make me happy, sad, and angry...all at different times...but...I could never STAY sad or angry with you...but I can always stay happy, because you are the brightest star in my night sky...you are my pocket money filled with love and life...you are the sister-like person I can't live without...you are my...best friend Lena...if I lose you...I lose everything...same with Aya-chii, Tasha-chan, and all the other special friends in my profile...you are my sparkling stars in the palms of my hands...you are light...you are my...bestest friend in the whole world Lena...I know Tasha has been my childhood best friend for as logn as I can remember, and she is my bestest friend too...but...I feel like we're growing apart...like we don't know each other anymore...I hate to say this but...I feel like you know me better than Tasha...it seems like Tasha has made better friends than me in Edmonton, and that's fine with me...but...I've had some too...and not just any friends...sisters...brothers and sisters in the name of God almighty...^^ I really feel like we will meet someday Lena-chii...I can hear God saying this to me...^^ *huggz while crying* You are one of the best things that has ever happened to me Lena...one of the best moments in my life, was meeting you...


To tell the truth when you said Meli-chii is coming to your house i was scared that you will stop talking to me (when meli-chii at your house) or be apart a little , but i know in a person heart .. there is special place for everybody .I never knew thats how you feel about me , but maybe we can meet each other when i travel to England ( After finishing collage) so i can complete studying there as a Graphic designer and stalk my brother 24/7 ~, Wana make a promise ? Let's promise each other to go the same University (I hope that's what's it's called when you complete you Collage studying) , and meet each other there ~ it's seems as BIG promise to do or make , but I want to study with you ~ , I am serious ~ maybe just maybe if we CAN study together that will be GREAT .

Here's a pact for our friendship :

1. Never give up in the dreams we want it to happen.
2. Meet each other when we grow up.
3. TRY to study together
4. When the chance comes we will start writing hand written letters
6. Trust each other
7.Punch and kill anybody who hurt us or anybody we care about.
8.DON'T lose your good , nice side EVER !



I Will add more and give to you when I am finish with it ~ ^^



*sigh* I'd love to meet you Lena...more than anything...and when we're finished studying in college for our dreams, maybe we can visit Japan~ Just the two of us~ ^^ We can have a 2-3 week vacation and visit every wonderous place in Japan together~ ^^


That would be GREAT!! , I will defiantly go to Japan after college ~ so that a promise okay ?~! , Both of us will make our dreams true and never give up and go to Japan when we grow up ~ So now this promise is our little secret



Of course!!! ^^ *huggz* Our little secret to do our best to finish school, go to university/college, reach our dreams, and go to Japan for a few weeks to celebrate our accomplishments~ ^^ *holds out pinky finger* Let's make this a BFF forever promise, just the two of us~ ^^


But people will read it since we are talking in group forum >.< , Yup *joins your pinky finger* Best Friends Forever promise !
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Chapter 2: Enter Saskotaro

Malicona lay her head down on her hooves, eyes focused on the dirt and narrowed. " your request was denied again huh?" Evana said as she glided to her side. "What's it to you?" Malicona mumbled. Evana smiled and looked at her. "You know, I don't think it's right." She said. Malicona's eyes lit up with curiosity. "Don't think what's right?" She asked. Evana's smile was brighter. "To keep you here. You deserve to see the world. Well, at least a piece of it." Evana said. "Really?!" Malicona said excitement flowing through her. Evana nodded. Then Malicona's expression toned down. "But what about Jhem?" She asked looking in her direction. Evana put a hand to her perfect lips and flicked her tail around. "Mums the word. I won't tell a soul." She whispered. Malicona sprang to her feet and stretched her wings out. "Your the best Evana!" She said.

Malicona was just rushing out the back way when Evana galloped to her side. "Wait one more thing." She said. "What?" Malicona asked. Evana went over to her and said, "Don't fly to high, keep to the tree's." Malicona smiled. "You hve nothing to worry about!" She assured her. Evana smiled then saw Jhemanithsai coming in. "Hurry go!" She said. Malicona nodded and glided out of the cave and into the open air.

With one heart beat, she was in the air and gliding gracefully through the tree's. For her first time flying, she was pretty good. She took a deep breath and really stretched her wings out. "Ah, this is great!" She laughed. The leaves from the trees brushed against her fur and the sun danced on her horns. She had never felt so alive in her life. And sh had just gotten to a large feild when she heard someone or something, groan.

