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So I have an idea for a possible anime series, but I'm not sure how people would react to it. Feel free to offer me suggestions (but don't even think of stealing my idea, got it!?) Anyway, here's a brief synopsis:

The main character is basically a nerd/mad scientist. He and his friends, being typical nerds, have a hard time getting girlfriends and have been just 'dating' virtual ones. But deep down, they start to realize that they want real girlfriends but they don't want to go through the trouble of asking them out. So this gives out protagonist an idea! He could bioengineer the perfect girl in his dad's laboratory (his dad's a scientist and he taught him all he knows). He and his friends collect hair strands from their female classmates to obtain DNA and he creates a prototype. It's not long before he creates more and decides to sell them to lonely dudes everywhere! And, of course, he ends up pissing off a lot of girls in the process because their boyfriends are dumping them for these models that he created! Our protagonist is soon to realize what a devastating domino effect he's created as an organization of angry girls start to form and target him for execution! So they capture and imprison him! He soon learns that his prototypes are multiplying at a rapid rate and could potentially drive the female race (and therefore, the human race) to extinction! So he starts to regret his actions and as the girls are about to put him to death, he makes a plea deal: He would right his own wrong by agreeing to help them destroy his own creations and saving humanity. It won't be easy, but he's up for the challenge!

Whattaya think? Feel free to offer constructive criticism (but no insults, please!)

EDIT: I'm kinda having trouble deciding whether the fake girls should be clones or androids. Or maybe a combination of both?

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What? All views, no comments?! C'mon, people, I need your feedback so that I can improve upon this idea for a story! Help me out here!
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I like the idea! And probably would watch it, sounds crazy. I know you said anime series, but are you actually making an animated series, or is it gonna be in writing or comic book format? Sorry, just wondering. xP
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The story would make more sense if he were selling robots, not people.

If you want to stick to people, you should make it based on magic instead of science, so that no one questions why he doesn't do more useful things with his scientific genius like become a billionaire by founding a company that grows artificial limbs and organs.

By making it based on magic instead, the fact that he doesn't fully understand it means that it makes sense that he's not doing more useful things that could make him more money. Also, the women he's conjuring might actually be demons and this plays in better with making the prototypes both evil and capable of building up their numbers.

The women who are targeting him might be part of an organization of mages tasked with keeping societal order intact rather than merely being jilted lovers. Going with wizards rather than angry exes would make characterizing these women as non-losers an easier task. It depends on how throw-away the women in story are going to be, though.
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mintyfraud wrote:

The story would make more sense if he were selling robots, not people.

If you want to stick to people, you should make it based on magic instead of science, so that no one questions why he doesn't do more useful things with his scientific genius like become a billionaire by founding a company that grows artificial limbs and organs.

By making it based on magic instead, the fact that he doesn't fully understand it means that it makes sense that he's not doing more useful things that could make him more money. Also, the women he's conjuring might actually be demons and this plays in better with making the prototypes both evil and capable of building up their numbers.

The women who are targeting him might be part of an organization of mages tasked with keeping societal order intact rather than merely being jilted lovers. Going with wizards rather than angry exes would make characterizing these women as non-losers an easier task. It depends on how throw-away the women in story are going to be, though.


I like this idea. Sounds interesting.

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So not that your specific idea has been done before but you should check out these stories on that idea.

Weird Science
Futurama: Season 3: Episode 15 "Futurama" I Dated a Robot

I think you idea is interesting, it actually relates to a true concern for the Japanese right now. read these articles.

http://www.cnn.com/2009/WORLD/asiapcf/12/16/japan.virtual.wedding/
http://www.anigamers.com/2009/11/japanese-man-marries-dating-sim.html
http://www.escapistmagazine.com/forums/read/7.214545-Half-of-Japanese-Females-Think-Virtual-Girlfriends-Are-Superior?page=1
http://blogs.wsj.com/japanrealtime/2014/06/06/japans-population-problem-in-five-charts/

this also connects with their NEET problem, and also to the problems that "internet everywhere" has brought on, but lets focus on the your problem you want to write about.

So the question i have is which part of your story do you wish to focus on, the beginning or the aftermath?

Also is this a drama, or a comedy, or somewhere in between?

Some of your themes for the first bit seem to be loneliness, acceptance, and courage. What are you wanting to express?

Personally i would love to hear you explore the depths of loneliness, and brokenness this creates and all the stories about that.

@ Mintyfraud As to the idea this needs to be magic, it can be, but it could be a story about a genius who creates a empathy AI so good that it almost has perfect response to our moods. this is not too out of the norm as we have lie detectors, and other devises that with enough data a computer might be able to detect our mood. The fantasy part is the idea of the perfect response, but that's not too far for our imagination to go.

