What do you think of my Story?
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Posted 4/25/14 , edited 4/25/14
So I've been working on this for a while now after stopping and starting other stories that I just never continued.

I changed my approach to writing and planned out what my characters were going to be, what kind of backstory they have, descriptions etc.

I think I have a good setup for this story of mine so I'd like your opinion on what you thought of it.

https://drive.google.com/file/d/0BwA6VHimkM5VRUV4MEdSNGh5dTg/edit?usp=sharing
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Posted 4/26/14
Really good prologue, the story reawlly made you want to read more but it felt like it would lead up to someone being able to wield all elements but as long as that wont happen and it wont turn into another avatar it should be fine.
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Posted 5/10/14

SaintNatsu wrote:

Really good prologue, the story really made you want to read more but it felt like it would lead up to someone being able to wield all elements but as long as that wont happen and it wont turn into another avatar it should be fine.


My actual idea for it is a psychological take on the "Avatar" premise.

Imagine if Aang, instead of being a reincarnation of himself able to wield all elements, was instead possessed by an apathetic being, whilst tormented by another that pointed put all his faults and makes him question his reasoning.

And then he snaps.

What would he do?

To break it down, I want to write a typical "fellowship on a quest" story, where everyone knows their purpose and then subject them to all kinds of horrors and trauma that makes them question if it is even worth moving forward, and not everyone is as they seem...
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Posted 5/10/14
I KNOW IZ NOT MUCH FEEDBACK BUT

I RIKE IT
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Posted 6/3/14
Is does seem like avatar, but the key is how do u make it different and distance yourself from Avatar? Instead of humans maybe aliens or animals. Maybe different types of planets? Fire planets, water planets etc?
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