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"As my window has been penetrated by the light of the sun, I desire to bring my soul at ease.

My eyes and my ears, longing to drift in the wind, the comfort of that "warmth" that I've known since a little boy.

As my heart ponders, I desire softness, love and light, to be gentle, to my heart's content, to love.

And as I speak, I speak what I know, and a dear friend has taught me what I know, he taught me because I saw and wanted to know, for I questioned the whole world.

Oh how I was like a beast, a wild animal doomed to be caught in a trap before my dear friend, my dear friend whom I deeply love.

He always knew better than me, what I once knew was nothing, and he, made me know something.

I was deprived, I was nearly driven insane, those who longed, wanting hurt and calamity, to topple over and destroy yet I thirsted for drink, the water of love, yet, they gave me none, instead, salts of hatred, to quench love.

My hands would shake and my mind throbbed in pain as if my heart would break.

That wind blew through these parts again, and with it, also was my dear friend, what was once cold is now warm, what was shaking now at ease, and my soul comforted and my heart remained whole.

I to this day question the whole world, do you know such love?

Do you know as much as my dear friend does?"


Posted 4/4/16
nice that made me feel something
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Is it poem? I don't really see any rhyme scheme or any regularity in syllable counts. Also, maybe I'm just dumb, but the "story" of the poem doesn't seem to follow an arc, meaning that one sentence doesn't logically flow into the next. The writing is pretty good though.
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sundin13 wrote:

Is it poem? I don't really see any rhyme scheme or any regularity in syllable counts. Also, maybe I'm just dumb, but the "story" of the poem doesn't seem to follow an arc, meaning that one sentence doesn't logically flow into the next. The writing is pretty good though.


What would you categorize it as?
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AzuroHeart wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Is it poem? I don't really see any rhyme scheme or any regularity in syllable counts. Also, maybe I'm just dumb, but the "story" of the poem doesn't seem to follow an arc, meaning that one sentence doesn't logically flow into the next. The writing is pretty good though.


What would you categorize it as?


I don't know...a very short story?
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