Post Reply Random poem I wrote
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Posted 1/18/10 , edited 1/18/10
This is just a random poem I decided to write, I have no idea if it's any good so please comment!!!

Music

It dances of the instruments,
Twirling through the air like leaves caught in a storm.
It is a rainbow, a river, a path,
A shapeshifter always taking a different form.

The notes are fairies or butterflies with colorful wings,
At first they hover there, toying with the imagination,
Then they flit around, advancing retreating,
Telling a story, a wonderful creation.

Then too soon the twirling and flitting comes to an end,
The butterflies and fairies begin to fade a way
The river slows down and the wind calms down,
Then they all disapear, destined to come back another day.
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Posted 1/18/10
Yay after an hour (okay like two hours) of searching I finally found it. =D
I am just that good. |D
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Pretty. <33
A few words seem to be missing here or there (or maybe that's just me? IDK. Dx) which makes it awkward to read in some places, but the imagery is very well done.
I really like how you compare music to butterflies and fairies. I've never thought of music that way before, and I think it's a really nice image so yaaay pretty mind pictures~ ^__^
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Posted 1/18/10
Cool
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its good... maybe a little raw... like a young poem.

But its nice with good rhymes and flow.. Keep it up!
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