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Posted 3/4/10
Young Urns

Marching brazenly with each step,
He declared , ' I'm going to conquer it'
and He did.

The sparkling vision,
the vibrating roar,
the heartbreak adrenaline,
gushing through the vigor of youth,

Whipping out his sword briskly,
sending naysayers sprawling,
to his stead in brief,
the young urn engage in too much brawn.

Drinking liquor of recklessness,
charging through barricades of hopeless,
he earned great reps.

The man, he came , he conquered, there is hope.

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As age hold him better,
Bitterness found him in batter
where clove and butter
make his meal into a baffle.

To this day,
his creaky bones squeak
like a wheeling old dough
with hacking cough

"Poor old me"

He crawls into the bed
and hope for tomorrow
just to past another day
to keep boredom at bay.

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Posted 3/6/10
woow.. thats very intriguing... I would like to know what inspired you to write this... your rhymes are almost annoyingly good, I am sooo jealous your rhyming.. and you make it look so easy too..

Thank you for the share!
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Posted 3/6/10
Just recollection about the good old days and looking at kids and people who i known.
The changes and everything, a lot of differences and changes which inspire me to do that.

OOOoooo and the rhyming, i learn it in secondary school ( i think you guys called high school or Grade sth)

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Posted 5/10/10
That's a great poem. The rhymings are well executed. There's a deeper meaning in each word used & yeah, based on the above-mentioned comment of the writer, it depicts the way of life he/she had.
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Posted 5/14/10 , edited 5/14/10
Thanks madetcolorcloud, I am just a sentimental guy. Haha ,. Nostalgic moment of the past.
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Posted 5/15/10 , edited 5/15/10
@ligersay : Welcome & I thought so too based on the poem that you wrote. The title itself also caught my interest. Keep up the good work okay ;))
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