@ Mintyfraud As to the believability of a man devoting his life to the meaningless, It really depends on perspective. What i mean is that i am not an atheist, BUT to an atheist i am wasting my time on a meaningless pursuit. The point is that the character doesn 't really need to be selling robots to be believable, just have believable perspective of why he does that; like, obsession, or loneliness.

@Mintyfraud Actually that could be its own anime.

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Your concern for the Japanese is unwarranted, Das1s, because it is based on your being overly gullible. I could find you a few articles that would give you the impression that Americans are in danger of becoming extinct because they tend to be obese gun enthusiasts who frequently shoot each other by accident when they aren't having heart attacks.
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I'm sorry it was not an attack on the Japanese, it was a point that it can be good drama.

Yes and those articles on Japanese are only research into that drama. they are dealing with issues of a declining population, and dealing with NEETs. Also we are also dealing with the problems of internet everywhere as they are too.

As to whether all Japanese women fill inferior to there 2d counter parts, as you can see it was only 300 women and 1 study, i never base an overview of there country on this. But look at the story that is being written.


The main character is basically a nerd/mad scientist. He and his friends, being typical nerds, have a hard time getting girlfriends and have been just 'dating' virtual ones. But deep down, they start to realize that they want real girlfriends but they don't want to go through the trouble of asking them out. So this gives out protagonist an idea! He could bioengineer the perfect girl in his dad's laboratory (his dad's a scientist and he taught him all he knows). He and his friends collect hair strands from their female classmates to obtain DNA and he creates a prototype. It's not long before he creates more and decides to sell them to lonely dudes everywhere! And, of course, he ends up pissing off a lot of girls in the process because their boyfriends are dumping them for these models that he created! Our protagonist is soon to realize what a devastating domino effect he's created as an organization of angry girls start to form and target him for execution! So they capture and imprison him! He soon learns that his prototypes are multiplying at a rapid rate and could potentially drive the female race (and therefore, the human race) to extinction! So he starts to regret his actions and as the girls are about to put him to death, he makes a plea deal: He would right his own wrong by agreeing to help them destroy his own creations and saving humanity. It won't be easy, but he's up for the challenge!



It is all about that drama! those articles are meant to help write that drama. This story would include those issues, and you can pull it right from real world articles, think how cool that is to tie it in like that.

As to my gullibility, perhaps, but i did choose articles from groups i trust, so take as you will.

I do kind of wish you would not attack me so quickly, and instead ask me to clarify. Also if you really feel that those articles are untrue, it would really help all of us to see the counter articles that state your point. You would definitely be helping me see the truth.

Thanks for replying


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Posted 1/24/15 , edited 1/24/15

lolitaninja wrote:

So I have an idea for a possible anime series, but I'm not sure how people would react to it. Feel free to offer me suggestions (but don't even think of stealing my idea, got it!?) Anyway, here's a brief synopsis:

The main character is basically a nerd/mad scientist. He and his friends, being typical nerds, have a hard time getting girlfriends and have been just 'dating' virtual ones. But deep down, they start to realize that they want real girlfriends but they don't want to go through the trouble of asking them out. So this gives out protagonist an idea! He could bioengineer the perfect girl in his dad's laboratory (his dad's a scientist and he taught him all he knows). He and his friends collect hair strands from their female classmates to obtain DNA and he creates a prototype. It's not long before he creates more and decides to sell them to lonely dudes everywhere! And, of course, he ends up pissing off a lot of girls in the process because their boyfriends are dumping them for these models that he created! Our protagonist is soon to realize what a devastating domino effect he's created as an organization of angry girls start to form and target him for execution! So they capture and imprison him! He soon learns that his prototypes are multiplying at a rapid rate and could potentially drive the female race (and therefore, the human race) to extinction! So he starts to regret his actions and as the girls are about to put him to death, he makes a plea deal: He would right his own wrong by agreeing to help them destroy his own creations and saving humanity. It won't be easy, but he's up for the challenge!

Whattaya think? Feel free to offer constructive criticism (but no insults, please!)


I like the idea. Just a few suggestions and questions. What happens to his friends when he becomes a bioengeneering girlfriend building genius? How long does it take him to produce one girl? What are the requirements for one of this manmade girls to reproduce? Are they biologically the same as non engineered girls? Can they reproduce the same way? Is this boy making these girls as charity or a buisness? Does he start out making girls for charity and then realize he can make money off of this? How are the girls he makes transported to the boys house? What are the societal implications? Parents, I would imagine would also not like him, because their daughters can not find a husband because this one boy is producing girlfriends. How does he know what each boy wants? Do they mail him a request form? How are they able to obtain the hair strands? Do they stumble upon enough at school lying around? If they have to obtain them from the girls themselves how? Pulling them out? If so how does he manage to pull out the hairs without the girls noticing?

