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My Cherry Blossom

By Zozo-chan

Chapter 1: Let the Cherry Blossoms Bloom

When I was 6, my parents had a huge fight and divorced because my mother found out that my father was two-timing her. It was a fight that I would never forget because…because I saw it right there, front row, a sickening fight that can never be cured out of my head ever.

My father left with that other woman and that was the last time I saw him. His face, his smile, everything about him was long gone. Gone...gone...that word echoed throughout my head a million times as I waved good-bye to my father with a teardrop falling from my right eye. Shocked, more tears fell and I didn’t even notice. My mother hugged me tightly, blocking my view of my dad but her hug was somehow gentle with her soft body. She felt like a comfortable, fluffy pillow.

I could feel her saying to me, “It will be alright, don’t cry now, baby girl, there’s no need to cry.” And I fell asleep in her warm arms.

I never got over it and one day, I missed my dad so much that I ran away from home and searched for my dad throughout the neighborhood. He wasn’t there. I was confused because he never told me where he went. I was a confused 6 year old running throughout the neighborhood and I didn’t even know where I was going. I just kept running about with tears falling from my eyes until I stopped there… There, right in front of my amazed eyes were cherry blossom trees. I thought I was in a dream. The scenery was so beautiful yet so calm and relaxing, I thought of it as my mom and dad when we were all happy. But too late, all of that are long gone, adios, sayonara. Loads of tears ran down my face. I was in so much pain that I felt like dying…

Until a voice behind me asked, “What are you doing?”

I turned around and there right in front of me was a boy. Brown hair, gray eyes and he looked exactly my age. My tears were still running down my face, I couldn’t stop it.

“Why are you crying?” He asked me with a soft, gentle voice.

“I-I’m looking for my dad…” I answered timidly.

“Do you know where he is?”


“Then why are you looking for him if you don’t know where he is?” He stared at me with those soft, worried gray eyes of his.

“B-because I miss him…” I blushed as the wind blew through my long pink hair. My tears kept falling as I stared at him with my pink eyes and kept thinking, what is he up to?

“Silly girl, even if you miss him so much, you won’t be able to find him if you don’t know where he is.” He said as he laughed a bit.

My tears stopped, he somehow calmed me down. I was a bit happy seeing him laugh a bit but in my heart, in my broken heart, I will never stop crying in there for my father whom I seem to love very much. I was kind of happy as well to see him try to cheer me up.

I wiped my tears and said, “Thank you very much for trying to cheer me up but this pain in my heart will never heal. Thank you though.” I showed him my gratitude by curtsying and smiling at him.

“So,” he said, “what’s your name?”

“It’s Sakura, what’s yours?” I replied, blushing and the scenery turned magical, with leafs from the cherry blossom trees slowly falling.

“Kenta, call me Kenta.” He responded with a smile.

“So it’s Kenta, nice to meet you!” I said and held out my hand so we could shake hands.

“Nice to meet you too, Sakura.” Kenta said and held out his hand and shook it with mine.

It was a beautiful day that I would cherish and never forget. That day when I met Kenta, became his best friend, and the day when the cherry blossom trees bloomed. He helped me through the rough and sad times and I always helped him through his life too. We were BFF’s, best friends forever. Until 1 year passed and on that day, Kenta had to move. It was the last time I saw him…

“Kenta, please don’t leave!” I yelled out while crying so hard. This reminded me of when my dad was leaving, I hated it.

“I’m sorry, Sakura. But I have to move because my dad quit his job here and got a new job somewhere else. Please don’t cry…” Kenta said. I felt like I was going to break into a million pieces.

“But, but…” I stammered.

“Come on, Kenta!” Kenta’s dad called out to him.

“Give me a minute, dad!” Kenta yelled back.

My tears couldn’t, no, wouldn't stop running and I couldn’t stop thinking what would happen if Kenta was gone.

“Look, Sakura, it’s not as easy as it seems but…I have to go. Let’s make a promise, Sakura, which we will meet again one day and we’ll be together forever, promise?” He held out his pinky.

