Post Reply Purryfur's Take-Away and Anime Deli
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Posted 12/7/15 , edited 12/8/15
Hi. I've just revamped my intro and added a second, maybe better, review to my pages. I've tried to be thoughtful, intelligent and organized. Would you mind taking a look and telling me what you think? The first, Phi-Brain, is pretty stiff, but the second, BTOOOM!, felt more natural to me as the writer.

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Posted 12/8/15 , edited 12/8/15

Purryfur wrote:

Hi. I've just revamped my intro and added a second, maybe better, review to my pages. I've tried to be thoughtful, intelligent and organized. Would you mind taking a look and telling me what you think? The first, Phi-Brain, is pretty stiff, but the second, BTOOOM!, felt more natural to me as the writer. CR/user/Purryfur/profile/pages


I'm so glad you posted this! I just now remembered that I'd had a pm prepared for you, and my computer crashed just before I hit Send!

Then when I got started back up, I forgot to redo the message.

I really enjoyed the Phi Brain review a lot, and it even influenced me to add the show to my queue. I'd tried it before and dropped, but I'm going to give it another go--thanks to your well-written description and enthusiasm!

I now look forward to reading the BTOOOM! review. I did see it all the way through, so it'll be interesting to compare my own thoughts to yours.

BTW, I fixed your links -- if you are leaving off the www.crunchyroll.com part of the url, you need to start with a "/" but you also had an extra space after the url tag.
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Posted 12/8/15 , edited 4/28/16
Thanks! That is the sort of thing that gives me trouble. Thank you for your encouraging feedback. I hope to continue to improve.
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