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Posted 4/22/10
Michiko jumped. There was a tapping on the glass of the window. She put down her book to go check, but the intruder had already jumped in. Michiko screamed. The burglar wore a paper bag with eye holes over his head. Michiko tried to get to the door, but she was having a hard time maneuvering throughout her room with only her lamp on. The burglar grabbed her by the waist and put his hand over her mouth, but Michiko fought. She tried to break free from his grip as he brought her on top of her bed. When she finally did break free, the knife came out of no where, plunging into her heart. Michiko let out a gurgled gasp and let the shadows overcome her, bringing her deeper into death.

She woke up with a start, sweat covering the back of her neck in a cool layer. Then Michiko started crying from the horror of her vivid dream. She pressed her eyes into her bed sheet and took deep, shuddering breaths as she tried to calm down. She tried to hug herself around the chest, but something was blocking her arms.

There, sticking straight out of her chest, was the knife.

Michiko’s whole body started shaking and the tears started coming down harder. She let out a strangled gasp, which was lost in throat. With shaking hands she touched the hilt of the knife. Well, she thought, at least I’ve established that it doesn’t hurt to touch it, so this must be another dream. Even though on the outside she looked a mess, she was actually calm and sensible on the inside. Michiko tried pinching her face to wake herself up, or she tried getting comfortable on her bed, but the horrifying nightmare wouldn’t stop. “What if this isn’t a nightmare,” she thought aloud with dread. “But it has to be, nothing else can explain what’s happening!” Forgetting about the awkward knife sticking out of her, Michiko pounded her fists with frustration on her knees as she sat up in bed.

“I think I can explain.”

There in the window sat a handsome man, who didn’t look a day over twenty. His deep black hair with wispy bangs was long and tied back at the nape of his neck. He had icy blue eyes and a deep, soothing voice in which he spoke to Michiko with.

“Are you...” He shuffled through a clipboard he was holding, “Sanyu Michiko? Age fifteen, favorite color green, favorite food cheesecake, worst fear drowning...” He looked up from the papers he was shuffling through and made a face. “Bleh, cheesecake? Disgusting.” Michiko didn’t know whether to laugh or cry at the upside down reality she was going through.

“Wh-Who are you?” Michiko now stood up and was slowly walking towards her bedroom door, ready to make a run for it at any moment.

“Ah! I guess I’m too late. Tch. Damn seer.” He looked out of the window to estimate the time from the sun’s point in the sky. Michiko finally noticed what he was wearing looked like something out of a videogame. His sleeveless shirt was a light blue and he was wearing tight dark, black pants tucked into black boots. She saw no weapons visibly on him, so she relaxed her guard a little. When his gaze shifted back to Michiko, his eyes got wide. He quickly strode over to her in a matter of steps.

Michiko lunged for the door, but it was locked. “Wha-How-Who-,“ she stuttered before the handsome stranger cut her off.

“Don’t worry,” he said with a somber smile on his face. “We did it for your own good.” With one swift motion the knife was out of her chest and in his hands. Michiko gasped and quickly put her hands to her chest to stop the blood from spilling out all at once, but when her hands got there, there was no blood spilling. She looked down and saw that the wound was completely healed. The room started to spin and Michiko had to sit down.

“Before you lose consciousness, I guess I should introduce myself.” The stranger dropped the clipboard to the side and sank into a deep bow. “I am Anrui Ryo and I am one of the Empress’s First, and personal bodyguard to Sanyu Michiko.” He lifted his head and gave a wide grin. “At your service, milady.Oh, but when you wake up, I'll explain more.” Michiko let out a grumbled moan and let darkness take over. Her last thought before she passed out was, What the hell is going on?
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Posted 4/22/10
:O W-O-W. That was magnificent. I can only say that your only flaw is that the beginning seems a bit too rushed. Slow things down a bit and a more awesome story it shall be. (If that's even possible, it's awesome enough already. :D)
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Posted 5/5/10
Love the story. The plot is great and a fantasy theme is one of my fave. Your grammar and descriptive narration is quite flawless so I commend you on that. Keep up the good work and I’m looking forward to the next post you’ll make. This shall be included in my fave stories that I'll follow in this group.
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Posted 5/8/10
Hm...
Okay, I finally managed to sit down and read through it. And I must say, from the beginning I was thinking: "Hm, interesting way to to start." It's not boring, which is a good thing.
Around the middle, there was the exposition, no problems so far.
Than the end, you ended it in a sort of cliffhanger, very nice work.
I'm a bit curious as to how it'll turn out.
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Posted 6/27/10
I hope there would be a next chapter for this story.
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Posted 11/23/10
WHOA!! This story must continue!!! O;< I like how it has a unique twist in it. In the beginning, I thought it was just a boring kidnapping scene. Then, when I read that she woke up I was like ohh.. it's only a dream. XDD But then, once I read more, the plot starts to be very different. I really like that!! I really want to see what's going to happen next!!
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