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Posted 1/26/08
She looks at the crowd and shock streams through her body till now her singing had only been but a hobby, everyones waiting the piano is playing they all expect good from what they are paying,her friends egg her on from the front row they sit, suddenly like fire the stage is lit, as she stands on the stage her beauty is glistning, she hears her father words sing like nobody is listening, she lets out a sound and claps begin to start for when the girl sings it comes straight from her heart!
Posted 1/26/08
I love that what was just fun for her is really more of a passion and she sings with all her heart. XD
Very good. Though, it feels incomplete.
It feels like it should be a little longer. Besides what I think in that department, I love it.
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Posted 1/27/08
It's like we can truly feel what a singer feels - like the ending of "200 pounds of beauty".
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Posted 1/27/08
I liked it! try breaking it up like a poem though

Example:

She looks at the crowd and shock streams through her body
Till now her singing had only been but a hobby,
Everyones waiting the piano is playing
They all expect good from what they are paying,
Her friends egg her on from the front row they sit,
suddenly like fire the stage is lit.

As she stands on the stage her beauty is glistning,
She hears her father words sing like nobody is listening,
She lets out a sound and claps begin to start
For when the girl sings it comes straight from her heart!


Can't wait to see more
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