“Promise,” I said and pinky swore with him.

“Sakura, I love you.” He said and hugged me tightly with his soft arms and his gentle body. I was so surprised and touched of what he said to me. Is this a confession? I gripped onto Kenta’s shirt, wanting this hug to last forever.


“Good-bye, Sakura.” Kenta said and he let go of me.

I held out my hand to him but he faded away in my tears…I didn’t even have a chance to say back to him, “I love you too…”

Chapter 2: A New Beginning

I opened my eyelids and stretched out my arms. I checked the clock and found out that I might be late for school. I hurried and changed into my uniform and ran downstairs.

“Mom, you forgot to wake me up again! Now I might be late for school!” I complained.

“Well, it isn’t my fault, honey; you’re all grown up now. You got to learn to take care of yourself nowadays.” My mom said to me while cooking pancakes.

“Sorry mom, looks like I have to eat something else. Bye!” I said and kissed my mom on the cheek. I got toasted bread from the table and ate real fast. I got my lunch which is a bento my mom made for me and I stuffed it into my bag. I put on my shoes and ran out the front door with my bag in my right hand.

“That girl, now I’ll have to eat her food.” My mom said and sighed, looking at the pancakes she finished cooking.

Hi, I’m Sakura Watanabe and I go to Hokkaido High School. I’m in the 10th grade which means I’m 16 years old. It’s been 10 years since my dad left and it’s been 9 years since Kenta Sasaki left. I’m still depressed that my dad left but I still hope that one day, I would meet him again. I was sad that Kenta left but I got over that because every year, I hoped for him to come back but then I kept learning that he will never come back and that’s when I started a new life without him in it. I know that he was my first crush/love and that I never told him that I loved him, but I think that I still kind of do. But I stopped thinking about him because I have the most popular guy as my boyfriend. His name is Takeshi Yoshida and we’ve been going out since school started, which was a month ago. He’s 16 and also in the 10th grade but he’s in a different class. The school is filled with couples and we’ve been voted the cutest couple ever! But let’s get to the point, I like Takeshi and he likes me, you see? Isn’t that easy to say? W-

“Sakura-chan!” My new best friend named Tomoko Nakamura called out and ran to me.

“Good morning, Tomoko-chan.” I greeted with a smile.

“Good morning!” Tomoko replied with a cheery face. We began walking together and started talking about school.

“Oh and I heard there is going to be a new student in our class!” Tomoko said.

“There is?! Do you know if it’s a boy or a girl?” I asked, surprised.

“I heard that it’s a boy from rumors. All I know is that he’s in our class, he’s hot, and the entire girls who are boyfriend-less are ready to make him theirs! I really want to know how he looks like and what his name is!” Tomoko said as if she’d fallen in love with him already.

“Well, you can have him because I have the nicest, coolest, and most popular boyfriend ever!” I bragged.

“Thanks! And speaking of Takeshi, look who’s over there waiting for you!” Tomoko said, elbowing me for my attention and she pointed toward the front gate entrance. It was Takeshi waiting for me! I blushed as Tomoko pushed me and said, “Go to him, I’ll be watching!”

“O-okay…” I said as I blushed and walked toward him. I thought to myself. She sure is encouraging…

“Hm? Oh hi, Sakura! I’ve been waiting for you, come on, I’ll walk you to class.” Takeshi said and took my left hand.

“O-okay…” I said while still blushing, I felt like I was going to explode in happiness. We were right in front my classroom door. “Thanks…” I said with my face still red. I’m going to die, I’m going to die, and I am totally going to die… I kept on thinking that. “Well, see you later…” I looked away. I turned around and was about to open the door to my classroom.

But Takeshi said, “Okay then, see you later,” I turned around to face him and he gave me a quick peck on my left cheek. “Remember, I love you.” I was speechless; I didn’t get to answer him before he left. I went inside the classroom with my face all red.

“Good morning!” I weakly said with a weird smile. I walked to my seat and sat down.

“Sakura-chan, are you okay?” My friend named Midori asked.

