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Okay, Peoples. Here my third poem and hope everyone enjoys peace peoplesz. And once again the poem explains itself. So, take ur time and enjoy and don't forget to comment. You know how much i love ur reviews and feedback lol. This Asianangel AKA Ray peace out people. Oh and Happy Easter Everyone.

When I first laid my eyes on you
You said hi, how are you
And I realized can it feel so divine

When you danced with me
How I could believe
When you held me
Was I selfish to say I want forever will you stay
Was it really okay?
Or did you really wanted me to go away

Was it a bliss?
To remember this
When we first kissed
But then I realized there was something I missed
It was your happiness
For now I can only watch in sadness
As you claim yourself in darkness

You were one boy
And I was one girl
Our worlds drifted a far
For that kiss we shared
I did without a dare
As I felt tears roll down with my fears
And I could only hear
As I dared to say this is being fair?
Or was my heart was unable to bare
And I realized
And I apologized

And I said
I love you
Until we are through
Until I cried, leave me alone you messed up guy
That I may love you to the end of time
But in front of me was only this illusion
That created my confusion
And has destroyed my beautiful emotion
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Posted 4/2/10
The flow of words are definitely coming from the heart & if I'm correct, from your rl experience or maybe someone you know as well. Raw emotions are opned up & brought to life in every stanza of the abovementioned poem. Though there was a sad ending, it's better to face the reality than be pulled in & enclosed within an illusion of a perfect guy you thought you knew.
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wows... this is the first time im reading a poem you wrote and i really like it!! i think im a fan of you now!! XD the words you choose to express your emotions and the order you put them in really fits well. this is such a sad and beautiful poem~ im really looking forward to your other poems!! ;D
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Posted 4/5/10

lilpurplepanda wrote:

wows... this is the first time im reading a poem you wrote and i really like it!! i think im a fan of you now!! XD the words you choose to express your emotions and the order you put them in really fits well. this is such a sad and beautiful poem~ im really looking forward to your other poems!! ;D


Well, as i told you i have more coming just wait a little. But if you want i dun think you read my poem, Cheating Lover. look for in the forums
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Nice One Ray, You can Do It. Keep up the good works.
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asianangel122890 wrote:


lilpurplepanda wrote:

wows... this is the first time im reading a poem you wrote and i really like it!! i think im a fan of you now!! XD the words you choose to express your emotions and the order you put them in really fits well. this is such a sad and beautiful poem~ im really looking forward to your other poems!! ;D


Well, as i told you i have more coming just wait a little. But if you want i dun think you read my poem, Cheating Lover. look for in the forums


Okay I'll check it out ;D

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