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I did more editing! >_< Check it out!
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i like it. the descriptions were great. it's just fine.
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Just to let you guys know Bren and Zoey are not ninjutsu warriors. They've been practicing it since the beginning of the junior high level and they're not experts. I just wanted them to be light and good at escaping.
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Woaaa... finally! I am done finally!

A little advice from me, try to make your chapters shorter if you are gonna post them here. Cus ppl dont tend to read them if they find it too long since everyone is not a book freak like we are. I reading maniac

I just loved this chapter. The interactions between James and Zoey, Suzuki's part, Brennan's memories.. all of them are perfectly harnessed into this excellent story. You have jokes, quotes, allusions in it. I found something that totally wooowed me in each and every paragraph.

I dont know when you'll post again, but I cant help myself begging you to hurry up with it. I really wanna see more.

(I hope you will write some kissing too )

thank you for this remarkable share.
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Posted 1/31/10 , edited 1/31/10

elanra_moonlight wrote:

Woaaa... finally! I am done finally!

A little adive from me, try to make your chapters shorter if you are gonna post them here. Cus ppl dont tend to read them if they find it too long since everyone is not a book freak like we are. I reading maniac

I just loved this chapter. The interactions between James and Zoey, Suzuki's part, Brennan's memories.. all of them are perfectly harnessed into this excellent story. You have jokes, quotes, allusions in it. I found something that totally wooowed me in each and every paragraph.

I dont know when you'll post again, but I cant help myself begging you to hurry up with it. I really wanna see more.

(I hope you will write some kissing too )

thank you for this remarkable share.


I'll start writing chapter four tomorrow. BTW, El-chan the next chapter will be much shorter.
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OMFG!! WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!

"words keep you alive..." oh my dear God, Sakura, I swear to God when I am reading your stories, YOUR WORDS keep me alive! You have such flow, such intensity, such grip in your story I cant even breathe!! I admire the way you are so good at this.. overcoming all the things that makes it harder for you to do it. I both admire you and respect you. My respect is hard to earn and you have it. With that amount of talent, I feel like I should learn from you...

Your vocabulary, the imagery and similes you use... the flashbacks and present time tides... You are just fantastic with this. You REALLY MUST take this more seriously and aim for a future which involves writing...

Thank you for the share...

Perfect!








PS: I love the twilight saga too... what is described in that saga is not vampires or werevolves or unnatural stuff merely... it tells the story of an impossible love and how love doesnt give a fuck what you are. When love wants it... it happens.

I guess I am romantic like that
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elanra_moonlight wrote:

OMFG!! WOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOW!!

"words keep you alive..." oh my dear God, Sakura, I swear to God when I am reading your stories, YOUR WORDS keep me alive! You have such flow, such intensity, such grip in your story I cant even breathe!! I admire the way you are so good at this.. overcoming all the things that makes it harder for you to do it. I both admire you and respect you. My respect is hard to earn and you have it. With that amount of talent, I feel like I should learn from you...

Your vocabulary, the imagery and similes you use... the flashbacks and present time tides... You are just fantastic with this. You REALLY MUST take this more seriously and aim for a future which involves writing...

Thank you for the share...

Perfect!








PS: I love the twilight saga too... what is described in that saga is not vampires or werevolves or unnatural stuff merely... it tells the story of an impossible love and how love doesnt give a fuck what you are. When love wants it... it happens.

I guess I am romantic like that


*beaming smile* Thank you. That was probably the most intricate praise I ever received from a reader. xD About your response to the Twilight Saga, I too can be that way. Sometimes I am a hopeless romantic and shipping random couples together.
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Please take note:

If any of you observe a flaw and/or quality that seems too perfect or remotely similar to a Mary Sue or Marty Stu in my characters please inform me. (I would like to know immediately if possible.) If the trait isn't too established then I'll do my best to erase or fix it.
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... I think i fell in love. o.o I'M TOTALLY ADDICTED TO THIS STORY NOW~!!! >O< I really love this plot and how its turning. ;D This story is very fun to read since it's all in the view of a teenager. Even the wording is like us nowadays so we can relate to her actions and what she's thinking. Clever there Author Sakura~ ;3 Can't wait for the next chapter!! However, like elanra said, the chapters are a bit too long. XDD When I finished reading the first one I thought I finished 2 chapters already. XDD But, once I started reading, I couldn't stop at all. o.o Overall, you still have a few grammar mistakes but they aren't that major and nice progress of events. x]
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