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Posted 3/15/12
I have a feeling we are spending our time here the most
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Posted 3/16/12
That would be because Patrick can't spell. At all. xD
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Posted 3/16/12 , edited 3/16/12
Hoooookay. This is the part where I start crying at the atrocious grammar, and Patrick dies at my writing trolling powers. WATCH AS IT TRANSFORMS.

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After! (Comments in Parenthesis are CRITICISMS~ XD)


AND HERE'S THE COMMENTARY:

1) LEARN TO FUCKING SPELL OR USE FUCKING SPELL CHECK. YOUR GRAMMAR IS HORRIBLE.
2) YOU NEED TO DESCRIBE EVERY LITTLE THING EVER IN THE MOST DESCRIPTIVE WAY YOU POSSIBLY CAN, BECAUSE WE CAN'T SEE INTO YOUR MIND AND KNOW WHAT ITS SUPPOSED TO BE LIKE. DESCRIBE. EVERY. LITTLE. THING. FROM CLOTHING TO RANDOM PATTERNS IN THE FUCKING SAND. THAT'S HOW MUCH YOU NEED TO.
3) WORD CHOICE. IMPROVE IT. YOU CAN'T USE THE SAME WORD COMBINATIONS EVERY SINGLE TIME. IT GETS OLD, AND IRRITATES PEOPLE. FOR EXAMPLE, WHEN DESCRIBING PEOPLE WHO DON'T HAVE FUCKING NAMES BY USING TRAITS, PLEAAAASE, VARY UP HOW YOU DESCRIBE THE TRAIT. I GOT SOOO TIRED OF SEEING BLOND HAIRED HUMAN. AND QUIT SAYING STARTED TO. NOT EVERYTHING IS A MATTER OF STARTING TO. ONLY SOME THINGS ARE. THE REST SHOULD JUST BE IN THE REGULAR FUCKING PRESENT TENSE. MY GOD.
4) I SUGGEST YOU KEEP A THESAURUS AND DICTIONARY PRESENT AT ALL TIMES FOR ALL THE SHIT I POINTED OUT.
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Posted 3/16/12
Damn! You are killing him to a point
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Posted 3/16/12
I know, right? Dude, I'm such an Editor Nazi XD
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Posted 3/16/12
Thats why I have your help XD
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Posted 3/16/12
Indeed xD
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Posted 3/16/12
he is sooooo gonna hate us after this
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Posted 3/16/12
Lol yeah. But oh well. XD
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Posted 3/16/12
He'll get over it
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Posted 3/16/12
Yeah I know XD
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XD
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Posted 3/16/12
im going to kill you two some day
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Posted 3/16/12
can't kill me, i'm immortal bitch xD
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Posted 3/16/12
You don't know where I am, so you cant kill me XD -fades into nothing- XD
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