"Gah!" It growled. Malicona landed on a near by ledge and looked down upon the creature from a distance. "What is he doing?" She thought. The creature had gotten it's over sized wing stuck in the branches of a near by oak tree. Malicona could only stare in amazement at how perfect he looked. But at the same time she could she a couple scars. Malicona had decided he wasn't much of a threat in this condition. So she casually glided down onto one of the trees branches to get a closer look."Hey, isn't the point of flying not to get your wings stuck?" She asked with sarcasm in her voice. The creature rolled his eyes and looked up. "How about you stop being a smart ass and leave me alone." He said. Clearly he had no sence of humor. "Well excuse me Mr. helpless." Malicona teased. "Don't you have somewhere to go?" The creature asked impatiently. "Naw, not unless you like rules." Malicona said. The creature snorted. "Who are you anyway." Malicona asked. The creature, obviously taken by surprise answered with a grunt. "My name is Saskotaro. And who are you? twedle dumb or twedle dumber?" Malicona rolled her eyes, "oh hardeharhar." She said. "Well are you going to tell me or not?" Saskotaro asked. Malicona shrugged. "If you don't I can always call you-" "Ok ok!" Malicona cut in. "It's Malicona, there you happy?!" She asked. "No." Saskotaro answered. "Why not?!" Malicona asked. "Hm, let me think. Ah yes, my wing is getting ripped apart by this tree." He said.

Malicona got up and said, "And I thought boy's never needed help." Saskotaro glared at her. "Let's stop th lecturing and get to the part where you help me already." He suggested. "Gladly." Malicona laughed. With a flick of her tail the branch was cut and Saskotaro found that his wing was free. "Finally." He said. He stretched his wing out and winced a bit at the pain.

"So what are you here for huh?" Malicona asked. Saskotaro stiffened. "I'm here to find the rebellion. I... I came to join them." He said. Malicona smiled. "Why didn't you say so in the first place?!" She asked. Saskotaro shrugged. "You never asked." He said. Malicona rolled her eyes again. "Well come on I'll show you to them!" She said. They both took off and flew into the trees. But all the while Malicona wondered about Saskotaro. "Who is he? Where'd he come from? Will Jhem approve?" She could only guess...


Hmmmm...it's good...but not as good as me~ xD Jk jk jk jk~ Anyway, uhhh...it's nice, but a lot of editing could be done...same with Chapter 1, but that's what you expect the writing perfectionist to say~ xD


Hahaha ! i have 10000+ more point than you XD


*sigh* Yeah...Even though I'm a perfectionist, nobody is reading for weeks...life is unfair...especially since people don't know I have new chapters out...>.<


Well ... Mimi-chii Cr isn't the only site to put your story at ~


I know Lena-chii~!!! But that's just it!!! Everybody on Deviantart.com thinks that stories are crap or not worth reading!!! It hurts to know they won't even give it a try!!!! Not even even people on CR give it a try!!! I'm never get noticed at this rate!!! It hurts to know that my own best friend on Deviantart gets TONS of attention!!! And she's not even a writer!!! She's an artist!!!! Even on MY website she gets more attention than me!!!! I know she's just starting out!!! But she has amazing story ideas and mine are bullshit!!!!!!!!!!!! *cries* My BFF is taking my dream away from me!!! I know she doesn't mean to, but it hurts!!! Even my sisters get more attention than me!!!! My sister Rebecca has one of the most beautiful singing voices I've ever heard, Vicki's artwork POPS out of her paper, and my stories DON'T get imagined or get you thinking at all!!!!!! *cries really hard* I don't care if I sound like a spoiled brat, I want people to notice me!!!!!!!


First about your friend your jealous of her , because she have things you don't ~ and that's just wrong, A person have to accept of what he have right now , If i am right your talking about Meli-chan , i saw her drawings , but i also noticed there almost the same people who comment to her .. so what that means ?? She found with her own efforts people who can support her , and comment on her drawing. If you want to be noticed do things that people notice you , or how you really feel about it , for example in my class there's is a lot of people smarter than me and i want to be like them or more noticed , but that's just wrong because i don't think a person can get smart in 5 seconds , they work hard until they reach the top , and you should do that to . If you truly love writing stories , just keep writing stories , i know you will think how much will take ?? , and did you sisters born with such ability or tired hard to reach for their dream ?



*sigh* I guess they wprked hard to get to where they are now...But I've been working hard to!!!! My Dad thinks I've haven't thought about what I want to be, but I'm 100% sure I want to be a writer! I've told him that tons of times, but he's only interested in my sister Rebecca! He doesn't even pay attention to Vicki anymore either! I'm not paid attention to by him because I'm not diabetic and they are! *silence* I'm sorry...I started talking about my sisters and my dad...I've been upset about him lately...I guess that's why I purposely cut himself in the shower with a razor...>.< I thought it would release some bad blood out of my system...*sigh* please don't tell anyone I purposely slit myself to lose blood...I know it was a bad thing. *starts crying* It seems...like my whole life in surrounded by hatred, and lonliness...no wonder I have no friends in school...I'm kind of a freak...a brainless freak who thinks she can release sadness by sliting her own body...I feel like I have nothing to live for...my best friend doesn't talk to me ever since I returned...I'm always the one who start conversations...it's like she's forgotten about me...I have no friends in school...my my and dad act like I'm not important...especially my dad...he hates me...even my grandma hates me...but she's coming to visit next week while my mom is on her Alaskan cruise, and she was angry that my mom had a third child...my oldest sister was supposed to have a twin, but her twin died before she was born...Rebecca was supposed to be the third, and my grandma said no more, but it was only 2, and my mom wanted three daughters...so...if Vicki's twin hadn't died, I wouldn't be here...*cries* I feel like I'm not wanted...or I'm just a replacement...for the twin that died...


