[PG-13] "UNKNOWN" by Neoblade
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I have a suggestion, how about you call your story "Death City: Underground". It would go good with the direction your story is going in brother.
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Title : "Unknown" need suggestion so feel free
Well need to improve my spelling so decided to write story ideas come from friends fiction story and well there will or should be a mafia involve in this so feel free to help out and comment tyvm.

Chapter 1 Introduction

"Welcome ,welcome,welcome to Death City stranger" said the short fat man dress all in black "You must be the new guest that's coming in today, i heard all about it from the mayor. It seem like you have quiet a reputation among the underground word Stranger. If you don't mind me asking what's your name?"
"My name you ask is Kizomo Hitara" say the Stranger.
"Well then Ki-zo-mo Hi-tara" said the short fat man as he's trying to pronoun it "i hope i say it right, beside that's a strange name you have there wonder where you're from. Well anyway is not like anyone here is going to remeber that long odd name of your, so my advice to you is to change it" said the short fat man as he's trying to catch his breath
"Well i won't be living long enough to see "that" happening soon" said the short fat man sighing then looking at Kizomo as he motion his hand up and down his body "As you can see they keep me fed really well here, perhaps too well. They may also do the same for you considering you're being taking and living with the mayor. But a words of advice even though you're being fed well you're still going to die sooner or later. For me it might be sooner, since my doctor say i could die from stroke, heart attack, high blood pressure, and possibly more you know"
Kizomo getting annoy by hearing the short fat man going on and on about his talk "You know i wonder if you could talk if i take a gun and put it to your head and pull the trigger"
"O..o..okay i think i get what you're saying, well to wrap thing up my name is Jonny, call me John if you'll like. The mayor said to escort you to his house so that's what i'll do then" walking in front and taking the lead Jonny walk up the street follow by Kizomo. They then turn left walk up the street for a few miles then turn right and continue onward. As they pass by a couple of house, store, and bar Jonny was pointing them out.



Going to stop here for now continue on later
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Posted 3/26/10

Shirosaki12 wrote:

I have a suggestion, how about you call your story "Death City: Underground". It would go good with the direction your story is going in brother.


lol i guess idk really need a good title once the story is done though if it get done
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Neoblade wrote:


Shirosaki12 wrote:

I have a suggestion, how about you call your story "Death City: Underground". It would go good with the direction your story is going in brother.


lol i guess idk really need a good title once the story is done though if it get done


Bro, I believe in you and I believe you'll get it done! I love the story so far, I know you can finish it!
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Shirosaki12 wrote:


Neoblade wrote:


Shirosaki12 wrote:

I have a suggestion, how about you call your story "Death City: Underground". It would go good with the direction your story is going in brother.


lol i guess idk really need a good title once the story is done though if it get done


Bro, I believe in you and I believe you'll get it done! I love the story so far, I know you can finish it!


i really do hope so since is hard making up a town n townspeople along with it having to deal with the mafia n so
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