awww... this sucks

I do have a scary story, but it's like, 2,000 words long
I guess if not for the contest... I'll post it for fun, if anyone wants to read it... I don't really remember if it's school related but the kids all go to the same school? O:) lol here goes... :$
They all sat together in a circle of about seven, all more or less of the same age. It was just a week until Halloween, and as tradition in their small city had it, most large groups of thirteen years old had sitting circles with horror stories to scare each other just before they scared others. Vince Mack didn’t believe in this silly little kid’s nonsense, of course, but the crush of his teenage life was sitting opposite of him and he just had to impress her. After all, he was one of the most popular boys in Middleton Middle High… or so he felt.
“Who’s going first?” Lacy Bourgis asked, plopping down between Vince and Vince’s best friend Ted Mosby. “Otherwise, I have the perfect story to start with.” The way she said “story” (like store-ay) made Ted and Vince suppress laughter. No one knew why, but Lacy thought she was the most gorgeous creature in the world; no one, not even her parents, took her very seriously.
No one sprang up to the base plate, so Lacy flattened out her mini-mini skirt and fluffed her already fluffy hair before she smiled widely and started:
“So, there was this girl—” Wait, to make Lacy’s story more effective, I’m going to write it exactly how she said it. Again, from the top:
“Sow, there waz this gurl, aynd she like, had a partay to att-and, bu-h har boay-friend like, didn’t tell har when he was comeen to pick har up! An she wahz like, tow-tall-ee fuhreakeen out! An sow, she like had to quickly like, throw on her make-up because he cawlled like, last minute! Tha jerk… any-waay, when thay arrived, she tow-tally did not get voted queen of tha daynce! An it was awll his fa—”
“Stop!” Vince’s crush, Valorie, raised her hand, her eyes closed shut.
“Wasn’t that intense and scary?!” Lacy cried, dabbing her eyes with a tissue.
“It was pretty scary, Lacy,” Valorie sighed. “But it’s not my type… unless you have some gore and actual horror, please give someone else a chance… please!”
Lacy glowered at Valorie and waved her hand, trying to seem nonchalant. Ted, who lived for gore and horror sat up straight and gathered attention pretty quickly.
“This story, I heard from my Grandpa… it’s a true story. His dad told him. It happened in his time period. Here goes: those weak in the heart and stomach, leave now.” Ted smiled mischievously, looking at each friend in the face before starting. Vince felt that Ted had stared at him the longest… even a little worriedly.
“It was in the middle of the night. There were no stars to illuminate the dark sky; even the moon had taken cover behind her dark blankets of clouds—” he was interrupted by Lacy.
“Are you sure your grandfather, like, told you that? Or you, like, memorized a university book or something?”
“Yeah, I’m sure the old guy who rarely ever wakes up from his rocking chair is my grandfather and not some university book, Lacy,” Ted grumbled. “No more interrupting!” There was a hushed mumble before Ted continued. “A little girl was running along the street, trying not to get caught; she was being pursued by an old man, thought to be a child molester, but he was merely just a drunk citizen of the city who was possessed by the evils of alcohol. Wait,” Ted stopped, “you guys know that place where it’s just a street and it leads into a tunnel? There are hills on both sides of that lonely street, and the tunnel that continues for like, about twenty yards and that street leads into the main square. It’s coming from a highway, that street. And the hills on both sides and over the tunnel, they consist—”
“Oh yeah!” Valorie added in, “That’s where the older houses are, right? And that one big manor at the end of that little part of town that’s supposedly haunted.”
“Exactly,” Ted smiled at Valorie, who returned a friendly grin, making Vince jealous. “Those houses… old mansions, now… they were pretty new when this story takes place.” When the majority of the group nodded in agreement, Ted continued once more. “Anyway. So, this girl was running as if her life depended on it… because it did. This man was chasing her relentlessly down this lone street that led to the tunnel. When the little girl made it to the tunnel she could see her new home on the hill. It was the biggest house at the end of the new neighbourhood. The little girl thought she could make it up the hill and escape this ruthless man. She tried, once, twice, three times, before she fell in the grass hopelessly. It was too slippery for her, and by the time she would have made it up there and tried to climb the fence, the man would have been at her tail. She looked over her shoulder, and saw the man coming closer and closer. She stood up defiantly and tried once more. And she made it… half way, before the man caught up, dragged her to the empty tunnel by her hair, her screeching and calling for help: ‘Help! Help me! Someone please help!’ But although even her neighbours heard her faint calls, they did not go to help her. Maybe it was that they didn’t like her, she was by far most different from other girls her age, with her quiet nature, large different eyes, long black hair… everything from her physical appearance to her inner thoughts.
“There was more screaming that came from the tunnel, but it was slowing down more and more with her slow departure from the world. In the morning, her parents set out a search for her, worried all night when she did not come home from her friend’s party. But in the morning, even when the tunnel was searched, the girl’s body was not found. It was as if she did not exist.
“Now, there’s a myth, saying that the little girl’s ghost haunts that tunnel every moonless night, exactly like today,” Ted pointed to the window, where every frightened head turned and had their eyes widen even more with terror. “Whenever someone goes in, they are not seen coming out. Now that there are cars around, on nights like this even they don’t make it out.”
“What happens to them?” Mason, Ted’s close friend and step-brother asked, his voice quiet with fear in the darkened room.