“I don’t think so,” Midori’s older twin sister named Minako said. “She looks red in the face; do you have a fever, Sakura-chan?” Minako put her hand on my forehead.

“No, I don’t…but…Takeshi kissed me and told me he loves me…” I told them with my eyes wide open, still shocked. Minako removed her hand from my forehead.

“REALLY?! He did that?!” Midori and Minako asked with a curious and stunned voice. I nodded my head, blushing a lot.

“So cute! I wish someone told me that he loves me!” Midori said, daydreaming.

“Really cute, but a kiss? Just before class starts? That’s twice as cute!” Minako said and the twins started talking about how they wanted to be me.

The bell rang, everybody in my class went to their seats and the teacher entered with surprising news.

“Good morning class! Before we start working, I’d like to introduce a new student that will be here until graduation.” My teacher, a guy named Fujikage-sensei, said with a welcoming smile.

Oh yeah, I almost forgot that we have a new student. I wonder what he looks like. I thought and looked around the classroom and found out that he will be sitting next to me.

“Let’s welcome, Kenta Sasaki!” Fujikage-sensei said. A boy entered the classroom, but not just any boy, it was Kenta!

Kenta?! Why is here?! I never thought that he would come to this school and especially, he’s going to sit next to me! I never thought that we would meet again, how can this be?! Did he move back?! I wonder if he recognizes me… I thought while staring straight at him, recognizing that he’s all grown up.

“Hey, I’m Kenta Sasaki.” Kenta said with a slight smile.

To be continued...
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Aww. The good ol' boy meets girl plot. Kinda reminds me of Ai-Hime with the way they met... only the guy turned out to be her uncle. Awkward meet the parents night.

I'd love to see what happens next. How old are they supposed to be when they meet again?
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Hey i loved this... Tho i always loved love stories

You have a good pen. I liked the imaginary of ur expressing style. I can see it in my mind i like it when I am reading a book. I am a true book freak and i surely dont like everybook i read... I can say i am even picky with books... stories likewise.. and poems too...

But i really liked this. Its only one chapter but it pulled me into the story.

I am waiting for your next chapter.

Congrats with this one, and gambatte with the next!
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awww! glad u guys likee it!

@ godime: you'll see
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Ohohohoho. That's a nice twist. He comes back and the girl's already taken. I wonder what Kenta's gonna say about that. o3o

And another note.... you're writing a lot of 'actions', but I'm not really catching the 'personality' in the work. Lots of "I did this" and stuff. In first person writing, the characters thoughts shouldn't be expressed through actual 'thought' but in the narration because.... well, because they're the narrator. You catch my drift?

It's still loves, tho-- keep writing!
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ohhhh. i get wat u mean.
thankies for thee advice
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apart from what godime suggested which i think is a great advice (the only missing flavour in your writing) I can advice you one more thing and thats bcus i am the mod and its the first thing i noticed.

you should post your each chapter in a new post. adding it to ur previous post makes it harder for us to review and comment.

if you do that, we can comment each and every post of your new chapters without confusion and you wont have trouble figuring out which chapter are we talking about. you can check other stories to see what i mean. xxuseless-bulletsxx and kouta's stories will be helpful in that way.

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Chapter 3: Forgotten

The twins, Midori and Minako looked at each other then looked at Kenta and almost fainted because of his “hot” looks. All the girls were talking about him and I was the only one who stood silent in the classroom. The boys were all jealous and it looked like this one dude was staring at Kenta like he was in love at first sight…awkward! I tried my best to look away but seeing that Kenta is back is too thrilling! But somehow, I felt disappointed. I felt a different aura from Kenta, he didn’t seem like himself. What was it?

Hi, Sakura here! It’s been three weeks since Takeshi and I are started going out and about a month since school started. The surprising news is that Kenta is back and I am too embarrassed to see him. Let's cut to the end, even if Kenta is back, my love for Takeshi will never end...or will it? Oh my gosh! I hope I didn’t jinx it!

