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Posted 4/5/15 , edited 4/5/15
Turk stopped chuckling and returned to the state he was in when he entered the cafe, hungry, fortunately a waitress came by and placed a plate stacked with food on the table, he hadn't ordered that much or even paid for it, it was a perk that came with walking around with such a massive sword. The cons out-weighted the pros by a mile but little things like this were welcome. He took the knife and fork and shoved the food into his mouth, he drowned it all with a huge gulp of water, he was a noisy eater. He took a deep breathe out taking a moment to admire the simple meal, for a mere second he had a genuine smile on his face.
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"Anyway" He paused to mentally block out the sound of sluggish eating coming from behind him. "You wanted to give me recommendations about my work?" He asked with a friendly smile.
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Anima sighed from the noisy eater. The " date" wasn't going well but their finally was a chance to redeem it.... Though their wasn't much hope seeing how he hadn't asked her name. She finally got her coffee to her relief. " Ah yes , The story and characters were wonderful I honestly wouldn't change that the writing style could be improved though. It is your first book correct? " She was speaking kindly trying not to offend him. She wasn't lying, if she disliked it shr wouldn't even be on a date. She focused on Royle though tried to remember if she had seen the large man before.
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Turk simply continued to eat, though the conversation between the two near him had previously peeked his interested, talk of creatures and now of Gaudium, if they'd speak their names he'd remember them and perhaps ask around, perhaps.
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"Yeah, it is." He confirmed, seeming very happy with all the response he could get.
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Anima smiled a bit glad he was cheerful instead of defensive when getting critiqued. She got out his book and a notepad and pen of her own. " Artists or authors always strive to have their own style. Its always interesting seeing how it improve. The best way to naturally begin is a bit of mimicry of other authors. From what I can tell you're a fan of ( a famous author who's books he's read). Of course your style is your own but it can always be improved. Always use colorful word choice as will such as." She opened his book and showed him a page. " Such as " they could have been. " Readers love drama emphasize feeling using " should " instead of could would help. Imagery and metaphors are also a writers best friend. "
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(Famous writers> Edgar Allan Poe and Haruki Murakami)

Royle listened very intently to everything she had to say.
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As did Turk to his own misfortune. He continued to shovel the food down his throat.
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Anima couldn't help but to feel a bit geeky. She was happy she wasn't being judged or criticised for it. Normally she acted outgoing to lure people but she could be herself for once. She went the through the book and gave him any recommendation she could think of to help him. Once she finished giving her advice she smiled. " Still all in all I'm impressed for a first novel how old are you?" She took a moment to drink some coffee and look at the man thinking he would coke if hec kept eating like that.
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"19" He replied bluntly before scribling something down in his notebook.

(Going to bed, goodnight|^^)
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" Ah I see. " She didn't expect him to be younger than her.
( Night unfortunately I should get some rest so I'll be going to bed as well.)
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(Night, ima go to sleep too, see ya'll later.)
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After finishing whatever he wrote, he looked at his wristwatch. "Well I`ll better be going now, isn`t good for buisness to be tired." He said before standing up and reaching out his hand. "Thank you for all your help, miss......." He waited for her to fill him in.
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" Anima. " She smiled and shaking \ accepting his hand his hand.
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Turk went for another scoop of food when his fork hit the plate making a nasty scratching sound, which didn't seem to bother him.He poured the rest of the water down his throat and stood up ready to leave.
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