Post Reply Me Story: Elemental Warriors. (INCOMPLETE)
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Posted 2/5/08 , edited 3/1/08
its been on here long enough so sorry i have to erase it now =X
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Posted 2/10/08
"Well, it's a bit long, so bare with it.. ty."
I didn't realize it was so long till I read it and it took me some time.. lol

Some conversations I read were useless.. It's a short story, you're limited in word count as it is so its pointless to waste energy on writing things that has no relevance to plot unless it's for characterization, or comic relief.

The speech is casual.. Way too casual for a short story, if this was a script instead it would have been so much better. Some scenes lack detail, but I do like the phrase "pepper and spices to my combat skills". Nice touch.
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