Unfortunately I can't feel what your feeling , or what are you going through , I do wish to become you , I wish i was in your family as member to experience on what happen every day , i wish i am your twin sister for real , so i can make you feel comfortable every time you get sad , or your REAL BFF in real life , so i can call you everyday. or if we are in the same school so we can make some gossip XD , or what friends usually share. I REALLY do wish to meet you Jessica , because even i am your friend i can't help you when your in need , or when you about to cry, or anything at all ... I think i feel REALLY sad because your sad >.< , but DON'T YOU DARE GIVE UP ! OR I WILL HATE YOU FOR REST OF MY LIFE! My twiniee sister is Strong , Mutli-talented , cute , nice , lovely , and can offer you help when you need somebody to be with you , you are my friend and i won't let you go. you ARE NEEDED !! or WANTED ! , because i need to stay with me ! , if you not there or dead , or i can't contact you anymore i will cry ...~ so please ! don't give up and keep trying !


Lena...why are you always saying that stuff? Why are you always making happy enough to cry...? Why do you keep telling me to never quit, and keep on top of my dreams? Why...? Why do you always make me feel loved and confident when I talk to you? For some reason...I feel like you are the friend I am missing at school and at home...I always know there is something missing, and feel like there is a certain person I can't live without all the time...and...I think that person is you Lena-chii...you always make me happy, sad, and angry...all at different times...but...I could never STAY sad or angry with you...but I can always stay happy, because you are the brightest star in my night sky...you are my pocket money filled with love and life...you are the sister-like person I can't live without...you are my...best friend Lena...if I lose you...I lose everything...same with Aya-chii, Tasha-chan, and all the other special friends in my profile...you are my sparkling stars in the palms of my hands...you are light...you are my...bestest friend in the whole world Lena...I know Tasha has been my childhood best friend for as logn as I can remember, and she is my bestest friend too...but...I feel like we're growing apart...like we don't know each other anymore...I hate to say this but...I feel like you know me better than Tasha...it seems like Tasha has made better friends than me in Edmonton, and that's fine with me...but...I've had some too...and not just any friends...sisters...brothers and sisters in the name of God almighty...^^ I really feel like we will meet someday Lena-chii...I can hear God saying this to me...^^ *huggz while crying* You are one of the best things that has ever happened to me Lena...one of the best moments in my life, was meeting you...


To tell the truth when you said Meli-chii is coming to your house i was scared that you will stop talking to me (when meli-chii at your house) or be apart a little , but i know in a person heart .. there is special place for everybody .I never knew thats how you feel about me , but maybe we can meet each other when i travel to England ( After finishing collage) so i can complete studying there as a Graphic designer and stalk my brother 24/7 ~, Wana make a promise ? Let's promise each other to go the same University (I hope that's what's it's called when you complete you Collage studying) , and meet each other there ~ it's seems as BIG promise to do or make , but I want to study with you ~ , I am serious ~ maybe just maybe if we CAN study together that will be GREAT .

Here's a pact for our friendship :

1. Never give up in the dreams we want it to happen.
2. Meet each other when we grow up.
3. TRY to study together
4. When the chance comes we will start writing hand written letters
6. Trust each other
7.Punch and kill anybody who hurt us or anybody we care about.
8.DON'T lose your good , nice side EVER !



I Will add more and give to you when I am finish with it ~ ^^



*sigh* I'd love to meet you Lena...more than anything...and when we're finished studying in college for our dreams, maybe we can visit Japan~ Just the two of us~ ^^ We can have a 2-3 week vacation and visit every wonderous place in Japan together~ ^^


That would be GREAT!! , I will defiantly go to Japan after college ~ so that a promise okay ?~! , Both of us will make our dreams true and never give up and go to Japan when we grow up ~ So now this promise is our little secret



Of course!!! ^^ *huggz* Our little secret to do our best to finish school, go to university/college, reach our dreams, and go to Japan for a few weeks to celebrate our accomplishments~ ^^ *holds out pinky finger* Let's make this a BFF forever promise, just the two of us~ ^^


But people will read it since we are talking in group forum >.< , Yup *joins your pinky finger* Best Friends Forever promise !


