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Let me know if a thread like this one exist or not.
Thanks a bunches!

Explain your opinion in great detail.

I'm in need of help with writing. Does anybody have any idea on how to properly show don't tell when it comes to writing? Any advice?

Bonus Questions:

1) Do you uses the words "and", "but", and "yet" a lot in writing?

2) Do you find it easier to write in first or third person?

3) Are you good or bad at show don't tell in your writing?



If you do not know what show don't tell means, Google is your best answer.

Enjoy!!!
Posted 5/25/15
Don't you think it would be a bit more courteous to explain what it means since you are the one asking for help?

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Don't you think it would be a bit more courteous to explain what it means since you are the one asking for help?



The only thing I can explain on is that I am writing a story but I don't know how to show don't tell properly.
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I guess your previous thread about this didn't help much, huh?
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I guess your previous thread about this didn't help much, huh?


No.
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How do you properly show instead of telling? By writing in such a way that the reader can see and understand what's going on without you having to spell it out for them.

For example:

A chill crept down from the back of her neck to her shaking fingertips that held the letter.
VS.
She felt fear as she held the letter.

At least this is what I learned as a writing major.

As for your other questions:

1) I use a lot of conjunctions in general.

2) I have no preference in this, though writing in first person using an unreliable narrator is quite fun.

3) In prose: great. In poetry: terribad.
Posted 5/25/15
I believe you embody the character, picture yourself there and explain from that point of view to the best of your ability you convey how the character reacts enveloping a sense of imagery so vivid it's as if your there.
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How do you properly show instead of telling? By writing in such a way that the reader can see and understand what's going on without you having to spell it out for them.

For example:

A chill crept down from the back of her neck to her shaking fingertips that held the letter.
VS.
She felt fear as she held the letter.

At least this is what I learned as a writing major.

As for your other questions:

1) I use a lot of conjunctions in general.

2) I have no preference in this, though writing in first person using an unreliable narrator is quite fun.

3) In prose: great. In poetry: terribad.


Great example.
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I believe you embody the character, picture yourself there and explain from that point of view to the best of your ability you convey how the character reacts enveloping a sense of imagery so vivid it's as if your there.


So just place yourself in your character's shoes while you write? Isn't that first-person in a way?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

Let me know if a thread like this one exist or not.
Thanks a bunches!

Explain your opinion in great detail.

I'm in need of help with writing. Does anybody have any idea on how to properly show don't tell when it comes to writing? Any advice?

Bonus Questions:

1) Do you uses the words "and", "but", and "yet" a lot in writing?

2) Do you find it easier to write in first or third person?

3) Are you good or bad at show don't tell in your writing?



If you do not know what show don't tell means, Google is your best answer.

Enjoy!!!


Ok, so think of it this way:

If you're writing fiction or a narrative, this is how you show, but don't tell.

Show: I could hear the leaves rustle in the wind as I stepped out the front door this autumn morning.

Tell: It was windy when I walked out of the house this morning.


In the first sentence, I described the environment and how it reacted to the conditions outside as well as provided more detailed movement for my character. In other words, I am showing what is happening in that scene.

In the second sentence, I simply stated the conditions outside and what I was doing. While this isn't wrong, I am only telling the reader what is going on.

Showing is a means of immersing the reader into a story or narrative so that they become involved with the environment and feel less detached from the events occurring in that scenario. Telling accomplishes the objective of what you are trying to convey, but lacks the atmosphere that immerses the reader into your fantasy.

This also applies for narrative non-fiction as well. I hope this has helped.


1) Yes, using conjunctions such as and, but and yet are often necessary for more complex sentences. It'd be strange to not see them consistently in writing; however, changing your conjunctions every once in a while and not abusing the heck out of them by using them too often (unless you're trying to use polysyndeton for literary effect, which is an advanced writing technique) is recommended so that the piece doesn't feel to patchy. You're also less likely to run into run-ons if you monitor how many conjunctions you use.

2) I find that third person is better when you want to consider multiple points of views, notably in fiction writing, to create a more expansive world and give insight into multiple perspectives on the problem or conflict at hand. First person's limited point of view, however, can also be interesting in terms of character development and introspection, which can make the reader feel more attached to that character in particular as well as their internal and external plight in overcoming conflict.

3) I sincerely hope I am good at creating meaningful descriptions in my writing, although I cannot be the judge of my own work. I am going to be writing for likely the rest of my life, so we'll see.
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qualeshia3I'm in need of help with writing. Does anybody have any idea on how to properly show don't tell when it comes to writing? Any advice?


Unfortunate examples of Telling:
- "Earlier that day, he remembered he had seen a ninja fight a hundred laser-shooting robots singlehandedly..."
- "The babysitter was in the house, but because the killer was crazy, he went after her."
- "Abraham Lincoln stood up at Gettysburg and made a speech about how important the battle was."

There are some things we'd rather see firsthand.
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qualeshia3I'm in need of help with writing. Does anybody have any idea on how to properly show don't tell when it comes to writing? Any advice?


Unfortunate examples of Telling:
- "Earlier that day, he remembered he had seen a ninja fight a hundred laser-shooting robots singlehandedly..."
- "The babysitter was in the house, but because the killer was crazy, he went after her."
- "Abraham Lincoln stood up at Gettysburg and made a speech about how important the battle was."

There are some things we'd rather see firsthand.


That looks like something I would do while writing.
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When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?
Posted 5/25/15

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When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?


Adverbs. As Stephen King once said:


..the road to hell is paved with adverbs..

Posted 5/25/15

qualeshia3 wrote:


potentsativa wrote:

I believe you embody the character, picture yourself there and explain from that point of view to the best of your ability you convey how the character reacts enveloping a sense of imagery so vivid it's as if your there.


So just place yourself in your character's shoes while you write? Isn't that first-person in a way?


Yea it's something like that just so you can place more imagery in your writing as to deeper describe whats happening so that the readers can experience it as well, yea but it doesn't have to be conveyed that way.
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