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This story is my gift to this group!! Happy holidays!!

Characters:

Valerie Edovas


Valerie Edovas (party mode)


Peter Demanarig


Peter Demanarig (when he asked Valerie out)


Lawrence Edovas


Leo Strombulov


James Pugachev


Anna Tecson


Anna Tecson (party)


Ghost of Christmas Past


Wilhelmina Lombard


Ghost of Christmas Present


Pauline Demanarig


Daffodil Demanarig


Gabrielle Demanarig


Jenny Demanarig


Jenny Demanarig(happy)


Conrad Adenauer


Lance Karimov


Caroline Saradinacki-Edovas


Ignorance


Want


Spirit of Christmas Yet to Come


Eric Kazansky


Geo Stukov

Act I: The ghost of Anna Tecson
It's Christmas Eve; 5 years to the day after the death of her business rival Anna Tecson, Valerie Edovas and her downtrodden assistant Peter Demanarig are at work in Valerie's clothes store. Valerie's brother, Lawrence, arrives with seasonal greetings and an invitation to Christmas dinner.

Lawrence: Sister dearest, perhaps you want to join us for Christmas....
Valerie: No way!!!! Christmas is a fraud and an excuse for people to drown their sorrows by buying stuff! I mean, really! At least people like, go to my store to buy clothes that will give them the illusion of beauty!
You get one year older but not an hour richer!

Lawrence: Are you sure you don't want to join us?
Valerie: Bah humbug!

Lawrence leaves, but he is still optimistic that his sister will come to love Christmas. Valerie likewise rebuffs two gentlemen collecting charitable donations for the poor.

Charitable gentlemen: Let us introduce ourselves!!
Leo: I’m Leo Strombulov
James: I’m James Pugachev
Charitable gentlemen: We represent the local charity. Merry Christmas! Ooh, if it's okay with you, can we please have some donations to help the poor?
Valerie: If they would rather die [than go there], they had better do it, and decrease the surplus population.
Leo: Are you serious?
Valerie; Obviously, you dingbats!!
James: But it’s Christmas. Surely you can donate something…
Valerie: Shut up and leave, you leeching pigs!!

The gentlemen leave, rather disappointed. As she and her assistant prepare to leave, she grudgingly permits Peter one day's paid holiday the following day.

Peter: May I have a day off tomorrow? It’s Christmas and all…
Valerie: You can have that day off tomorrow, but you must come 3 hours earlier than usual, or else I'm gonna deduct your salary!

Valerie returns home to her small house beside her clothes store and a series of supernatural experiences begins. Her doorknocker appears to transform into Anna's face; a "locomotive hearse" seems to mount the dark stairs ahead of her; the pictures on the wallpaper in her room show Anna's face. Finally all the bells in the house ring loudly, there are a clanking of chains in the bed and on the floor, and the ghost of Anna passes through the closed door into the room.

Valerie: Show yourself! Who in the hell is there?
Ghost of Anna: Valerie!!!!!
Valerie: Who in the hell are you?
Anna's ghost: I'm your business rival that died 5 years ago in the shipping accident, you idiot!
Valerie: Anna! How come you're here when I don't believe in ghosts?
Anna's ghost: Well Valerie, I have come to warn you about something!
If you don't change your ways, you'll suffer my fate, but worse! You'll walk the earth eternally burdened in chains, invisible among people! You'll see suffering that you could've prevented, but you will become powerless to intervene!! Don't worry your little head, for you will get a chance.

Valerie: What in the hell do you mean?
Anna's ghost: These chains are my sins in life. This one was when I tricked people into buying my products, and that one I got from cheating you, and there are many more.
Valerie: I don’t see these chains on me, but I see those things on you!
Anna’s ghost: I see those chains. And those things aren’t just hideous, but very monstrous!
Valerie: Idiot! I like these chains! Have you heard of bling? Oh wait, you’re already dead! It’s a new fashion statement, idiot!
Anna's ghost: I have arranged your only chance of redemption. 3 spirits will visit you on successive hours on this night, and they may help you change for the better!
Valerie: Does this mean I’m saved or something? Then again, why do I need saving?
Anna’s ghost: You’re stubborn, aren’t you? Look, if you heed their advices, then you will be saved. You really need saving. It’s too late for me, but not for you!

As Anna leaves, Valerie gets a nightmare glimpse of the tormented specters that drift unseen among the living, and now shattered, she falls into bed.

Valerie: It sucks to be them, but good thing I’m not them!!

