Post Reply FEELINGS OF LOVE
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29 / M / St.Vincent
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Posted 2/4/08
feelings lost the moment that i began to feel
a pain and suffering no one can know
is any of this real?

i feel my body trembling, my heart as cold as snow
the one i love, i hurt to much
when will the summer wind blow?

nights so cold, my resolve dwindles, i hunger for her touch
with open arms i welcome her she comes into my dream
so far away from me she is yet i need her so much

i open my heart after so long it seems
she gives her all to me
i give my heart and body, mind and soul and give in to a love supreme


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Posted 2/4/08
hmmm (constructive) you should have made a longer ending it seems the first part was good and then you cut it short. but aside from that very nice
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Posted 2/5/08
didnt want to go on being depressed fo to long lol :P
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