Hahaha~ That's true~ ^^ I already made the list of promises, I'll send it to you when it's done~ ^^
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Keikoni_Midnight wrote:

Chapter 2: Enter Saskotaro

Malicona lay her head down on her hooves, eyes focused on the dirt and narrowed. " your request was denied again huh?" Evana said as she glided to her side. "What's it to you?" Malicona mumbled. Evana smiled and looked at her. "You know, I don't think it's right." She said. Malicona's eyes lit up with curiosity. "Don't think what's right?" She asked. Evana's smile was brighter. "To keep you here. You deserve to see the world. Well, at least a piece of it." Evana said. "Really?!" Malicona said excitement flowing through her. Evana nodded. Then Malicona's expression toned down. "But what about Jhem?" She asked looking in her direction. Evana put a hand to her perfect lips and flicked her tail around. "Mums the word. I won't tell a soul." She whispered. Malicona sprang to her feet and stretched her wings out. "Your the best Evana!" She said.

Malicona was just rushing out the back way when Evana galloped to her side. "Wait one more thing." She said. "What?" Malicona asked. Evana went over to her and said, "Don't fly to high, keep to the tree's." Malicona smiled. "You hve nothing to worry about!" She assured her. Evana smiled then saw Jhemanithsai coming in. "Hurry go!" She said. Malicona nodded and glided out of the cave and into the open air.

With one heart beat, she was in the air and gliding gracefully through the tree's. For her first time flying, she was pretty good. She took a deep breath and really stretched her wings out. "Ah, this is great!" She laughed. The leaves from the trees brushed against her fur and the sun danced on her horns. She had never felt so alive in her life. And sh had just gotten to a large feild when she heard someone or something, groan.

"Gah!" It growled. Malicona landed on a near by ledge and looked down upon the creature from a distance. "What is he doing?" She thought. The creature had gotten it's over sized wing stuck in the branches of a near by oak tree. Malicona could only stare in amazement at how perfect he looked. But at the same time she could she a couple scars. Malicona had decided he wasn't much of a threat in this condition. So she casually glided down onto one of the trees branches to get a closer look."Hey, isn't the point of flying not to get your wings stuck?" She asked with sarcasm in her voice. The creature rolled his eyes and looked up. "How about you stop being a smart ass and leave me alone." He said. Clearly he had no sence of humor. "Well excuse me Mr. helpless." Malicona teased. "Don't you have somewhere to go?" The creature asked impatiently. "Naw, not unless you like rules." Malicona said. The creature snorted. "Who are you anyway." Malicona asked. The creature, obviously taken by surprise answered with a grunt. "My name is Saskotaro. And who are you? twedle dumb or twedle dumber?" Malicona rolled her eyes, "oh hardeharhar." She said. "Well are you going to tell me or not?" Saskotaro asked. Malicona shrugged. "If you don't I can always call you-" "Ok ok!" Malicona cut in. "It's Malicona, there you happy?!" She asked. "No." Saskotaro answered. "Why not?!" Malicona asked. "Hm, let me think. Ah yes, my wing is getting ripped apart by this tree." He said.

Malicona got up and said, "And I thought boy's never needed help." Saskotaro glared at her. "Let's stop th lecturing and get to the part where you help me already." He suggested. "Gladly." Malicona laughed. With a flick of her tail the branch was cut and Saskotaro found that his wing was free. "Finally." He said. He stretched his wing out and winced a bit at the pain.

"So what are you here for huh?" Malicona asked. Saskotaro stiffened. "I'm here to find the rebellion. I... I came to join them." He said. Malicona smiled. "Why didn't you say so in the first place?!" She asked. Saskotaro shrugged. "You never asked." He said. Malicona rolled her eyes again. "Well come on I'll show you to them!" She said. They both took off and flew into the trees. But all the while Malicona wondered about Saskotaro. "Who is he? Where'd he come from? Will Jhem approve?" She could only guess...


Hmmmm...it's good...but not as good as me~ xD Jk jk jk jk~ Anyway, uhhh...it's nice, but a lot of editing could be done...same with Chapter 1, but that's what you expect the writing perfectionist to say~ xD


Hahaha ! i have 10000+ more point than you XD


*sigh* Yeah...Even though I'm a perfectionist, nobody is reading for weeks...life is unfair...especially since people don't know I have new chapters out...>.<


Well ... Mimi-chii Cr isn't the only site to put your story at ~


I know Lena-chii~!!! But that's just it!!! Everybody on Deviantart.com thinks that stories are crap or not worth reading!!! It hurts to know they won't even give it a try!!!! Not even even people on CR give it a try!!! I'm never get noticed at this rate!!! It hurts to know that my own best friend on Deviantart gets TONS of attention!!! And she's not even a writer!!! She's an artist!!!! Even on MY website she gets more attention than me!!!! I know she's just starting out!!! But she has amazing story ideas and mine are bullshit!!!!!!!!!!!! *cries* My BFF is taking my dream away from me!!! I know she doesn't mean to, but it hurts!!! Even my sisters get more attention than me!!!! My sister Rebecca has one of the most beautiful singing voices I've ever heard, Vicki's artwork POPS out of her paper, and my stories DON'T get imagined or get you thinking at all!!!!!! *cries really hard* I don't care if I sound like a spoiled brat, I want people to notice me!!!!!!!