“Kenta, you will be sitting next to Watanabe-san,” Fujikage-sensei pointed to the seat next to me. I totally forgot that he was sitting to me. Kenta walked towards his seat and I dug my head into my arms so he wouldn’t see my face.

What the heck am I doing?! I blushed with curiosity. Maybe I don’t want Kenta to see the still immature me! But wait, I like Takeshi, don’t I?!

I raised my head out of my arms and saw Kenta sat down. When I looked at Midori and Minako’s way, they were giving me a “Kenta is mine” look. I eyed them in confusion; didn’t they know that I’m going out with Takeshi? But I’ve been friends with them since I was 6. I hit my head with my hand.

Of course! Midori and Minako had been friends with Kenta when we were little! Of course they would remember him! I gave the twins a thumb up and they nodded with glee. The twins looked at each other and fought through their minds for Kenta which I found weird but I guess it’s a twin thing.

Not paying attention to Fujikage-sensei, I stared at Kenta for a second. He was staring at me! I felt anxious, was there something on my face? I looked away in an instance and tried to pay attention to sensei. But strangely, I felt that Kenta was still gazing at me.

The bell finally rang; I quickly got up and walked away rapidly. Class was too long, especially with Kenta staring at me the whole time. Still walking, I looked behind me and saw that Kenta was following me! I walked faster but he did the same.

“Hey! Wait up!” Kenta called after me and I stopped to see what he wanted. “Hey, look out!” What did he mean by that?

“What?” I asked until a cart full of books for the library ran into me. Everybody gaped at the scene.

I didn’t remember what happened after that except for fainting and hearing Kenta yelling, “Hey! Are you alright?!”

I woke up asking, “Where am I?”

“You’re in the infirmary,” I heard a voice said that and easily recognized it. It was Kenta and he was sitting right next to me while I lied down on a bed. “You should be more careful, idiot.”

“Idiot?! You’re the idiot!” I angrily said and sat up from the bed. I was starting to get a headache from this dude. It might be more of a headache, maybe a migraine, but I still had enough energy to argue with him.

“What did I do?!” Kenta asked.

“What did you do?! You know what you did!” I responded irritably. “You made me stop all of a sudden and then a cart full of books hit me!”

“And how do you think you got here?” Kenta asked in a stern voice and I just stared at him. “I had to carry you and do you know how heavy you are?”

“I don’t know how heavy I am but…” I sort of calmed down, not finishing my sentence. I sighed as I rubbed my head.

“But?” Kenta asked in a soother voice.

“But thanks for carrying me here…” I smiled at him while blushing.

Kenta turned red and looked away, saying, “You’re welcome,”

“Anyways, what do you need from me?” I asked as I looked at the time.

“Ah, I was gonna ask you what time break ends…until the cart ran into you…” Kenta answered. “But now I know because I asked the nurse.”

“Oh, okay,” I looked at him. I hesitated for a while to say what I wanted to ask, but I got myself into asking it by blurting it out. “Um…do you remember me?”

“What? Sorry, what do you mean by that?” Kenta asked as he was looking straight at my face for an answer. That made me blush a little but I looked down so he wouldn’t see my red face.

“Um…I meant like in the past…Do you remember me from your past…?” I anxiously asked him. I waited for an answer, and closed my eyes tight because the mood in here was too weird.

“Sorry, I don’t remember anything about you…” Kenta laughed a bit, scratching the back of his head.

What?! How can he not remember me?! I was astonished by his response and looked up at his face in a quick second. I heard the door open and the curtains that put Kenta and I in privacy, was opened. It was Takeshi with a worried face. He was breathing hard, was he running?

“Takeshi-kun…” I said his name, surprised by his entrance.

“Sakura!” Takeshi came up to me and hugged me tightly. I hugged him back and he asked, “What happened to you?”

“It’s a long story…” I told him as he let go of me. I laughed a bit and suddenly remembered that Kenta was still here.

“Sorry to bother you guys, but I’m leaving now.” Kenta announced, waved at us, and walked away.

“Who was he?” Takeshi asked after we heard the door open then close.

“That was Kenta Sasaki, the new student.” I stated.

