[1-22-08]-Pain Tolerance-[Neiromaru]
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Posted 1/22/08 , edited 12/12/13
Pain Tolerance

Neiromaru

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Posted 1/22/08
Wow. I really, really liked this story. There are a few lines that could be revised, to make them easier to understand, but overall it is very well written. In my experience, it's really rare to see a story that works so well, even though it has no dialogue. You never even tell us the guys name! I'm very pleased to see this caliber of work. You should expand this story, definitely. I would love to read more of this, and maybe even put a face and a name to this interesting character you have created.
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Posted 1/23/08
omg
I enjoyed it really much - a lil humorous, good concept, original, and the ending's pretty crazy lol
Awesome story!
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Posted 1/30/08
omg thats....scary. lol. but thats unique...=]

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Posted 1/30/08
I like the idea, very original and creative

Your paragraphs are enormous though, maybe try breaking them up a bit?
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