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When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?


Adverbs. As Stephen King once said:


..the road to hell is paved with adverbs..



Really?
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I believe you embody the character, picture yourself there and explain from that point of view to the best of your ability you convey how the character reacts enveloping a sense of imagery so vivid it's as if your there.


So just place yourself in your character's shoes while you write? Isn't that first-person in a way?


Yea it's something like that just so you can place more imagery in your writing as to deeper describe whats happening so that the readers can experience it as well, yea but it doesn't have to be conveyed that way.


If I wrote a story in first person then edit it into third person, will it make a difference or not?
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I guess I'm going to have to force myself to not use adverbs then..
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Our 6th grade writing teacher used to make us write Tom Swift jokes as aversion therapy to traumatize us against adverbs:

"I'm going to pet that tiger," he said, offhandedly.
"Oh well, guess I'm all out of flowers," he said, lackadaisically.
"I dropped the toothpaste", he said, crestfallen.

(...Okay, we GOT it, already!)
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When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?


It's not the words you shouldn't use, but rather it's adding the detail and movement to the piece. If you want to avoid telling, use more descriptive words and use the character's environment to convey your thoughts rather than stating something that is true.
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When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?


It's not the words you shouldn't use, but rather it's adding the detail and movement to the piece. If you want to avoid telling, use more descriptive words and use the character's environment to convey your thoughts rather than stating something that is true.


Use better adjectives and less adverbs?
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qualeshia3 wrote:


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qualeshia3 wrote:




When you show, what words shouldn't you use to show the readers that you're not telling?


It's not the words you shouldn't use, but rather it's adding the detail and movement to the piece. If you want to avoid telling, use more descriptive words and use the character's environment to convey your thoughts rather than stating something that is true.


Use better adjectives and less adverbs?


Use more of both, really.
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Okay then.

Quick question: If I wrote a story in first person then edit it into third person, will it make a difference or not?
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Okay then.

Quick question: If I wrote a story in first person then edit it into third person, will it make a difference or not?


That...would be somewhat difficult. If you weren't already exploring multiple perspectives and you're far enough into the story, then, I'd suggest not switching into third. If you haven't written much yet, then only switch to third if you plan on exploring more perspectives.
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It's really that difficult? I tried before though I wasn't too deep into a story.

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Okay then.

Quick question: If I wrote a story in first person then edit it into third person, will it make a difference or not?



yeah, it will make a difference.
in the first person, you are inside the MC, you can hear their thoughts, feel what they feel.
thrid person is more like watching a movie about the MC, you see it from the outside.

i dont really write first person much, i kinda suck at it. first person forces you to keep the same perspective.
i write third person. a problem alot of people have is perspective.
i have two MC, hanna, and Kara. Hanna is american girl, Kara is an alien. they end up as sisters. the way i write for them is different. Hanna calls her mom 'mom', where as Kara calls her 'Mother' or 'Honored Mother' when she is super happy or in deep sh!t, so based on the perspective, who im writing about, a make subtle changes like that. i picked that trick up from harry turtledove.

hopes this helps.

and join a writers club. probably be a lot of old people, but they will point out problems.
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Thanks.
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I'm quite good at all those things, it's not hard. First person is easier for me.
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