Act II: The Ghost of Christmas Past
The Ghost of Christmas Past appears in Valerie's room as the clock strikes 1. It is a young lad, wearing a simple t-shirt with matching jeans.

Ghost of Christmas Past: Hello!
Valerie: You're the first one, right?
Ghost of Christmas Past: Yes! Now I'll show you something.
Valerie: How?
Ghost of Christmas Past: Don’t be shy, just come with me please. Don’t worry you’ll be safe.

He leads Valerie on a journey to some of her past Christmases, where events shaped her life and character. She sees her first Christmases, where she enjoys it with her family.

Valerie: Where are we?
Ghost of Christmas Past: To be honest, I’m showing you that your past is like. Frankly, you had it good early on. We can see them, but they can’t see us.
Valerie: True, I was rather fortunate. To be honest, I regret what I had to done to my brother.
Ghost of Christmas Past: Indeed.

They revisit a merry Christmas party given by Wilhelmina Lombard, Valerie's kind fashion instructor.

Wilhelmina Lombard: It’s Christmas Eve, and let’s all party!!!!
Anna: Hey!! Congrats on the promotion!!
Valerie: Thanks!!!

The entire company parties, and everyone, from the janitors to Wilhelmina herself all dance and celebrate their Christmas party.

Valerie: That’s Ms. Lombard. She taught me all I know about fashion, and management!! A boss and teacher like that are rare, and she is the best. She can make work into something good, or drudgery.
Ghost of Christmas Past: Now I know where you get it.
Valerie: She’s like that, because she’s like, looking out for us.
Ghost of Christmas Past: You should have listened to her more though.

Finally, she is reminded how her love of money and snobbishness lost her the love of her life, Peter.

Peter: I have been waiting for the right time for me to say this. Valerie, will you go out with me?
Valerie: There is no damn way! I have more good-looking and richer suitors than you! You stupid, poor peasant!! We’re not in the same social class!! You think you have a chance with me? No way!! Get out of here!! Loser!!

Valerie leaves the scene with an arrogant sense of happiness and accomplishment, whereas Peter walks home in a melancholy manner.

Valerie: Poor Peter... What the heck have I done?
Ghost of Christmas Past: Don't go blaming me for your choices!
Valerie: Damn it!

Furious, Valerie turns on the spirit, tries to snuff it like a candle with its cap, and finds herself crumpling up in her bed sheets and wakes up feeling remorseful.

Valerie: Was that a dream? What the hell am I doing talking to myself? I need some sleep.

Act III: The Ghost of Christmas Present

Valerie wakes at the stroke of one, confused to find it is still night. After a time she rises and finds the second spirit, the Ghost of Christmas Present, in an adjoining room, on a throne made of Christmas food and drink. This spirit, a great genial man in a green coat lined with fur.

Valerie: You're the second spirit, right?

Ghost of Christmas Present: Yes! I'm the Ghost of Christmas Present, and I'll show you something.

The spirit takes Valerie through the bustling streets of Yerevan on the current Christmas morning, sprinkling the essence of Christmas onto the happy populace.
They observe the meager but happy Christmas celebrations of the Demanarigs, and the sweet nature of Peter's adopted daughter Jenny, and when the Spirit foretells an early death for the child if things remain unchanged, Valerie is distraught.

Gabrielle: Here he comes!!

Pauline and Daffodil are finished preparing for the celebration. Peter then comes home from work.

Daffodil: Our brother’s a nice guy!! He’s working even on Christmas Day just to give us a better future.
Pauline: Yeah, ever since our parents died.

The Ghost of Christmas Present lectures Valerie.

Ghost of Christmas Present: Do you know he sticks by you in your company?
Valerie: I had no idea that Peter is working to let his sisters study. I thought he lives alone. He really lives with his sisters.
Ghost of Christmas Present: Yes! And you are always mistreating him!
Valerie: I had no idea! Cut me some slack!

She is shown what others think of her: the Demanarigs toast her, but reluctantly, and "a shadow was cast over the party for a full five minutes".

Peter: Let's make a toast to the founder of this feast, Valerie Edovas!
Pauline: Toast indeed! She never gives you your proper wages!
Daffodil: I think you should demand a raise! That, and better treatment! I mean look at you! She treats you worse than a pack mule!
Gabrielle: Please brother dearest, demand for a raise! Do it for Jenny!!
Peter: I can never do that! I care about Jenny, but the ends never justifies the means!
Gabrielle: You really love her, don't you?
Peter: Yes.
Jenny: God bless us all!!!

