[Fanfiction] Tiramisu With You
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F / USA. nuff said.
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Posted 8/24/09 , edited 8/24/09

Hello! GE here again, Some of you here might remember my older fanfiction, (my very first one) Tiramisu With You! But Over the years I've become a better writer, I decided to create a Remake Version (Trying to re-write it better) I'll try to keep the characters the same but there will be quite a few changes. Sorry if theres any spelling errors. ^^;;;


Okay... Here we go!
Chapter 1- New Beginnings? Star Class's New Surprise!



Comments appreciated, but don't be mean! =_= Come back for chapter 2!
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Posted 9/6/09
Its pretty good! i noticed some grammar errors like tree for three and spear for spare but it was good other than that. To make it more intesresting I would make some of the orginal characters come in as well. Other than that, keep writing id love to read more
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