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feel free to keep writing on this story, however, since you didn't highlight your chemistry reference, we can't use it as an entry for the contest, Keep writing! ~Duster

Lani watched the sun fade slowly behind the sea, the breathtaking crimson and purple sky holding out for a more few seconds, allowing her a few more seconds of calming freedom before the ball of intense fire completely disappeared over the horizon, leaving the sky scattered with light flecks of cloud in the dull evening.

Her bare feet spread out in front of her on the soft, lush grass on the hill she was sat on, she shifted herself forward and fell onto her stomach and let her head fall over the edge of rock, staring at the crashing waves beneath her and for a second, has the strange impulse to dive headfirst into the deep ocean. Resisting the urge she thrust herself up quickly and turned back to the towering citadel which stood there, she knew she had to return quickly as the sun had already set, but she couldn’t draw herself to rush back to her concealed room among the many others in the college. Being stuck behind stone walls wasn’t an ideal setting for her, as much as she liked her personal space, being trapped there for so long drove her insane.

The fresh air felt rejuvenating and blew the choppily cut layers of blonde across her face and she sighed and slumped unenthusiastically back into the citadel. As she reached the edge of the college, on the outskirts of the citadel, she pulled her cloak from her shoulders and mumbled a few soft words of sorcery waving her hand over it and shimmered for a few seconds before becoming completely invisible, then feeling the material beneath her hands threw it back over her shoulders and drew up the hood. Minus the glimpse of dirty, bare feet as she walked, she was completely covered and few people would notice in the dark of the citadel at night.

Lani slipped stealthily through the alleyway behind the bakery and came to the back entrance into the college, which was usually only used by the local deliverers and messengers, save them using the main gates, which seemed so daunting, best to slip in unnoticed. She tried the simple lock on the door, but as she had expected had been locked as soon as the sun set. Luckily she knew the shape of the lock from the many times she’d had to sneak in, and withdrew a small key from her pocket and opened the door with ease, locking it behind her.

Doors were easy to open, with one key she could open any door she wanted, she moulded the key to fit the lock mechanism as she put it through the hole, hard to do first time off, but the knack stays with you forever. It had taken Lani quite a few attempts to mould keys well and when she had first tried to do it, had been caught by Malede and was stuck scrubbing latrines for the next two weeks.

Wind beat aggressively at her as she struggled forward over the pebbled courtyard, the cloak blowing backwards, revealing most of her, so with a growl of magic, set up a weak shield in front of her as she continued forward with ease. She reached the main stairway covered in red carpet with gold railings. Walking straight past it, she used the side entrance, which was a smaller and much less impressive spiral staircase. She reached the second from top landing and stepped of the staircase, pulling off her cloak and dismissing the charm with a simple wave of her hand, drawing the magic away from it and back to herself.

There was no use wasting magic for now, she was the only one on the whole landing, so really could have any of the rooms she wanted, but her own room sufficed for the time being. She stopped at the end door on the right and pushed it open with ease.

The room was simple, yet cosy. It was plain brick, like the rest of the building, but had been smoothed over so was a dull grey, but brightened slightly by the faded cream carpet. The size was not small, but not lavish either, about 30 feet across both ways, though slightly longer from the door to the window. It was furnished with a small washbasin in the far left corner, with an oval mirror above it and a thin shelf mounted on the wall in between. On the right of the door as you entered was a small, double bed, wooden, with a duck feather mattress and light blue quilt spread over it, with a small side table containing a drawer beside it. Pushed against the far right side, below the large window, was a desk, covered in writing materials, papers, books and such, with a small desk lamp in the corner. A large mahogany set of drawers stood to the left wall, and in the nearest right corner was a bookshelf, stuffed with many books, some, even, piled on the top because of lack of space.

Lani entered her room and hung her cloak from one of the three hanger pegs in the centre, on the right hand wall. She sat in the cushioned chair at her desk and leant back in it, folding one of her legs under the other and turned on the small desk lamp beside her, shedding some light into the darkness of her room and removed a book from the top of the small pile on the table and laid it in front of her, reading the title and running long, squared fingernails across it. Sighing, she turned the pages and began to read.

