Post Reply I want to start writing/making anime reviews and would like advice!
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A little over a year ago I wrote reviews for Hunter x Hunter and Kuroko no Basuke out of boredom during a summer break that was longer than usual (It's normally 6 weeks in the UK but I had one that was closer to 3 months due to finishing with exams) but didn't do much past those reviews.

But recently I thought it'd be fun to start writing them on a more frequent basis and eventually move it from Crunchyroll's review section and into a video format. So yesterday I tried writing 2 reviews, one for Haikyuu!! which gave my thoughts mostly on its first season and one for Owarerumono The False Faces which was a more first impression style review.

And although I don't think my reviews were completely terrible, they certainly need a lot of work and would like some advice on how I could improve them and tips with potentially making the jump to video and making reviews for Youtube.

Any advice would be appreciated and feel free to tell me why my reviews are bad as long as the point you are making is constructive.

Posted 10/21/15 , edited 10/21/15
CR reviews are almost always positive :/ It sickens me. Meanwhile MAL tends to be have a more diverse range of views. I suggest going to MAL and looking at some of the top reviews. Archaeon and Stark700 have written greats reviews.


http://myanimelist.net/profile/Stark700/reviews

http://myanimelist.net/profile/Archaeon/reviews
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Don't worry about being original at first when it comes to creative style. Write reviews with your own voice, but don't be afraid to borrow some phrasings from others. When starting off in any art field, you will always be an exact copy of the things you like until you slowly find your voice from doing it over time. Whether you hit off well or not in terms of building a YouTube community is somewhat up to chance, but generally, observing others success is a key way to get an idea of what you can do.
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If I'm to give any real advice on how to write a review, I need to see a sample of what you're already writing. I mean there's always the generic advice one can give, that formatting and punctuation are your friends, that breaking it up into segments that are easily read and absorbed is better than giant blocks of incoherent text, but ultimately, all of that doesn't matter unless we already see what you're writing is like.

When it comes to a video review, direction and rehearsal is key. Practice that shit over and over again, do multiple takes, edit if you have to. The idea of video reviewing is to clearly present the material to the viewer. That means that clips are necessary as well. Stammering, ums and uhs are the worst when speaking to an audience and present with emotion. This means not going over the top but it means that your voice has to have inflection, tone, some sort of voice outside of the droning script reader that many beginners fall into.

Edit: Decided to present one of my own reviews as an example of what I would consider the average anime review to look like, if I'm to toot my own horn.

This is a review of the anime Koi Kaze

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LITVoid wrote:

If I'm to give any real advice on how to write a review, I need to see a sample of what you're already writing.


This is a review I wrote yesterday for Rokka no Yuusha:


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MTMxD wrote:


LITVoid wrote:

If I'm to give any real advice on how to write a review, I need to see a sample of what you're already writing.


This is a review I wrote yesterday for Rokka no Yuusha:




Alright I've read the review and I've done some basic editing to it so that it will flow better and be grammatically correct. However I left a couple of the main structural faults, so to speak, in it because I didn't want to rewrite the entire review. There are a couple reasons that I don't want to, the main being that I haven't seen what you're reviewing so I have no idea how to fill the review in the manner I would find appropriate and the second being that, in this case, you have a solid base to work off of and I don't want to inject my own style in the fears that you might take my way as the only right way which is unfair and incorrect.

That said, there are issues in your writing that we can address, though most are very minor. The first is that your writing needs a word checker and a second reading. Ignoring the comma errors, which I will get to next, I found a couple instances of words that weren't hyphenated, the misuse of the word 'to,' when 'too' should have been used and in some cases, just missing letters like 't,' instead of 'to.' These kinda things are hardly worth mentioning in any full detail, so basically my advice is just a second reading to catch little things like this.

The more pressing issues, however, are things like the incorrect usage of commas. You weren't completely wrong, you have a basic understanding of where they go and how they are used, but I would recommend pawing over a guide to using them. You were using them to extend sentences over their needed length and as such, they began to turn into run-on sentences, which are never a good idea. Don't be afraid to break up those sentences, because in some cases, that's the better choice for flow in your writing.

The biggest flaw I saw though, was the lack of variety in the sentences. Your format seems to be 'mention x about anime, although, y is blah blah blah,' which may work a few times throughout the review, but I was seeing it a couple times per short paragraph. Mix up how you structure your sentences, build some variety into it and your review will shine on.

To conclude, I think you do have a very solid base in your review writing. You understand the paragraph structure, you present what you think is important to the review and most of the grammar is done correct. Basically if you keep practicing, do a second reading and explore other ways to diversify your writing, I think you're well on your way to continue to do well. Keep at it.

Also posted below is the edit of your review. As you will see, not much is change, just small details that I thought were appropriate.

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