He then shows her to Peter’s adopted daughter, Jenny.

Ghost of Christmas Present: Look at his adopted daughter. He is single, but due to sympathy, he went to the orphanage two years ago and adopted Jenny. She is suffering from rickets, and if you don't change your ways, she'll die in a year! You and your "If they would rather die [than go there], they had better do it, and decrease the surplus population." speech is wrong! No one is worthless or undeserving to live! Everyone has a right to life and you must remember that always! Got that?

The spirit then takes Valerie to her brother's place. Lawrence and his friends gently mock her miserly and snobbish behavior at their Christmas party, but Lawrence maintains his younger sister's potential for change, and Valerie demonstrates a childlike enjoyment of the celebrations.

Lawrence: Christmas is a fraud and an excuse for people to drown their sorrows by buying stuff! I mean, really! At least people go to my store to buy clothes that will give them the illusion of beauty! You get one year older but not an hour richer!

Lawrence's friends all laugh at how Lawrence mocks Valerie's behavior.

Lawrence: I think Valerie will change.
Conrad: Are you sure? She's a damn snob!
Lance: Yeah! She treats her assistant like a dog!
Caroline: Poor Peter... I mean, she rejects him brutally and now she tortures him?
Lawrence: Come on, she will change for the better trust me.
Lance: Ok... So, let's celebrate!

As the party gets started and the people in it dance, so too does Valerie.

Ghost of Christmas Present: My time draws to a close, hence I must go. But before I do, please beware of two children, named “Ignorance” and “Want”!

He then shows her the two children the she must beware of.

Valerie: Ok.

At the end of the visitation, the bell strikes three. The Ghost of Christmas Present vanishes and the third spirit appears to Valerie.

Act IV: The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come

The Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come takes the form of a grim specter, robed in black and wielding a one-handed double-edged long broadsword.

Valerie: You're the one that shows the future, are you?
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Yes!
Valerie: Oh no!!!! You're the one that I'm most afraid of!
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: I'll show you something!!!!

The spirit shows Valerie a harrowing vision of a future Christmas. But first, the spirit takes Valerie to the fashion district of Yerevan, where they see two gentlemen talking about a death.

Eric: It's a damn shame that she is gone.
Geo: What shame!? That devil is gone!
Eric: I'll go when there is a lunch provided.
Geo: She's so cheap and snobby, you're not gonna get lunch at that funeral!
Eric: Heck, who would even go there anyway?
Geo: I know right?

Valerie: Whom are they talking about?
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Why tell you, when I can show you!

The spirit then takes Valerie to her own home, showing her a corpse of a dead woman in the bedroom.

Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: What are you waiting for? Unmask the corpse!
Valerie: I can't.
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Well, since you put it that way, I’ll show you to the Demanarigs.
Valerie: What happened? Tell me now!!
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Come with me, and I’ll show you.

Valerie is shown Peter Demanarig and his sisters mourning the passing of Jenny.

Gabrielle, Pauline and Daffodil: Well, now that Peter's job is gone, our hope of getting a good future is gone, and so is Jenny.

Peter returns home after he fails to find a job, again.

Peter: Well, you are all right. Because of this, I have no other choice than to join the Imperial Army.

Pauline: No!!!

Peter: But I must.

Valerie: Jenny is dead!!
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Now you see what had happened.

Valerie is then taken to an unkempt graveyard, where she is shown her own grave, and realizes that the dead woman of whom the others spoke ill was herself.

Valerie: Before I draw nearer to that stone to which you point, answer me one question. Are these the shadows of the things that Will be, or are they shadows of things that May be, only?
Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: It depends. If you want the latter to happen, then you shall change your ways for the better!
Valerie: Men’s courses will foreshadow certain ends, to which if persevered in, they must lead. But if the courses were departed from, the ends will change. Say it is thus with what you show me!
I am not the woman I was. I will not be the woman I must have been but for this intercourse. Why show me this, if I am past all hope! I will honor Christmas in my heart, and try to keep it all the year. I will learn from the past, live in the present and hope for the future. The Spirits of all Three shall strive within me. I will not shut out the lessons that they teach. Oh, tell me I may sponge away the writing on this stone!

Ghost of Christmas Yet to Come: Now then, my mission here, is done!

Valerie awakes to find that all three spirits have visited in just one night, and that it is Christmas morning.