First about your friend your jealous of her , because she have things you don't ~ and that's just wrong, A person have to accept of what he have right now , If i am right your talking about Meli-chan , i saw her drawings , but i also noticed there almost the same people who comment to her .. so what that means ?? She found with her own efforts people who can support her , and comment on her drawing. If you want to be noticed do things that people notice you , or how you really feel about it , for example in my class there's is a lot of people smarter than me and i want to be like them or more noticed , but that's just wrong because i don't think a person can get smart in 5 seconds , they work hard until they reach the top , and you should do that to . If you truly love writing stories , just keep writing stories , i know you will think how much will take ?? , and did you sisters born with such ability or tired hard to reach for their dream ?



*sigh* I guess they wprked hard to get to where they are now...But I've been working hard to!!!! My Dad thinks I've haven't thought about what I want to be, but I'm 100% sure I want to be a writer! I've told him that tons of times, but he's only interested in my sister Rebecca! He doesn't even pay attention to Vicki anymore either! I'm not paid attention to by him because I'm not diabetic and they are! *silence* I'm sorry...I started talking about my sisters and my dad...I've been upset about him lately...I guess that's why I purposely cut himself in the shower with a razor...>.< I thought it would release some bad blood out of my system...*sigh* please don't tell anyone I purposely slit myself to lose blood...I know it was a bad thing. *starts crying* It seems...like my whole life in surrounded by hatred, and lonliness...no wonder I have no friends in school...I'm kind of a freak...a brainless freak who thinks she can release sadness by sliting her own body...I feel like I have nothing to live for...my best friend doesn't talk to me ever since I returned...I'm always the one who start conversations...it's like she's forgotten about me...I have no friends in school...my my and dad act like I'm not important...especially my dad...he hates me...even my grandma hates me...but she's coming to visit next week while my mom is on her Alaskan cruise, and she was angry that my mom had a third child...my oldest sister was supposed to have a twin, but her twin died before she was born...Rebecca was supposed to be the third, and my grandma said no more, but it was only 2, and my mom wanted three daughters...so...if Vicki's twin hadn't died, I wouldn't be here...*cries* I feel like I'm not wanted...or I'm just a replacement...for the twin that died...


Unfortunately I can't feel what your feeling , or what are you going through , I do wish to become you , I wish i was in your family as member to experience on what happen every day , i wish i am your twin sister for real , so i can make you feel comfortable every time you get sad , or your REAL BFF in real life , so i can call you everyday. or if we are in the same school so we can make some gossip XD , or what friends usually share. I REALLY do wish to meet you Jessica , because even i am your friend i can't help you when your in need , or when you about to cry, or anything at all ... I think i feel REALLY sad because your sad >.< , but DON'T YOU DARE GIVE UP ! OR I WILL HATE YOU FOR REST OF MY LIFE! My twiniee sister is Strong , Mutli-talented , cute , nice , lovely , and can offer you help when you need somebody to be with you , you are my friend and i won't let you go. you ARE NEEDED !! or WANTED ! , because i need to stay with me ! , if you not there or dead , or i can't contact you anymore i will cry ...~ so please ! don't give up and keep trying !


Lena...why are you always saying that stuff? Why are you always making happy enough to cry...? Why do you keep telling me to never quit, and keep on top of my dreams? Why...? Why do you always make me feel loved and confident when I talk to you? For some reason...I feel like you are the friend I am missing at school and at home...I always know there is something missing, and feel like there is a certain person I can't live without all the time...and...I think that person is you Lena-chii...you always make me happy, sad, and angry...all at different times...but...I could never STAY sad or angry with you...but I can always stay happy, because you are the brightest star in my night sky...you are my pocket money filled with love and life...you are the sister-like person I can't live without...you are my...best friend Lena...if I lose you...I lose everything...same with Aya-chii, Tasha-chan, and all the other special friends in my profile...you are my sparkling stars in the palms of my hands...you are light...you are my...bestest friend in the whole world Lena...I know Tasha has been my childhood best friend for as logn as I can remember, and she is my bestest friend too...but...I feel like we're growing apart...like we don't know each other anymore...I hate to say this but...I feel like you know me better than Tasha...it seems like Tasha has made better friends than me in Edmonton, and that's fine with me...but...I've had some too...and not just any friends...sisters...brothers and sisters in the name of God almighty...^^ I really feel like we will meet someday Lena-chii...I can hear God saying this to me...^^ *huggz while crying* You are one of the best things that has ever happened to me Lena...one of the best moments in my life, was meeting you...


