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This is my second attempt to make comic strip in English.



Here, I have a couple of questions. The girl's line in the last panel of the second comic, "Anyone but you", I meant it to be "I don't want to hear it from anyone but you"

Do you get it? And when you get it, is it funny enough?
For this is the punch line, I want it to be as simple and effective as possible. But you know, English is not my first language, so I'm not sure if it sounds funny.

Also if you find something unnatural or plain wrong expression in my English, please ask or correct me. I'm an eager learner of English. Thanks in advance .
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b33rnuts wrote:

I am not sure if its appropriate but I felt that the ComiPo! english community deserved a dedicated message board beyond this post and the official facebook page to share information and works they have created.

So I started ComiPoForums.com and worked on consolidating some of the resources and information that was already posted. I just launched the site today so it is going to be rather empty but I invite everyone here to sign up and help build a english based community around ComiPo where we can share our comics and resources we find.

To the CrunchyRoll admins, if this is not allowed I apologize and ask that you remove this post.

To everyone else sign up and enjoy!


Great I'll definitely visit there!
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I'm still working on #112 of "Figured It Out", but here's some progress; Another supernatural character!



Lobo is a brand new character to my web comic, and again, I built her using parts I ported from Mikumikudance, which were ported from 3DCustom Girl!
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Guys, awesome work here : D
i cant wait till i turn 18 and activate my bank account xD
maybe then i'll get the program : 3
i am pretty excited that there is such a thing now <3 X3
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a character from moromaru gets skyrim but with a funny ending ^_^

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Well thanks to TerraGamerX I was able to fix a few comic pages. He didn't help me personally, but his tips on this thread really helped me out. Now I feel more confident creating some pages. I've even dreaded a few pages coming up, but now I feel a lot better about it. So thanks TerraGamerX for the tips!

Anyways I'm creating a story called Mio's Story. It's about a girl named Mio who's running for student council president. Right now I have 6 pages posted, but I have about 16 pages done. I'm hoping to make more, but I'm also hoping for an update soon. I need more clothes for my characters!

Anyways you can read the comic if you're interested by going here... http://miosstory.deviantart.com/

New pages added Monday!

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More great work, everyone! Love that everyone is sharing tips, etc.

Anyway, here's a new review of ComiPo! over at the Popten website. Check it out!

http://popten.net/2011/09/illustrate-your-first-graphic-novel-without-ever-having-to-lift-a-pencil-using-comipo/
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Great works for each of you, indeed there is entertainment to be had here ^_^
Glad some of what I have shared have been helpful. I'll likely have more tips.
That tutorial was fun to make, maybe I'll go on to make a tutorial series (for English).



hekemoko wrote:

This is my second attempt to make comic strip in English.



Here, I have a couple of questions. The girl's line in the last panel of the second comic, "Anyone but you", I meant it to be "I don't want to hear it from anyone but you"

Do you get it? And when you get it, is it funny enough?
For this is the punch line, I want it to be as simple and effective as possible. But you know, English is not my first language, so I'm not sure if it sounds funny.

Also if you find something unnatural or plain wrong expression in my English, please ask or correct me. I'm an eager learner of English. Thanks in advance .


The comic was definitely funny. That punchline I did read differently however, thinking it to mean she would not accept him as a sibling (which is still funny). I don't think there is a natural way to shorten your intended line. You would need to choose a different response if you want to keep it short, like an angry "What did you say!?"

Additional note: "I don't want to hear it from anyone but you" actually means the opposite of what you are trying to say. Because of the sentence breaking down into "I don't want to hear it from anyone..." and "...but you.", it ends up meaning she DOES want to hear it ONLY from him. "Anyone" is the most unnatural word in this sentence. "I don't want to hear it from you!" is the best way to say it. I think what you were going for is best written as this: "I don't want to hear it from you of all people."





b33rnuts wrote:

I am not sure if its appropriate but I felt that the ComiPo! english community deserved a dedicated message board beyond this post and the official facebook page to share information and works they have created.

So I started ComiPoForums.com and worked on consolidating some of the resources and information that was already posted. I just launched the site today so it is going to be rather empty but I invite everyone here to sign up and help build a english based community around ComiPo where we can share our comics and resources we find.

To the CrunchyRoll admins, if this is not allowed I apologize and ask that you remove this post.

To everyone else sign up and enjoy!


Indeed with CR being an official distributor of ComiPo!, a local ComiPo! forum on CR would make sense. However with ComiPoForums showing up first, I'll proceed to give that my support. Indeed it will be a good means to unite and strengthen the ComiPo community. I'll go ahead and show it my support as a standard forum participant.

Should CR and/or ComiPo! come up with later plans for a way to handle the community, I'll likewise show that my support and encourage it toward success.
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@TerraGamerX
THANK YOU A LOT!
Yeah, I meant the line to be "I do want to hear it from anyone but you" instead of "don't " It was my mistake. For the funny point is that a guy with bunny ears on his head tells her that her hair is weird. I'll change it to that line you suggested , "I don't ... of all people".
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I don't have windows D: Blah.!
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b33rnuts wrote:

I am not sure if its appropriate but I felt that the ComiPo! english community deserved a dedicated message board beyond this post and the official facebook page to share information and works they have created.

So I started ComiPoForums.com and worked on consolidating some of the resources and information that was already posted. I just launched the site today so it is going to be rather empty but I invite everyone here to sign up and help build a english based community around ComiPo where we can share our comics and resources we find.

To the CrunchyRoll admins, if this is not allowed I apologize and ask that you remove this post.

To everyone else sign up and enjoy!


That's a good idea! I thought about doing that myself, but I'm a college student with a job, so there's little to no time there.
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http://www.megaupload.com/?d=64TP19V8

Pack of about 1100 background images ive compiled from various websites.
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my first time playing around with this program
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I'm continuing with the same story. Hachi: Blue - now with added drama.

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http://www.megaupload.com/?d=64TP19V8

Pack of about 1100 background images ive compiled from various websites.


are they copyright free?
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