Post Reply Dragonika: A One Shot WIP (Opinions?)
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Posted 6/13/13 , edited 6/26/13

Shatter the Sky.

Would really love some opinions from you guys on the story. I'm kind of desperate for feedback, so anything will help. ^_^

Summary:
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Akiro Hashimoto is hated and avoided by his classmates, for reasons unknown. It's obvious an unfortunate turn of events have left his reputation in pieces. But one day, an earthquake shatters the school in two, and Akiro throws himself headlong into the crack in order to save a girl from falling in. The price was Akiro himself falling down into the deep black.

Once he awakens, Akiro finds himself in a mysterious mystical forest, awoken by the atrocious smell of flatulent gasses. The source?... a three foot one, big eared, green skinned goblin with a creepy smile. The goblin introduces Akiro to the world of Edgeland, another dimension bordering the real world and the deep darkness beyond known as the Void, with the purpose of serving as a protective barrier between the Void and reality. Akiro, with no way to return, must now survive in a world full of monsters, magic and barbaric and bodacious warriors alike. To aid him, Akiro stumbles upon an old and worn single edged sword imbued with the spirit of an Ethereal Dragon, known by all around: Dragonika!
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Some cliché stuff, but the world and characters and story have some pretty deep construction. I had to chop it down quite a bit to fit it into a stand alone one shot.
So what do you guys think?
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Posted 6/19/13 , edited 6/27/13
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Posted 6/22/13
Welp, scrapped pretty much all the above pages except the last one, which is just a placeholder. Will be uploading the new pages whenever it's complete.
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Posted 6/26/13 , edited 6/26/13
Got a few things done. Made some pretty major revisions to the story, and got started working on a cover image... and redid the logo. haha.


This is the new logo... for now. XP


Cover image in progress.



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