To tell the truth when you said Meli-chii is coming to your house i was scared that you will stop talking to me (when meli-chii at your house) or be apart a little , but i know in a person heart .. there is special place for everybody .I never knew thats how you feel about me , but maybe we can meet each other when i travel to England ( After finishing collage) so i can complete studying there as a Graphic designer and stalk my brother 24/7 ~, Wana make a promise ? Let's promise each other to go the same University (I hope that's what's it's called when you complete you Collage studying) , and meet each other there ~ it's seems as BIG promise to do or make , but I want to study with you ~ , I am serious ~ maybe just maybe if we CAN study together that will be GREAT .

Here's a pact for our friendship :

1. Never give up in the dreams we want it to happen.
2. Meet each other when we grow up.
3. TRY to study together
4. When the chance comes we will start writing hand written letters
6. Trust each other
7.Punch and kill anybody who hurt us or anybody we care about.
8.DON'T lose your good , nice side EVER !



I Will add more and give to you when I am finish with it ~ ^^



*sigh* I'd love to meet you Lena...more than anything...and when we're finished studying in college for our dreams, maybe we can visit Japan~ Just the two of us~ ^^ We can have a 2-3 week vacation and visit every wonderous place in Japan together~ ^^


That would be GREAT!! , I will defiantly go to Japan after college ~ so that a promise okay ?~! , Both of us will make our dreams true and never give up and go to Japan when we grow up ~ So now this promise is our little secret



Of course!!! ^^ *huggz* Our little secret to do our best to finish school, go to university/college, reach our dreams, and go to Japan for a few weeks to celebrate our accomplishments~ ^^ *holds out pinky finger* Let's make this a BFF forever promise, just the two of us~ ^^


But people will read it since we are talking in group forum >.< , Yup *joins your pinky finger* Best Friends Forever promise !


Hahaha~ That's true~ ^^ I already made the list of promises, I'll send it to you when it's done~ ^^


Okay i will try to write the whole Friendship pact in the weekend ~ both of us will ~ ^^
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Chapter 2: Enter Saskotaro

Malicona lay her head down on her hooves, eyes focused on the dirt and narrowed. " your request was denied again huh?" Evana said as she glided to her side. "What's it to you?" Malicona mumbled. Evana smiled and looked at her. "You know, I don't think it's right." She said. Malicona's eyes lit up with curiosity. "Don't think what's right?" She asked. Evana's smile was brighter. "To keep you here. You deserve to see the world. Well, at least a piece of it." Evana said. "Really?!" Malicona said excitement flowing through her. Evana nodded. Then Malicona's expression toned down. "But what about Jhem?" She asked looking in her direction. Evana put a hand to her perfect lips and flicked her tail around. "Mums the word. I won't tell a soul." She whispered. Malicona sprang to her feet and stretched her wings out. "Your the best Evana!" She said.

Malicona was just rushing out the back way when Evana galloped to her side. "Wait one more thing." She said. "What?" Malicona asked. Evana went over to her and said, "Don't fly to high, keep to the tree's." Malicona smiled. "You hve nothing to worry about!" She assured her. Evana smiled then saw Jhemanithsai coming in. "Hurry go!" She said. Malicona nodded and glided out of the cave and into the open air.

With one heart beat, she was in the air and gliding gracefully through the tree's. For her first time flying, she was pretty good. She took a deep breath and really stretched her wings out. "Ah, this is great!" She laughed. The leaves from the trees brushed against her fur and the sun danced on her horns. She had never felt so alive in her life. And sh had just gotten to a large feild when she heard someone or something, groan.

"Gah!" It growled. Malicona landed on a near by ledge and looked down upon the creature from a distance. "What is he doing?" She thought. The creature had gotten it's over sized wing stuck in the branches of a near by oak tree. Malicona could only stare in amazement at how perfect he looked. But at the same time she could she a couple scars. Malicona had decided he wasn't much of a threat in this condition. So she casually glided down onto one of the trees branches to get a closer look."Hey, isn't the point of flying not to get your wings stuck?" She asked with sarcasm in her voice. The creature rolled his eyes and looked up. "How about you stop being a smart ass and leave me alone." He said. Clearly he had no sence of humor. "Well excuse me Mr. helpless." Malicona teased. "Don't you have somewhere to go?" The creature asked impatiently. "Naw, not unless you like rules." Malicona said. The creature snorted. "Who are you anyway." Malicona asked. The creature, obviously taken by surprise answered with a grunt. "My name is Saskotaro. And who are you? twedle dumb or twedle dumber?" Malicona rolled her eyes, "oh hardeharhar." She said. "Well are you going to tell me or not?" Saskotaro asked. Malicona shrugged. "If you don't I can always call you-" "Ok ok!" Malicona cut in. "It's Malicona, there you happy?!" She asked. "No." Saskotaro answered. "Why not?!" Malicona asked. "Hm, let me think. Ah yes, my wing is getting ripped apart by this tree." He said.

