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what do u think(read the description before answering)
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Posted 7/27/09 , edited 7/27/09
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A gentle word like a spark of light,
Illuminates my soul
And as each sound goes deeper,
It's YOU that makes me whole

There is no corner, no dark place,
YOUR LOVE cannot fill
And if the world starts causing waves,
It's your devotion that makes them still

And yes you always speak to me,
In sweet honesty and truth
Your caring heart keeps out the rain,
YOUR LOVE, the ultimate roof

So thank you my Love for being there,
For supporting me, my life
I'll do the same for you, you know,
My Beautiful, Darling my love.


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Posted 7/27/09
Hmm, I'm not really into those kinds of poems
i think the punctuation on that piece needs some fixing though and the red text kind of threw me off

aside from that, i think its ok

Btw, this is kind of a personal thread ._.

Posted 7/27/09
No personal threads allowed. Post in one of the Fan Fiction section threads instead

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