“Oh, the new student that everybody’s been talking about…” Takeshi said in a low, quiet voice. “Who cares about him, I’m so happy that you’re okay. I heard that you were in the infirmary so I came running.”

“Well, I’m okay, so there’s nothing to worry about,” I tried to cheer him up with my smile. Takeshi blushed like Kenta did, wait, what am I thinking? Kenta is not in my love topic! Erase! Erase!

“That’s good,” Takeshi said as he leaned forward and kissed me on the forehead.

“Yeah,” I agreed after he kissed me, and I put my forehead on his. I smiled with confidence of continuing this love. Or will this love end? Of course not! But what I’m curious about right now is about Kenta… How can he not remember me? Why is this curiosity of it important to me? Do I still like him or am I…am I actually falling for him again? Is this old love about to be reborn? I’m jinxing it again, gosh!!!

To be continued...
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Whoa. Epic improvement! I'm seeing a lot more of Sakura's character in this chapter. There's a few things with some sentences that make it sound a bit rushed, but other than that, I think its great.

On another note.... WHY, KENTA, WHY? Good thing Sakura has Takeshi to distract her or she'd be like this.... ---->
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The storyline seems kinda familiar. Its probably cause its got the girl meeting a childhood male friend, somewhat like Tonagura. But i noticed much improvement with the 3rd chapter. I also felt like some scenes were somewhat rushed.

This is just a suggestion, but maybe you may want to describe the other characters as well. like the twins' characteristics and actions, or the best friends more. like said, it felt somewhat rushed. Pretty much, just have the other characters act out their story's role so it doesn't overly focus on the three main characters.
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Chapter 4: Thoughts

After break:

“WATANABE-SAN!!!” Fujikage-sensei called for me for the fourth time.

“Huh?” I turned my attention to Fujikage-sensei. He sighed with exhaustion of yelling. All the students in the classroom turned their attention to the two of us.

“Can you please not space out during class?” He finally asked, staring at me seriously.

“I’ll try my best,” I told him but he didn’t have any confidence in my promise. He sighed again and that made some students giggle.

Why did I space out? Oh yeah…Kenta…how could he not remember me? I turned my head and stared at Kenta. He was following along in the reading for English. I looked away and sighed with disappointment.

Wait, why am I disappointed? I DO NOT LIKE KENTA! I’m just curious about how he doesn’t remember me, yeah, that’s a good objective! Hmmm… Maybe he was taken away by aliens and they deleted his memory… The thought made me tremble. No way, that would never happen… Maybe he just somehow forgot it? I took another look at Kenta. Maybe…

The bell rang and lunch began. I walked around the school, looking for a place to eat my bento and the twins, Midori and Minako popped out of no where which surprised me.

“Hey, Sakura-chan!” they greeted me, but I felt a faint anger in that greeting.

“Um, hi…” I greeted them back with curiosity. I looked at my surroundings. The nice breeze made the weather better; the sun shining down on us students was luminous and hot. Because of the gentle wind, it made the weather warm and cool. I heard students talking and saw couples cuddle which grossed me out even though Takeshi and I were near that point. I saw girlfriends giving their boyfriends a bento which made my stomach growl. I rubbed it in comfort and sighed in hunger. In all this, Takeshi had a student council meeting. I forgot to add that he was a part of it.

“I heard that Sasaki-san carried you to the infirmary during break,” Midori broke the silence, gripping on my arm hard with jealousy. I continued walking as the twins followed by my side. Midori was at my right side and Minako at my left. I took a moment before I answered to what she said but I snapped back into what was happening between us three instead of what was happening to others.

“Kenta? Oh, yeah, he did…” I replied, remembering about the accident. There was one chill that went down my spine but I think that was either the wind or Midori’s aura of jealousy that glowed dark red which I found devastating. I rubbed my eyes to see if it was just a hallucination and I was right. I sighed in relief.

“Why did he carry you to the infirmary?” Midori asked, gripping on my arm even harder with more envy. Even though the aura wasn’t showing, I could still feel it. That made me nervous, especially with my right arm hurting.

