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Posted 12/18/09 , edited 12/1/10
Ah, sorry.


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Posted 12/19/09
Aweesome kinda reminds me of Yu-Gi-Oh!
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22 / M / a dimension where...
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Posted 12/19/09
wow.............it reallly goood u should make more =)
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Posted 12/19/09
i like it, make more...
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Posted 12/20/09
lol i l<333 it i made one but it suuuckss lol ^.^
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Posted 12/22/09
It's relly cool but to predictble for me...you should definetly continue and make it so theat it will be full of surprises, I like surpriseing turn of events...but that's just me.
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26 / M / In my country, my...
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Posted 12/24/09
cool, a fantasy story. Kinda remind me of some anime I don't know, or I've forgot :0
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Posted 1/4/10
Great, do continue
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Posted 1/7/10
ILOVEIT <3 Thanks for showing me the link here (: I can't wait for the manga release xD
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Posted 3/9/10 , edited 3/9/10
Very interesting. There are some noticeable grammar mistakes but you've stated that.

The way the speeches have been laid out makes it rather irritating to read. For example, Waizurii could be talking one moment and then right after he finishes, Kazuma's speech appears on the same line. But if this was just copied and pasted on here and the original text showed that the speeches didn't appear on the same line, then that's understandable.

It is very imaginative and I can see that the plot is already starting to take shape.

Keep up the good work and hopefully, we can see more of this.
Posted 3/24/10
awesome! You should try implementing complications in the plot to twist up a little and make the reader eager to keep reading forever.
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Posted 6/19/10
Great story babe =) who said it's boring
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