Malicona got up and said, "And I thought boy's never needed help." Saskotaro glared at her. "Let's stop th lecturing and get to the part where you help me already." He suggested. "Gladly." Malicona laughed. With a flick of her tail the branch was cut and Saskotaro found that his wing was free. "Finally." He said. He stretched his wing out and winced a bit at the pain.

"So what are you here for huh?" Malicona asked. Saskotaro stiffened. "I'm here to find the rebellion. I... I came to join them." He said. Malicona smiled. "Why didn't you say so in the first place?!" She asked. Saskotaro shrugged. "You never asked." He said. Malicona rolled her eyes again. "Well come on I'll show you to them!" She said. They both took off and flew into the trees. But all the while Malicona wondered about Saskotaro. "Who is he? Where'd he come from? Will Jhem approve?" She could only guess...


Hmmmm...it's good...but not as good as me~ xD Jk jk jk jk~ Anyway, uhhh...it's nice, but a lot of editing could be done...same with Chapter 1, but that's what you expect the writing perfectionist to say~ xD


Hahaha ! i have 10000+ more point than you XD


*sigh* Yeah...Even though I'm a perfectionist, nobody is reading for weeks...life is unfair...especially since people don't know I have new chapters out...>.<


Well ... Mimi-chii Cr isn't the only site to put your story at ~


I know Lena-chii~!!! But that's just it!!! Everybody on Deviantart.com thinks that stories are crap or not worth reading!!! It hurts to know they won't even give it a try!!!! Not even even people on CR give it a try!!! I'm never get noticed at this rate!!! It hurts to know that my own best friend on Deviantart gets TONS of attention!!! And she's not even a writer!!! She's an artist!!!! Even on MY website she gets more attention than me!!!! I know she's just starting out!!! But she has amazing story ideas and mine are bullshit!!!!!!!!!!!! *cries* My BFF is taking my dream away from me!!! I know she doesn't mean to, but it hurts!!! Even my sisters get more attention than me!!!! My sister Rebecca has one of the most beautiful singing voices I've ever heard, Vicki's artwork POPS out of her paper, and my stories DON'T get imagined or get you thinking at all!!!!!! *cries really hard* I don't care if I sound like a spoiled brat, I want people to notice me!!!!!!!


First about your friend your jealous of her , because she have things you don't ~ and that's just wrong, A person have to accept of what he have right now , If i am right your talking about Meli-chan , i saw her drawings , but i also noticed there almost the same people who comment to her .. so what that means ?? She found with her own efforts people who can support her , and comment on her drawing. If you want to be noticed do things that people notice you , or how you really feel about it , for example in my class there's is a lot of people smarter than me and i want to be like them or more noticed , but that's just wrong because i don't think a person can get smart in 5 seconds , they work hard until they reach the top , and you should do that to . If you truly love writing stories , just keep writing stories , i know you will think how much will take ?? , and did you sisters born with such ability or tired hard to reach for their dream ?



*sigh* I guess they wprked hard to get to where they are now...But I've been working hard to!!!! My Dad thinks I've haven't thought about what I want to be, but I'm 100% sure I want to be a writer! I've told him that tons of times, but he's only interested in my sister Rebecca! He doesn't even pay attention to Vicki anymore either! I'm not paid attention to by him because I'm not diabetic and they are! *silence* I'm sorry...I started talking about my sisters and my dad...I've been upset about him lately...I guess that's why I purposely cut himself in the shower with a razor...>.< I thought it would release some bad blood out of my system...*sigh* please don't tell anyone I purposely slit myself to lose blood...I know it was a bad thing. *starts crying* It seems...like my whole life in surrounded by hatred, and lonliness...no wonder I have no friends in school...I'm kind of a freak...a brainless freak who thinks she can release sadness by sliting her own body...I feel like I have nothing to live for...my best friend doesn't talk to me ever since I returned...I'm always the one who start conversations...it's like she's forgotten about me...I have no friends in school...my my and dad act like I'm not important...especially my dad...he hates me...even my grandma hates me...but she's coming to visit next week while my mom is on her Alaskan cruise, and she was angry that my mom had a third child...my oldest sister was supposed to have a twin, but her twin died before she was born...Rebecca was supposed to be the third, and my grandma said no more, but it was only 2, and my mom wanted three daughters...so...if Vicki's twin hadn't died, I wouldn't be here...*cries* I feel like I'm not wanted...or I'm just a replacement...for the twin that died...


