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Posted 1/25/08
http://www.fictionpress.com/s/2465969/1/

The link above is to my novel-in-progress, Daryem.
It'd be nice if I got some reviews and constructive criticism :3
I've only got the prologue up at the moment, and I'll post in here when I put up more chapters.
It's fantasy, so fantasy-haters beware (surprisingly, there are a lot of people who dislike fantasy novels D:)
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Posted 1/27/08
Lol, i disagree. I love FANTASY~! Okay, i half-read (I may of skimmed through a few parts) of your prologue....It's really good. I love the way you put in a very nice plot right at the beginning. I have no criticism to offer, because i really thought it was good. So keep posting~! I wanna hear more.
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Posted 1/28/08
I've posted up a short plot summary sort of, of Daryem in my FP profile, but i'll post it here too.

"Anyway, my current work is Daryem, a story about a girl named Skya Vitapax who is a 'mage' in the world of Aglana, and finds that she must go on a long journey to search for her grandfather, and maybe even break the Medium that ties the King of the Faeries, Daryem, to her world. However, she is misinformed and informed of too little in much of the story, which creates major problems and misconceptions. Her straightforward and demanding personality also assumes various things that turn out to be untrue to her disadvantage. The reader is taken on a journey to find out the secrets of the Universe, the true nature of Calling Energy, the consequences of Daryem's power, the reason why she can use her own body as a Medium, and the truth about the faeries and Ellemar Grid."
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