My manga Lucius
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Posted 3/6/14 , edited 3/27/14
Well this manga is inspired by death note, and we haven't done much work on it yet in terms of pages/artwork.
but im hoping that me and my team get it published on sites like crunchyroll!

NOTE!
Some of this stuff is WIP

Page 1


Page 2


Page 3


Fan Art of "Lucius"


Lucius Cover Image:


Want to see more visit our gallery:
http://flamespeedy.deviantart.com/gallery/

We do have a couple more pages than this, but this is the best one to show off :)

Any questions, just ask!
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Posted 3/7/14 , edited 3/27/14
Let me know what u think
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Posted 3/11/14
It's hard to really tell what's going on in the page you posted. The first time I looked at it I didn't know it was a laptop. The panel layout isn't exactly using the space on the page in the most efficient manner either. You mentioned that you have a team of assistants helping you on this project...what exactly are they working on?
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Posted 3/27/14

unitzer07 wrote:

It's hard to really tell what's going on in the page you posted. The first time I looked at it I didn't know it was a laptop. The panel layout isn't exactly using the space on the page in the most efficient manner either. You mentioned that you have a team of assistants helping you on this project...what exactly are they working on?


First off most of what i posted is all WIP or changed all ready, but thanks for the feedback on that side of things.
Currently the team is growing more and more so we do hope to bring amazing content, just wanted to share so far for motivation.
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Your art, is actually very good. o-o
I have a few suggestions, though, use what you find helpful. I would change the font. It's good for the chapter title, but using for the rest of the chapter looks sort of...too dramatic. The first 2 reads as a Z.
I'd also box in the text, whether in an actual box, or a speech bubble, and add more into the background, even if just a tone. Backgrounds are really hard to draw, but even if your figures are amazing, the lack of a background will take away from that. Like the drummer in a band. I didn't realize the first panel on the second page was of a tv at first.

I hope to see more pages when they're out! You do have potential to make a good comic like this!
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