I tried to break free and I responded with, “Ouch,”

“Ouch?” Midori asked, confused of my response.

“Midori…” Minako said and pointed at my arm that was hurting. Midori looked at my arm and then at my facial expression. I tried not to look hurt but I couldn’t hold it, so there were tears at the corner of my eyes. Midori’s expression turned into guilt and Minako held in her laughter because of how Midori’s face was. She had a sad puppy face that made me giggle quietly.

She let go of my arm and said, “Sorry, Sakura-chan, I’m just jealous of you.”

Minako joined in, “We are, but you still didn’t answer Midori’s question…” They were eager for my response. They looked at me, waiting patiently. I wiped my tears away and hesitated before I told them what happened between Kenta and me.

“Um, it was because, um…it was because he wanted to know what time break ends until a cart ran into me,” I told them and laughed a bit, scratching the back of my head like an idiot.

“Kenta wanted to know what time break ends until a cart ran into you…” the twins repeated what I said with a bored expression. But that expression changed after they looked at each other. They laughed REAL hard.

“That’s real dumb!” Minako complimented about which pissed me off. She laughed her guts off, but her guts didn’t really come out.

“Yeah, it is!” Midori agreed with her older sister and I saw tears of joy from the corners of the twin’s eyes.

I sighed; I was looking forward to a better response. I left them there rolling on the ground, taking a last look of them laughing like crazy. I walked through cherry blossom trees that were blooming around the school. Some of the trees were already fully grown. I continued walking and I spotted a good spot to eat. I sat down under a cherry blossom tree and ate my bento. I felt lonely since Takeshi was at his meeting. After I finished with my bento, I stood under the cherry blossom tree. The scenery of the cherry blossom trees kind of reminded me of when I first met Kenta. Tears came down my eyes, why is that?

A voice near me asked, “What are you doing?”

I looked at the direction of where the voice came from and it was Kenta with a serious face. His face looked a little worried; I wonder…this is sort of like how I first met him.

“Why are you crying?” He asked me as he walked closer to me.

“I-I just remembered a memory that hurts me,” I answered back, just being honest.

“Do you know why you’re remembering about that memory?” He took another step that made me look up at his face. Why was he asking these questions? It made me nervous because he seemed concerned about me. But my answers were confidential but I still told him…I wonder why…

“No…” I told him, looking down at the grass. Tears rolled down my eyes slowly and I could see Kenta’s shoes just right in front of me. I felt like tapping them, awkward, right?

“Then why are you remembering it if you don’t know why you are?” He stared at me with those gray eyes of his. This was TOO MUCH like when I first met Kenta except that he isn’t that worried…I think.

“Well, that happens sometimes… You remember a memory that you don’t want to remember and you don’t know why it pops out of no where…” I responded as the wind blew through my long pink hair.

He sighed and said, “That does happen, I guess… But that never happened to me before.” I looked up at him in an instance, surprised. How can that not happen?

“Why?” I asked, my tears stopped but my curiosity grew more.

“I don’t know…” Kenta said as I still stared at him with my pink eyes. “I don’t really remember about my past…I just hate it…I always wonder who my mom was and what I was like when I was small…”

My eyes widened, that response… How do you forget your past? I was speechless; Kenta saw my expression and laughed a bit. He scratched the back of his head. How can he not take this seriously? Does he think forgetting about his past is a joke?

“To tell you the truth, I’m lying about the unwanted memory that makes you wonder why it pops out… That actually happened to me a lot of times but it’s different…” Kenta told me. Why was he telling me the things that he would keep to himself? “It’s different because I don’t even know if I want to remember it but I still don’t know why it pops out of no where…”

“What is the memory about?” I asked. I felt like a detective getting secrets out of a man. I giggled inside at that idea.

Kenta looked away and his expression became sad. He stated, “I keep remembering about this little girl who was crying right in front of a cherry blossom tree… She had long flowing pink hair with pink eyes… And she sort of resembles you…” He looked at me and I was ready to explode. How…HOW CAN THIS BE?!
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