The small clock chimed midnight at her, bringing Lani out of her daze, she shook her head, heavy with exhaustion. She had worked her way through quite a few books, and lost track of the time. Standing up she drew the curtains, shutting out the night sky and the lights of the citadel, glistening in the distance. She pulled off her tight fitting, v-necked, dark blue jumper and flung it over the chair, quickly followed by the loose, black, Arabian styled trousers she hated, but was forced to wear, along with all the other students at the college, not that there was many of them though. She left on her underwear and the long, skin-tight, white sleeveless shirt and jumped into bed kicking the covers over herself, then with a last hint of sorcery, flicked off the bedside lamp, easily falling asleep, sprawled across her bed.

Seven struck loudly in the quiet room, Lani turned groggily onto her side and flicked a hint of magic towards the clock to shut it up, when it continued chiming, she knew she had to get up. Pushing herself into an upright position she ran a hand lazily through her hair, lifting it over one shoulder so it fell to about the length of her waist, over her well defined breasts. Awake and senses alert she noticed the figure sitting at the table and jumped up with a start, the realised why the clock had continued chiming.

Fraye smirked at her from the chair and drew back the curtains, allowing sunlight to stream in, reflecting directly into Lani’s eyes, so instinctively drew up an arm to shield her face.

“Do you have to? And this early in the morning? Seriously, anybody would think you liked mornings.” Lani croaked irritably, before clearing her throat of the cotton stuck there.

“Face it, if I weren’t here to charm your clock, you would never get out of bed, and you know im right.” Fraye stood a good inch or so shorter than Lani, even though she was almost a year older. But Lani’s height and defined features always made people believe she was older.

Lani shrugged in reply and went to wash her face and brush her hair, scooping it back to the base of her skull and quickly fashioning it into an untidy braid down her back, then turned to face her friend who had moved to copying down Lani’s down which were laid out on the desk, she rolled her eyes and continued dressing.
Fraye’s keen grey flicked over the paper, short, deep brown hair, cut at straggled ends fell over her face, and every now and again she would lift her hand and tug it behind her ears, then quickly return to the work at hand.

Lani flicked a pebble of magic towards Fraye’s head, making her look up alert. “Lets get moving.” She said bluntly, inclining her head towards the doorway.
“You can use your magic so effortlessly, its unfair.” Fraye moaned, annoyance set into her slightly bronzed skin, “I work twice as hard as you ever have and I still keep messing up, even when I concentrate.”

Lani gathered up her books into her arms and headed out the door, pulling it shut behind her with a tug of sorcery. The two walked down the empty corridor and headed towards the staircase, Fraye still muttering about equality and hard work into Lani‘s ear, who wasn‘t actually paying the slightest bit of attention to her.

“Give over girl!” Lani cried when they reached the bottom of the long climb down from the staircase. “Stop moaning, and start running. That demon of a Professor will kill us, fry us, then feed us to the Tlithger, all with that evil smirk on her face, if we‘re just a fraction late to alchemy. Just pray to the Goddess she has been set upon by a wild boar, which saw fit to tear her to shreds for us.”

The two young women half stumbled, half ran across to the tower, both set with cocky smiles across their faces.








Luckily for Lani and Fraye, Professor Raidion was late, so the two managed to take their usual seats at the back of the alchemy room before she arrived. When she finally appeared the lesson was just more theory, and Lani’s attention began to drift and she found herself staring out the window into blue, clouded sky, stretching across the distance, various towers and steeples, dotted over the horizon. She was soon snapped out of her daydream, “Owww.. Ow Ah!” an invisible force pulled on her ear and directed her attention back onto the board.

“Well, now that you decide to join us back in the fascinating world of alchemy, I suggest you pay attention.” The professors voice seethed and she turned back to the board.

Her daydreaming was easy to spot, especially in such a small class, excluding her and Fraye there were only four other students in the class, two boys, both a year older than herself, and the other two girls, one almost twenty and the other eighteen. Lani was constantly told she should be thrilled to be amongst older, advanced students, but the truth was she could have easily surpassed any of them blindfolded. She thought it best to fall in with the shadows and not draw attention to herself, it would only cause trouble.

The dining hall was large and extravagant, the ceiling was impossibly high, the walls adorned with great mahogany beams and shiny, marble polished floors. Six long tables ran vertically down it, each able to seat around one hundred, four for the differently skilled students, one for guests, and the last for the professors.

