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HMMMMM.... very interesting!! I must say I read it curiously, wondering what'll happen... It was nicely written. Again, your details are what makes me pulled to your story. You have grammer mistakes, especially using the past tense and the simple tense together, and using the Present Perfect Tense instead of Past Perfect... but its not bad, since you can still understand what you meant.

And to be honest, grammer mistakes are expected, english is not your mother language anyway, is it? It isnt my mother lang. either! I make a bunch of mistakes!

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Thanks for the review. It's just that I need to improve my efficiency and command of English
through more walking. Grammar my worst enemy of all. Do you think is weird that I am the
only guy that like Literature but the English is still sub-standard. I will have to work hard.

Elanra -san, your stories are much lively and detailed-orientated. Write romance is a tough
nut to crack and if you ask me to write it, I couldn't think of anything to write.

PS: have 2 spoilers spoil the text formats and I solved this problem, Yay!
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Woaaaaa.................. this is quite interesting!! I loved the riddles! Where did you find them?!? Thats soo smart! Well done! You didnt have THAT much grammer mistakes in these three posts, just here and there... I can say its really a very intriguing story.. I'll be expecting to read more of this..

Once again your details and descriptions were good, especially when you were describing the long black haired girl. Well done!

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For the riddles, i went to the internet and search for it. Reading through many riddles, I handpicked some of the very best and
slot into the stories itself. Hehe, Thanks for reading it. Will do research again and start writing.
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thank you for the share,

is it just me or is this chapter is like.. half?? incomplete? It gives an impression like that... But otherwise, once again I am amazed with the way you write

The King Arthur Legend and anything relevant to it is greatly within my interest. It was a nice turn of events that suddenly they are included in your story too

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Posted 3/15/10
Oh elanra san, this is just a part of the opening, still doing more research and thinking of that before I write out , the continue part.
Thanks a lot for reading the story.
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