Post Reply O.K. I wrote a Fanfic short story
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Posted 11/4/14 , edited 5/4/15
It's a Star Wars Fanfic, based on SWTOR. It's kind of long, but instead of posting the story here, I posted it at an actual Fan Fiction website. I'm just gonna provide the link to my story.

I hope you like it.

Summary:

A few years after ascending to the top of the Sith hierarchy, a dangerous situation threatens to destroy Nox's position on the Dark Council and ruin his legacy. Tragedy strikes close to him, but he works to turn tragedy into opportunity. He must discover who his enemy is and strike back to protect what is his and destroy his foe. This is a very dark story.

https://www.fanfiction.net/s/11065204/2/Sith-Politics-Fun-and-Games


EDIT: If you manage to read my story, or part of it, kindly tell me what you think. What did you like, or not like, about it? What killed it for you? Or, what really hooked you? Did you finish, or did you quit, and why?

EDIT 2: Fixed a bunch of grammar errors. It should be a smoother read this time around.

EDIT 3: (2 March 2015) Completed major revisions to the story to improve flow and continuity.

EDIT: 4 (4 May 2015) It's been updated with new chapters added. Got good reviews so, far. I'm thinking you'll like it - if you like Star Wars stuff.
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Posted 11/9/14
i quit, nothing personal, but im not a star wars fan. Probably should've never started
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Posted 5/4/15
im not the biggest star wars fan, but i did like it. it flowed well very smooth technique.
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I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for commenting.
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Posted 5/17/15 , edited 5/17/15
i shall try reading it, but about your edit 4. your goal should be to make anyone like it not just star wars fans lol.


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okay, my biggest concern with this, despite all the questions i'm asking myself while reading.

Is you have waay too many adjectives to describe what is going on. It is unnecessary and is drowning the story.

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