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I am currently working on manga named Guardians and I am 100% an amateur. I only do this in my spare time and because I love fantasy and love to to draw. The first page of the prologue is done. English is not my mother tongue so there might be some grammar errors! ATM the grammar is being corrected by a Scottish friend but seems like he does not have much spare time so that is gonna take a looong time before it is corrected so if there is any native speaker who would want to help me in correcting the grammar in my story, I would be really happy, you can PM me if you are interested. I gladly take critism in order to make the manga even better. For the tones and highlights I use manga studio EX4.0. Please enjoy!
Genre
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Fantasy, horror, comedy, drama, seinen, action, adventure, tragedy.
Synopsis
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The human world is divided into four parts, Labunaagan, Kahrlin, Sanszin, Amenale. In this world magic is born by the souls of the dead and the humans are born with a lifeline called Card of Life. To be able to travel through the world parts a human must be in possession of a Card of Life. Angels are the protector of the human world and to the humans the angels are a legend with mystery.
Wisely, a boy with an unknown past has a strangely eye which keeps bleeding whenever he feels really sick. Reaper, an unknown creature which resides within him, despise humans.
Wisely journeys to the Sacred Land in order to practice magic. At the Opening Ceremony Interfectorem, known as Killers, invades the school and annihilate all the students. Wisely barely makes it out alive with the help of Black, a Watcher born to serve the rules and annihilate law breakers. Black tells the Interfectorem was looking for Wisely and that they won't stop killing until they find their prey. He also tells the Odah Wisely knows is not the real Odah and that he must find the real one no matter what. In order to do that Wisely receives a fake Card of Life to be able to travel through the four world parts. But how are they going to find the real Odah and why is the Interfectorem chasing Wisely? Wisely therefore embarks on a long journey with Rynart, his best friend, Odah, the fake one, Alma Ald, the prince of Labunagaan and with the accompany of Black.
On their journey they encounter a mysterious man with long silver hair, named Sin, who eagerly wants to join their journey. He travels with them to the ruins of the Prayers in Amenale. When Wisely sees the statue of Avarus, the first Prayer he gets nervous and accidentally steps on a Heavenly Symbol which immediately starts a chain reaction throughout the world. The Heavenly Symbols have been activated and Sin shows his true self. Journey into a world of magic and angels beyond your imagination.
Characters
Angels
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Ariel,
Ambriel
Abbadon
Seraphim
Cherubim
Virtues
Powers and Rulers
Dominions
Erelim
Azrael
Archangels:
Gabriel
Michael
Raphael
Uriel
Raguel
Remiel
Saraqael
Wisely Shin
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Age unknown but regarding Odah Wisely is 18
Nickname: Wi
Apperance: Suppressing Star on the left cheek. Black scar across the left eye(can be seen when eye is closed). Messy middle short dark brown hair
Personality: Able to read an atmosphere, take things slowly, do whatever he likes, likes to sleep, got a short temper , best friend is Rynart, only listen to Rynart and Odah, despise females, magnificent singing voice
Odah Shin
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Title: Black Guardian with Suppressing Star on the left cheek
Age: 32
Appearance: Attractive face , light blond hair, wear glasses, short temper(as Wi)
Background: Has a big eagle as pet
Kanh Rynart
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Age: 18
Nickname: Rynart, Brainy
Personality: calm face, laid back, takes tings at ease , quickly back off in bad situation, fast reflexes, fast to read the atmosphere, a wandering brain, has a bad mouth,
Apperance: Wear glasses , green eyes, yellow hair, Suppressing Star on the left cheek
Kingzley Kanh
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Title: Head Counselor
Age: 48
Always serious, a respected man throughout the whole world, always look angry, has cold eyes, thick eyebrows and big beard, a tall man, looks young despite his appearance
Alma Ald, Prince of Labunagaan
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Title: Prince of Labunagaan
Age: 19
Nickname: Prince, Al-D
Personality: Calm, quite the joker, shy, chickens out very fast, has a badmouth, afraid of girls, likes Wisely, eats a lot, afraid of animals and creatures, love to do chores, magnificent singing voice
Appearance: Suppressing Star on the left cheek, white middle long hair(wavy hair), short hair, chain of pearls in the front hair(in one of the pearls there's a red diamond -the proof of royalty), always wear the roundish hat from the school uniform
Oruka Sheema
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Youngest Holy Guardian in history. A genius who captured Abbadon but failed in sending him to Lord of Hell. Oruka died in vain.
Abbadon: Angel of Penalty
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Nickname: Angel of Sin
Personality: Greedy, despise humans, wants to rule the human world, has no feelings, cruel, no mercy, evil, likes to see people suffer, love the taste of human flesh
Appearance: Red eyes, in disguise of a young human with middle long silver hair in a ponytail, always wear black cloth, always hide in a hood and a long cloak, has long nails, black aura
Grudy Ireenal
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Appearance: Short black hair, dark sad eyes, always force a fake smile, a huge scarf on the right cheek, always has a sword with him.
Draconis
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Title: Dragon Lord of all the dragons in the world.
Age: Unknown(since the creation of the world)
Appearance: Big black dragon with big wings and sharp spikes on the back and looks very fierce. Cannot be tamed by anyone. Always has a dark aura around him.
Caudata
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Title: Salamander(becomes Wisely's pet)
Appearance: A small salamander
The four first Prayers in the world
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Avarus: Represents greedy
Spero: Represents hope
Nefas: Represents sin
Malum: Represensts misfortune
Spiritual guardians
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Ignis: The fifth strongest guardian
Terra: The third strongest guardian
Unda: The second strongest guardian
Aeris: The fourth strongest guardian
Gravitas: The strongest guardian
The Mother Tree
Spoiler Alert! Click to show or hide Feast on the soul of the dead. A tree which cannot survive without the souls of the dead ones. A spirit king is ordered by the Mother Tree to protect her children. The Mother Tree has spread her Children around the world to be able to find the Chosen One, who is The Child of Prophecy. The one and only one to save the human world from Dooms Day.
Front page is finished, I only need some coloring :
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(when reading the manga please read from right to left, the Japanese way)
The manga: Prologue, first page
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very nicely done! I'm interested in seeing more!
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It looks good. What software are you using for the tones and highlights?
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Serenity_07: For the tones and highlights I use manga studio EX4.0
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Oh nice, that's what I thought.
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That's very good.
I didn't know we had mangakas in CR.
Keep it up.
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Congrats! I just read it very well put together Im no expert but, I will look forward to seeing how the story evolves
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Been waiting lols :3 !!!!!
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that was a great storyline and WOW!!!!
LOVE your art it AWESOME
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bravo. your art is very nice, especially the toning, it's amazing ( * w * )b
with just one page, you left us wanting for more
as for the grammar, yeah some work needed, and the plot is cool (I've been reading some of this)...
sooooo... hope to see more from you young sensei
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That's really cool, have you thought about making it a web comic?
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bangladeath wrote:
That's really cool, have you thought about making it a web comic?
No I haven't since I don't think anyone besides my friends would read it :3
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