Sorry for the barrage of questions I really like the idea. I think if, as the boy realized that he could also cater to other boys, he realizes, he can make money too and set up a buisness it would help the story. As the band of non bio engeneered girls is out for the boy's head it may help if by that time he was a big CEO or company president. This would make it harder to get to him and you could even have him develop an inflated ego by that time. The kind of person with thoughts that they are so wonderful for doing this. Also I think that it would help the plot if you had him stubbornly refuse to help them when they catch him and use his corporate ties to break free from their captivity. Then, that will help the stories momentum. I think that it would help deepen the story if these girls were unable to reproduce, if you decide to go the company route. If the bio engeneered girls were unable to reproduce it would put emphasis on the manufacturing and would differentiate the non manufactured from the manufactured girls. Another thing is, that if this boy just readily agrees to help the girls kill the manufactured girls, then, manufactured or not, he and these girls would be leading a genocide against the biologically engineered girls so it may be helpful if eventually the manufactured girls rebel. In addition the boys he sent girls to, would rebel because this one guy would be deciding to kill their girlfriend simply because a band of girls who were rejected decided to. My suggestion here, is to put yourself in the shoes of these males who girlfriends are being killed. If say, the government decided that the girl or boy you were going out with is to be executed simply because some girl or boy somewhere is unhappy that you rejected them what would you do? Doing this would actually help the story but I think that he should refuse and be stubborn, first, before just agreeing to go on a genocide against all the girls he made. There are many factors that may cause this boy to hesitate to kill the girls he made. 1. They are girls he made, 2. his conscience says its not moral 3. He may be under an inflated ego thinking he has helped so many males (which he may have, but he also angered alot of people.) Also if you added in a character that this boy cares about then you could use that to have the girls force him into helping them. Maybe this boy lives with a kind grandma who has taken care of him since birth and the non biologically engineered girls who are out to get him, capture his grandma and threaten to kill her if he does not help them. I really like the idea. I can see a well developed plot forming if you work on it a bit more. I can also see a conflict with many parties clashing. Those parties would be, the boy, the biologically engineered girls, the non biologically engineered girls, the parents of the non biologically engineered girls, the boyfriends of the biologically engineered girls,the boy's family and friends, the family of the boy's friends and if you decide on to go the corperate route , the company the boy started and if you want to push the tension and events so it escalates into violence then you could create a scenerio with rioting in the street and the government could get involved too.

Its a great idea. I like it. It just needs a bit more work. I look forward to seeing it as an anime someday.
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Sounds original, and that's the most important part I guess.

Seems like it would take a while to get into, and the really interesting part would obviously be the scientist destroying his own creations. I'd probably watch a couple episodes but assuming that it would start out kind of slow, there would have to be some solid comedy integrated to keep my captivated.
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totally stealling your idea, jk.

um sounds cool, but describe your plot more, describe how you envisioning things to play out.

why does he needs to destroy the creations. did he essentially clone the girls? wouldn't the issue being that these girls are losing their identity and not their boyfriends.

so next part, how are the girls multiplying? are they just splitting like mitosis or are the reproducing? how would they even go about to stopping them. examples of the destruction.

do you have main, supporting characters and antagonist envisioned? how and in what ways will they intereact? what are major events that you plan to occur, how do you envision them succeeding or not? depending on how you are going to snatch audiences, such as indepth plot, or comical styles, you can make it go so many ways.

http://watchersonthewall.com/george-r-r-martins-original-plan-game-thrones/ just look at martin rr game of thrones proposal, it has alot of details for just 3 pages worth of info that structures his books. although these are just first drafts brainstorms.

its sounded interesting at first, but then it gets confusing.

who are the intended viewers?

i can see this as a kids next door kind of animation, since the plot device that i envision you using would make it look like the styles used in knD.
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lolitaninja wrote:

What? All views, no comments?! C'mon, people, I need your feedback so that I can improve upon this idea for a story! Help me out here!




I wish people gave ME some feedback for my idea...
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Ohhhhh, that's just my genre!!! I love the idea! I'm sure as a story it would be great (keep me posted, I wanna read that story), but I think it'd be even more riveting as an anime. Just imagine how cool that would be~
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it sound like a awesome idea i'd totally watch/read it but i would make the girls robots since it's illegal to sell people
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Well... illegal to sell people, but a contract to genetically engineer something from a strand of hair might not have applicable rules. Ugh, me and my big mouth. Anyway, interesting idea.

I'd wonder about competition: is MC special for any reason? Even if he gets a head start, realistically competitors would show up (assuming this is profitable) unless MC is special somehow. I suppose you could just say he figured something out that no one else can, but I'm not sure how satisfying that explanation would be.
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