In reality the professors only filled a quarter of the table, and all the students could be seated around one table easily, with seats to spare. The college was slowly decreasing in number, there was such little potential around anymore, it looked as if magic was being sucked out of the world. Lani herself, had been one of the last intakes the college had had, and that was around four years ago now.

Lani had been found alone and near death on the outskirts of a neighbouring town, where she had been found by Professor Kalade, one of the younger male Professors, just recently graduating from student, and her brought her to the college to be cared for. When her ability to control sorcery was discovered, she was accepted, and had stayed ever since. Little was known about her and her background, before she was found, she never spoke of life before the college and her inheritance was unknown to everyone, including Fraye, Halem, Yuli and Katrina, the students closest to her.

Night fell over the citadel as Lani crept out of the darkened academy, making her way down staircases and through the open courtyard, then slowly letting herself out the hidden, merchants door, slipping away through the buildings.

She reached the centre of town, and found a quiet alley to hide in, she decided to attempt a shape shifting spell, she would never make it there and back if she had to keep sneaking around. She removed a small backpack and quickly undressed, throwing her possessions into it. As marvellous as sorcery was, her clothes couldn’t be transformed along with her, they were inanimate objects, so couldn’t be made into something living, one of the basic rules of magic. Focussing her energy she gathered the magic in her to her hands, muttering words as she did, then wriggling her fingers moved them up and down against her skin. After a few seconds, she could feel her form changing, she muffled a few gasps of pain and her body altered and internal organs shifted inside her.

She got up onto all four paws, checked her now furry body and shook herself to make sure she was fine. Feeling satisfied she gathered the backpack in her mouth and manoeuvred her body so it slipped onto her back. Checking the coast was clear she bounded forward, outwards, towards the outside of the citadel.

Lani’s reflexes and senses were heightened, the simple light scent of a passing woman’s perfume, became an overwhelming stench of crushed flowers, as if she had drenched herself in it. As she paused to catch her breath, she realised how keen her eyesight had become, she could see clearly the blacksmiths son, a good distance off, through the tavern window, falling over, doused with beer.

Reaching her destination, she sighed with relief, the rock face, in the open fields outside the citadel came into view and she recognised the toned, male figure standing there, his dark, brown hair fell shaggily over his shoulders, chiselled features showed his young, yet mature age, and misted brown eyes stared into the distance. She slowed to a walk and stalked towards him, stopping a few feet away from him and sat back on her haunches.

Devin sank down to one knee and peered at the cat sat before him, its coat was golden blonde, the exact colour of Lani’s hair, and the eyes gave her away instantly, no real creature had such blue eyes. He smiled and went to pet the cats head. It hissed at him and lifted a paw, ready to scratch him, he pulled back his hand quickly.

“How many times do I have to tell you. Don’t patronise me!” A voice sounded in his head, the distinctive voice of Lani, but the cats mouth didn’t move at all.

“Sorry, my apologies.” Devin’s deep but cool voice sounded, a mixture of sarcasm and sincerity.

“Give me a few moments.” Lani stalked behind the rock as Devin sat and waited.

The hum of magic hung in the air as she diffused the spell and regained her human form, she let out a few gentle screams of pain as her body altered back and she sat up, breathing heavily for a few seconds, then began dressing herself.

Lani sat beside Devin, leaning against the rock, he held out a book to her, showing her the incantations of Raie’s, and the mystical lore of the ancient times. He looked upwards for a few seconds at her serious face, intently staring at the pages, the moonlight highlighting her hair falling across her face and reflecting white in her eyes. He lifted his hand impulsively but quickly let it fall back to his side.

“Devin?”

“Hmm?” He answered looking up at her.

“Why don’t you come to the college? Ask to join? Im sure they would accept you.”

He laughed gently at her. “My kind are still not welcome there, remember.” He turned his back towards her and drew his shirt upwards, revealing a pair of light grey wings, folded inwards, much like the feathers of an eagle, long and slender.
Lani sighed and lightly brushed the tips, feeling how soft they were. “But im sure with such little magic left anywhere now, im sure they’d be glad of any students.”

“You’re still young, you’ll understand soon enough.” He turned back towards her pulling his shirt back down.

She struck him with the back of her hand across his upper arm, a scowl set across her face.

“Ok, Oww!” He retaliated. “What was that for?!”

“For being patronising again! Im seventeen! You’re still only three years older than me!” She held out her hand and closed her eyes, concentrating on the rock material and fashioned a cup, then drawing water form surrounding grass filled it, and in doing so muttered a few words of chantment, turning it to alcohol.