Unfortunately I can't feel what your feeling , or what are you going through , I do wish to become you , I wish i was in your family as member to experience on what happen every day , i wish i am your twin sister for real , so i can make you feel comfortable every time you get sad , or your REAL BFF in real life , so i can call you everyday. or if we are in the same school so we can make some gossip XD , or what friends usually share. I REALLY do wish to meet you Jessica , because even i am your friend i can't help you when your in need , or when you about to cry, or anything at all ... I think i feel REALLY sad because your sad >.< , but DON'T YOU DARE GIVE UP ! OR I WILL HATE YOU FOR REST OF MY LIFE! My twiniee sister is Strong , Mutli-talented , cute , nice , lovely , and can offer you help when you need somebody to be with you , you are my friend and i won't let you go. you ARE NEEDED !! or WANTED ! , because i need to stay with me ! , if you not there or dead , or i can't contact you anymore i will cry ...~ so please ! don't give up and keep trying !


Lena...why are you always saying that stuff? Why are you always making happy enough to cry...? Why do you keep telling me to never quit, and keep on top of my dreams? Why...? Why do you always make me feel loved and confident when I talk to you? For some reason...I feel like you are the friend I am missing at school and at home...I always know there is something missing, and feel like there is a certain person I can't live without all the time...and...I think that person is you Lena-chii...you always make me happy, sad, and angry...all at different times...but...I could never STAY sad or angry with you...but I can always stay happy, because you are the brightest star in my night sky...you are my pocket money filled with love and life...you are the sister-like person I can't live without...you are my...best friend Lena...if I lose you...I lose everything...same with Aya-chii, Tasha-chan, and all the other special friends in my profile...you are my sparkling stars in the palms of my hands...you are light...you are my...bestest friend in the whole world Lena...I know Tasha has been my childhood best friend for as logn as I can remember, and she is my bestest friend too...but...I feel like we're growing apart...like we don't know each other anymore...I hate to say this but...I feel like you know me better than Tasha...it seems like Tasha has made better friends than me in Edmonton, and that's fine with me...but...I've had some too...and not just any friends...sisters...brothers and sisters in the name of God almighty...^^ I really feel like we will meet someday Lena-chii...I can hear God saying this to me...^^ *huggz while crying* You are one of the best things that has ever happened to me Lena...one of the best moments in my life, was meeting you...


To tell the truth when you said Meli-chii is coming to your house i was scared that you will stop talking to me (when meli-chii at your house) or be apart a little , but i know in a person heart .. there is special place for everybody .I never knew thats how you feel about me , but maybe we can meet each other when i travel to England ( After finishing collage) so i can complete studying there as a Graphic designer and stalk my brother 24/7 ~, Wana make a promise ? Let's promise each other to go the same University (I hope that's what's it's called when you complete you Collage studying) , and meet each other there ~ it's seems as BIG promise to do or make , but I want to study with you ~ , I am serious ~ maybe just maybe if we CAN study together that will be GREAT .

Here's a pact for our friendship :

1. Never give up in the dreams we want it to happen.
2. Meet each other when we grow up.
3. TRY to study together
4. When the chance comes we will start writing hand written letters
6. Trust each other
7.Punch and kill anybody who hurt us or anybody we care about.
8.DON'T lose your good , nice side EVER !



I Will add more and give to you when I am finish with it ~ ^^



*sigh* I'd love to meet you Lena...more than anything...and when we're finished studying in college for our dreams, maybe we can visit Japan~ Just the two of us~ ^^ We can have a 2-3 week vacation and visit every wonderous place in Japan together~ ^^


That would be GREAT!! , I will defiantly go to Japan after college ~ so that a promise okay ?~! , Both of us will make our dreams true and never give up and go to Japan when we grow up ~ So now this promise is our little secret



Of course!!! ^^ *huggz* Our little secret to do our best to finish school, go to university/college, reach our dreams, and go to Japan for a few weeks to celebrate our accomplishments~ ^^ *holds out pinky finger* Let's make this a BFF forever promise, just the two of us~ ^^


But people will read it since we are talking in group forum >.< , Yup *joins your pinky finger* Best Friends Forever promise !


Hahaha~ That's true~ ^^ I already made the list of promises, I'll send it to you when it's done~ ^^


Okay i will try to write the whole Friendship pact in the weekend ~ both of us will ~ ^^


Ok~ ^^ I just finished my homework, so I'm about to finish Chapter 3 of The Boys' and Girls' Club, so read it when u have the time, because I'll be posting it today~ ^^ Oh, and I added a new Miralce Rivers Chapter 13, and the first Chapter to a Detective Fan Fcition~ ^^
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