Act V: Conclusion

Valerie changes her life and reverts to the generous, kind-hearted soul she was in her youth before she rejected Peter. She goes to the grocery and butcher and shops a lot of ingredients and sends them anonymously to the Demanarigs. She then meets the charity workers to pledge an impressive amount of money.

Valerie: Gentlemen!!
Leo: Run!! She’s here!!
Valerie: Wait!! I’m not here to cuss at both of you. I’m sorry for the way that I acted. I realized that being a snob is a bad thing.
James: You are Valerie Edovas, right?
Valerie: Yes. Besides, what good is there for me to do good when I’m dead?

She writes a check valued at 25,000 drachmas and gives it to them. She then spends Christmas Day with Lawrence and his wife Caroline, along with the Demanarigs. Lawrence and his wife arrive first.

Peter: Let me introduce you to Ms. Valerie’s brother Lawrence and his wife Caroline.
Lawrence and Caroline: Merry Christmas everybody!!

Valerie then arrives next.

Valerie: Merry Christmas everybody!!!!!
Caroline: I knew she had a good side!
Peter: My sisters, she is my boss, Ms.Valerie Edovas

As Caroline says that, Valerie blushes at the sight of Peter.

Lawrence: Now Valerie, do it!

Valerie approaches Peter.

Valerie: Peter, I have something to tell you. You'll be receiving a 13-month pay starting now, and you'll get a raise of 25%!!!
Peter: Oh, thank you. Now, let's toast to the founder of this feast, Ms. Valerie Edovas!!!!
Gabrielle, Daffodil, Pauline and Jenny: Thank you for all this!!!!
Valerie: That's not all! I know how I have treated all of you is wrong! Will you ever find it in your hearts to forgive me, especially Peter?
Lawrence, Caroline, Gabrielle, Daffodil, Pauline and Jenny: Ok, we forgive you.
Peter: I have always forgiven you!
Valerie: Peter, will you go out with me?
Peter: After all these years, I only have one answer to that question! Sure.
Jenny: Merry Christmas!! God bless us all!!!!

Valerie gains a reputation as a kind and generous woman who embodies the spirit of Christmas in her life. She has become a better woman, a better person, a better boss and a good girlfriend.

The end.

Disclaimer: This is just an adaptation of Charles Dickens' masterpiece, "A Christmas Carol", so this is not, in any way, plagiarism. If you think I'm lying, then just shut up and leave. I'm not forcing you to believe me.

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Posted 12/23/09
So wait is it still the same as it was last year or did you make changes to the storyline and such?
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ember1116 wrote:

So wait is it still the same as it was last year or did you make changes to the storyline and such?


It is the same as last year's but there are gonna be some changes, mostly cosmetic ones.
Posted 12/23/09
Ima read it soon >3
-tummy grumblesz-
:D

btw. like teh Jenny Demanarig gaia-thingy xD
LOL and teh (happy) one XD LOOKIE EVILLL!!
AHAHAH.
And Want =w=
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ay_bay_bay wrote:

Ima read it soon >3
-tummy grumblesz-
:D

btw. like teh Jenny Demanarig gaia-thingy xD
LOL and teh (happy) one XD LOOKIE EVILLL!!
AHAHAH.
And Want =w=


I used the orphan-type items from Gaia.
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My story is gone!!!! D:
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You should keep a copy of these things on a flashdrive or something so that if this happens again you can save them ^^
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ember1116 wrote:

You should keep a copy of these things on a flashdrive or something so that if this happens again you can save them ^^


Good thing I have copies hidden in different places.
Posted 12/24/09
I raed half of it XD

I dont even know If it IS half XD
''Peter: Let's make a toast to the founder of this feast, Valerie Edovas!''
stoped there//
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ILL READ MORE LATER
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Okay Koko-chan, I understand ya.
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Posted 12/26/09
i lalalove it~!
but it went too fast but it was still good!
good job! -thumbs up-
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chococooki wrote:

i lalalove it~!
but it went too fast but it was still good!
good job! -thumbs up-


Thanks Choco-chan.

As far as it goes, it's a lot simpler than the movie "A Christmas Carol". Then again, Scrooge has a dog there.
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Eww, are you talking about that new Disney Christmas Carrol?
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ur welcomeeee
and ur right! O.O i didnt know scrooge had a dog
but then again i never paid attention to my teacher reading the story to us
and i've never watched the movie too XD
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ember1116 wrote:

Eww, are you talking about that new Disney Christmas Carrol?


No, the old one, the animated version of the story. As I recall, Jim Carey is the guy who dubbed Scrooge in that particular movie.
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