She took a long gulp from the cup, drained it, then grimaced at the harsh taste and the slight burning sensation at the back of her throat. She refilled it and went to take another gulp when she found herself gulping water.

“Mean” She said turning to Devin, who smiled crookedly at her and dismissed the form of the cup with a wave of his hand.
Lani sighed heavily and collapsed backwards, folding her hands behind her head then drawing her knees upwards, her feet flat against the ground. She felt an overwhelming sense of calming throughout her as she brushed her hands over the soft, lush, grass beneath her.
She felt a light thump on her stomach, followed by a slight weight, she opened her eyes and sat up, and took a book in her hands.

“Ancient Lore Of Enchantment” Lani read the title out loud from the worn, dusted, cover, bound in a faded, red leather.
She began flicking through the pages and stopped, scanning the page quickly, her eyes widening and she turned to stare at Devin her mouth slightly open, as she tried to produce words, but no sound came.

“ I thought you might appreciate it,” He waved a hand dismissively at her, “That’s the spell you said you wanted to learn. You weren’t about to learn it from any stuffy professor in that college of yours.”
Lani directed her attention back to the book, hungrily digesting all the information on the page. She snapped it shut suddenly then abruptly got to her feet.

“Illusion spells are severely complex you know“, Devin warned in his matter-of-factly way, “Start small, then gradually build up.”

She held her hand out in front of her, holding an image of a nearby rock in her mind, she loosened her grip on it, not forcing the image, then muttered the few words of chantment from the book. A small rock appeared in her hand, transparent, and slightly distorted, but a rock none the less.
Little progress was made with illusion spells throughout the night, and Lani soon became exhausted.

“There’s only a few hours left till morning, you should head back.” Devin reminded her.

“Already? I better hurry then.”

She stayed fully clothed as she performed the shape shifting spell again, and once fully transformed, Devin packed up all her clothing and the book and passed it to her.

“Take care.” He told her, running a hand over her furry head.

‘You too’, Lani’s voice sounded, as she began to stalk away into the night.

Once she was out of sight, Devin began to collect up his own belongings and flung the pack over his shoulder and began to head towards the open fields, surrounding the citadel.

Morning came, and Lani dragged herself out of bed, quickly braided her hair and dressed in a simple, long, light blue tunic, short in the sleeves, with black leggings and soft, black leather shoes. Her normal uniform left untouched. But, her freeday would still be filled with work, why bother calling it free if the professors still gave assignments to be done anyway? She picked up her cloak and headed off in search of Fraye.

No answer came from Fraye’s door which was odd, she usually waited for her, unless she had gone straight to the library to get a head start, which was still very unlike her. Lani headed back down the corridor and climbed down the stairs and started to make her way across the courtyard, when she heard an uptight voice calling her name.

“ …. what do you think you are doing? Get to the dining hall!” An elderly professor screeched at her.

“But, .. I, .. it’s a freeday.” She mumbled out, as if giving an answer.

“Freeday is cancelled, urgent meeting, dining hall, Go!” And with no further words Lani was usher in the direction of the hall.

Lani crept in as quietly as she could, taking a seat on a bench at the back of the hall, she heard a mans voice echoing throughout the hall, but couldn’t see the figure. She pressed two fingers to her temple and whispered chantment, then turned her fingers slightly forwards, allowing her vision to focus on the figure and enlarge her sight so she could see him.

A middle aged man, tall, dark. Long hair slicked back, with one or two grey hairs, and some short stubble across his chin. Ignoring his appearance she began to listen to his words.

“…. this day on, the College of Traghia is under our command. New interns will be taking in the coming equinox, and magic will flourish once again.”

Lani looked around in disbelief, there was no one left to accept into the college, magic was a dying art, surely it was impossible to be talking of taking on interns.

“And, also, two final notes,” The speaker continued, “Any magic done by a minor without supervision from a qualified professor or government official, will result in severe punishment, and possible sorcery blocks.”

At this point the room erupted into commotion, students and teachers alike were roaring protests at the speaker. Lani herself was waving her fists at them, yelling, as if her own voice was the only one to be heard. The crowd pushed itself forward against the stage, the speaker clearly agitated.