“They go in about five feet, and suddenly, they stop working. The driver becomes confused, and tries to start the car again, but to no avail. Even the engine, which would be running so smoothly just seconds before, would not even make that grunt of attempting to start. And then, the driver would hear nails scratching on metal, nonstop, as if trying to get in. The nails make the sound once, for about ten seconds, pause for five, and then start again, continuously for about three to four tries. The driver would be trying to unlock the door, trying to escape. None of the locks would work, and suddenly, just as they are about to try some other way out, they hear a splat, and when they turn around, they would probably be heard screaming, because on their window is found the blood-splattered body of the little girl.” Ted paused to hear the satisfying scream that only Lacy could make. “The car is found in the morning by other drivers, but inside, it’s empty, and the outside is covered with dried and crusted blood.
“The ghost of the little girl is trying to get revenge,” Ted paused and took a sip of his Coke.
“On the murderer,” Valorie whispered. “But that doesn’t make sense, because she’ll never find peace.”
“Because the murderer must be dead, too,” Vince murmured, entranced by the horror of the tale.
“How did he die?” Lacy asked. “Did she get him?”
“She couldn’t have!” Mason cried out excitedly. “Because then she would be at peace and find no reason to kill anyone else! He must’ve died of old age or prison or something, but she’s looking for his kin so she can feel like she’s done her revenge!” Six heads turned to see Mason jumping excitedly on his cushion, his illuminated figure looking eerily excited.
“Wait,” Valorie said doubtfully. “If she murders the people and drivers every moonless night, wouldn’t that be too suspicious? Because this night comes about once every month… and I’ve not heard of any mysterious disappearances this year.”
“Yes, you’re right,” Ted agreed. “She kills every October, on the exact moon date of the exact month she died.” There was low murmur amidst the friends before Lacy brought up a horrifying point.
“Ted, you said the man was a citizen of this city… and rarely anyone moves out… so his kin must be here, right?” The hushed chattered stopped completely as all eyes turned to Ted, who looked gravely at Vince.
“The man’s name was Anthony… Mack. Vince’s great-great-uncle.”
“No way!”
“Oh my God…”
“Vince?!”
“That’s bunk,” Vince cried, looking angrily at who he thought was his best friend. “Ted, that story is a myth. My dad told me Uncle Anthony was no good, but he didn’t hurt little girls!”
“I’m not lying!” Ted cried back. “My Grandpa doesn’t lie either.”
“I don’t believe you,” Vince shouted angrily and got up. “I’m out of here!” He grabbed his hat and ran out from Ted and Mason’s house. He ran about half a block before he saw a mailbox and kicked at it angrily. An old lady driving by waved her fist at him from her little car before turning the corner. Vince sat at the curb of the sidewalk and panted angrily. He heard footsteps behind him and stood up, startled. Although he would never admit it, he had been shaken by his friend’s story.
“I hope you don’t mind I followed you out,” Valorie said shyly. “You didn’t look happy, and it wasn’t fair of Ted to open your family history like that.”
“It was so unfair,” Vince mumbled, nervous and unsure of what else to say.
“Walk me home?” She smiled at him, sweetly, hiding her crush from him.
He gestured to her silently to go on ahead and strutted beside her. They chatted a little before they reached her home, where she grasped at his hand and squeezed it.
“Don’t stay mad at Ted… his intentions weren’t bad,” she whispered, leaning in close.
“I know,” he replied. They leaned in but the porch light flashed on and Valorie’s mother was caught peeking through the window. Valorie smiled sheepishly and ran in, with a fast goodbye hug.
Vince groaned when he was out of reach of the house lights and trudged his way home. He remembered then that he had to pass through the tunnel now that he was half way into his shortcut home. He gulped and walked up to the tunnel when he was about five meters from it.
“Oh, it was a myth!” he cried out loud, and walked bravely in. As soon as he walked into the tunnel, a cool breeze met him. He shivered and walked a little further. When he got about half way in, he began to relax, but then his hat blew off with the cool breeze. He stopped and looked back. When he made to move, his feet did not budge. He looked down and saw his feet had just turned in the direction he had just come from, but did not do anything else.
He looked back up at his hat and saw a little girl crouched beside it, her black hair covering her face. She seemed vaguely familiar, but the more he racked his brain, the more she resembled some little kindergartners at his primary school.
She looked up at him and smiled sweetly. “Is this yours?” she asked, her voice sweet and very little girly.
“Yes, can you please give it to me? I can’t seem to move,” he requested, pointing at his frozen feet.
“Did you hear a ghost story that you’re so scared?” the little girl asked, her voice in a joking manner.
Vince laughed. “Yeah,” he answered. “But I doubt that’s the reason.”
The little girl’s smile vanished as she picked up the hat and flicked it back in his direction. Vince raised his hands to catch it, but the hat hit him squarely in the nose.
He screamed out in pain, dropping to his knees and clutching at his face. When he moved his hands from his face, he felt his nose swelling up immediately and a steady thick flow of blood streamed from his nostrils down into a puddle on the ground.
The little girl’s voice made him jerk his head back up, making the blood come faster. “Are you okay? I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to hurt you.”
“It’s okay… can you please call for help?”
“No.”
Vince looked at her, startled. “W… what?”
“No,” she said in a low steady voice. “No one came to help me… why should I help you? You’re family is the reason mine doesn’t exist anymore.”
Vince’s eyes widened with alert, but before he could do anything, the little girl’s hands came up and curled around his neck before she snapped it in one swift move.
In the morning, Vince’s search party led out across the city, but he could not be found anywhere. His friends, especially Ted and Valorie, were frozen with shock in their beds when they heard the news of his disappearance. But at least the city was safe from anymore mysterious disappearances… after that one, there were no more reported. At least the city was safe.