Lani took a few steps back for a moment, allowing the information to settle properly. ‘Surely, it’s impossible to block someone’s magical ability.’ she thought to herself, ‘and surely even if someone is able to do that, they must have great amounts of power.’ Beginning to feel scared, she darted from the room, out of sight, and stepped into the open courtyard
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I assume there's more to this?

It's written well, though I don't think there's enough conflict in the plot. But I do sense the character development and introduction of the story for it ^^

Please, continue posting
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Thanks For The Post!
Yes, Much More.

Of Course I'll Continue Posting. Thanks For Reading! =]
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This is pretty good for an intro to you story..I can actually picture the story in my head as i read this..Very well written with vivid detail.I hope to read some more..Thank you for the story
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Thanks For Your Time And Comment! Appreciate it! =]
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I enjoyed reading the story, you might want be careful of run-on sentences though =) Can't wait to read more!
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Yea...like shadow said, the only thing i have even a hint of criticism on is your fluency. Other than that, it seems perfect to me. I love the way you left it at a cliffhanger, i can't wait to read more! Keep postin'~!
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Just 2 Say, If You Do Read This, Any Comments Are Much Appreciated.
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By The Way Just To Let People Know I Do Have Another Story I Started On About 6 Months Ago. Its Aorund 40 Pages At The Moment And No Where Near Finished.
Its More An Incomplete Novel Than Anything, But In My opinion Is Better Than This One Im Currently Writing.

Im Not Goin To Bother Posting It But If You Do Want To Read It, Message Me Or Something And I'll E-Mail, Message Or Send It To You In Some Way.

Thanks For Reading My Stuff Anyway!
I Really Appreciate It!
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Devin sounds yummy *purrrs*
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Ok, Simpler Way.

Im Just Going To Edit The Top Post For My Story, So Keep Reading That One.
It Will Grow xP
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Heya. Sorry Its Been A While Since Iv'e Written, Little Motivation At The Moment, I'll Upload More Soon When Iv'e Written But In The Meantime I Thought I'd Just Post The Start Of One Of My Other Novels, It's Too Long To Post The Whole Thing. Cheers! =]


Rae gazed dreamily out of the classroom window, the sun shone unusually brightly for the middle of march, it danced off the dull green leaves, hanging plainly from the branches brushing against the pane of the window every so often, making a faint scratching sound Rae found oddly calming. She sighed and tugged back her long blonde hair behind her ears, the various shades fell dazzlingly across her back catching the light every so often, making it appear almost white, then, just a few moments later, flicked her hair forward again, covering the five silver hoops hanging off her right ear.
She glanced up at the board and scanned the notes on it before returning her focus to the partially doodle filled page in front of her and began tapping her pen on the worn, wooden desk in front of her.
She had been sixteen for seven months now, and the sixteen years she’d been alive, she felt like there was nothing in her life she had properly accomplished, just day after pointless day stuck in the same place doing the same old things, nothing new, nothing exciting, just stuck surviving.
Mrs Selman snapped her back to reality with her favourite phase to use to her, ‘Pay Attention!’, and Rae placed her pen hastily onto her page and acted as if she were writing the notes from the board, but as soon as Mrs Selman turned her back, Rae dropped her pen onto her desk and continued to stare out the window watching birds glide smoothly across the light blue sky, which was dotted with wispy puffs of clouds.
“God, will she ever shut the hell up!” muttered Ruby under her breath with a hint of annoyance in her voice, Rae smirked and turned to her friend sitting beside her, dragging her eyes from the scenery outside and looked past Ruby while still giving her attention and replied ‘”Highly doubt it, she’s been teaching us English for the past two years and she hasn’t yet“.
Rae delved into her black, school blazer, which had been slung casually over the back of her seat as always, she hated wearing it, it seemed so formal and business-like, so Rae just carried it around rather than wear it. She produced a compact mirror from the inside pocket. She checked her face in it, running her fingers over her long, sooty eyelashes, then evening up the light brown eye shadow tinting her eyelids , enhancing the deep blue of her eyes.
She shut the mirror abruptly and replaced it in the pocket then glanced at her watch praying for the lesson to end, and with incomprehensible relief heard the bell toll loudly and grabbed her books and pencil case laying strewn, unused across the table and hastily shoved them into her bag before flinging it over one shoulder and rushing out of the classroom, glad to be free of it stuffy atmosphere.
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