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Imagine you're in a dark hallway with a woman. She's wearing a white mannequin-esque mask and a frilly black dress
and boots. She has shoulder length, silky, black hair with white tipped curls. She holds a lantern with a blue flame. She wears opera gloves. A black on her right arm and a white on her left. She is pale except for a tar-black left arm with a long claw protruding from her pointer finger.Black tears stream down her mask and she drags her claw across the wall as her gentle singing voice fills the hall.
Is this spooky?
Do you know of any way to make it spookier?


Get the nail clippers and take the mask off, sounds like a hottie.
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Being in a close proximity to a woman is a tall order for me, let alone being with one in a dark hallway.
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No. The way you describe makes it seem like I'm roaming a comic-con. Several people have covered the flaws in your approach. You've relied too much upon a description of the woman, to the extend of there being nothing else. Do not neglect atmosphere and context. Write a story, not a character profile.



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So it's just a character design? Oh, okay. I think the idea sounds pretty and mysterious, not frightening.
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The "pale women with long black hair" thing has been overused in spooky scenarios if you ask me. Or the ones that have used them are so iconic that I can´t seem to make it work with something else.
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Posted 5/12/16

ZavinRoyalheart wrote:

Imagine you're in a dark hallway with a woman. She's wearing a white mannequin-esque mask and a frilly black dress
and boots. She has shoulder length, silky, black hair with white tipped curls. She holds a lantern with a blue flame. She wears opera gloves. A black on her right arm and a white on her left. She is pale except for a tar-black left arm with a long claw protruding from her pointer finger.Black tears stream down her mask and she drags her claw across the wall as her gentle singing voice fills the hall.
Is this spooky?
Do you know of any way to make it spookier?


She sounds... sexy as hell. Like a lot of my preferences in style right there. Gothic, black/white hair, FIRE, just yessss. I need this drawn like Stat. Waifu material right there.
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ZavinRoyalheart wrote:

Imagine you're in a dark hallway with a woman. She's wearing a white mannequin-esque mask and a frilly black dress
and boots. She has shoulder length, silky, black hair with white tipped curls. She holds a lantern with a blue flame. She wears opera gloves. A black on her right arm and a white on her left. She is pale except for a tar-black left arm with a long claw protruding from her pointer finger.Black tears stream down her mask and she drags her claw across the wall as her gentle singing voice fills the hall.


If it's Miku singing "The Rakshasha & the Corpse", count me interested.
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ZavinRoyalheart wrote:

EDIT: Uh. I guess I should have made it more clear that this isn't like a story. It's a bland description because it's meant to be a description with a small bit of context. It's not a written story. It's something I plan to draw. Allow me to rephrase the question. Do you like the design. How can I improve upon it?

Oh, a drawing. Ah. Sorry about that.

Well, I guess I'd still try a couple renderings with without the black tears. It's the one thing that isn't gelling with me. Reminds me too much of running mascara. Like I'm walking with Courtney Love to listen to her terrible music.

Maybe blood tears or teas of light or small open facial wounds? But not full on bleeding and spurting wounds... the type of wound you want to touch... just raw flesh glistening in the blue light of the flame... which I assume the blue light in the lantern is a human soul and she's leading me somewhere to eviscerate me and seize my soul because the one in her lantern is just about used up.

Souls don't burn forever, you know. Gotta replace them. Like butterflies.

Now the claw makes sense.

I like it.
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ZavinRoyalheart wrote:

Imagine you're in a dark hallway with a woman. She's wearing a white mannequin-esque mask and a frilly black dress
and boots. She has shoulder length, silky, black hair with white tipped curls. She holds a lantern with a blue flame. She wears opera gloves. A black on her right arm and a white on her left. She is pale except for a tar-black left arm with a long claw protruding from her pointer finger.Black tears stream down her mask and she drags her claw across the wall as her gentle singing voice fills the hall.
Is this spooky?
Do you know of any way to make it spookier?

EDIT: Uh. I guess I should have made it more clear that this isn't like a story. It's a bland description because it's meant to be a description with a small bit of context. It's not a written story. It's something I plan to draw. Allow me to rephrase the question. Do you like the design. How can I improve upon it?


I would not say spooky, but interesting. I like the design idea, but if you are going for spooky I don't see it that much. The idea is there, but maybe expand on this more when you go to draw.

I would suggest focusing on the eyes. Make the eyes the first thing people are drawn to. Go for like a soulless and menacing look. If you can capture the emotion in the eyes you can work from there adding everything else and any extra features.
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None of these stories are that scary..sigh, what a dissapointment
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It's rather cliche isn't it? I mean, that's pretty much what it sounds and looks to me. Just a bunch of horror / creepy girl cliches thrown together. Keep it simple and create a focal point (if it's a drawing). You need to draw the viewer's eyes to her. Too many unnecessary elements will just confuse your viewer and that ruins the entire feel of the artwork.
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It's rather cliche isn't it? I mean, that's pretty much what it sounds and looks to me. Just a bunch of horror / creepy girl cliches thrown together. Keep it simple and create a focal point (if it's a drawing). You need to draw the viewer's eyes to her. Too many unnecessary elements will just confuse your viewer and that ruins the entire feel of the artwork.


I'm not worried about that right now. It's going to be one of many rough drafts on a piece of blank paper. I can make it stick out when I need to. I know how. Besides that it's just somethin' I just of thought of today in like 10 minutes and thought it might be fun to get a little input.
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I'm not worried about that right now. It's going to be one of many rough drafts on a piece of blank paper. I can make it stick out when I need to. I know how. Besides that it's just somethin' I just of thought of today in like 10 minutes and thought it might be fun to get a little input.


It really depends on what style or feel you're going for. As far as "creepy" is concerned, I'm not seeing it. Then again, my standards for horror and "creepy" are pretty high. I'd say draw it anyway.
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It seems like you have a pretty good idea about the character design of the woman. My only questions would be about her age and how she is holding the lantern.

Also be mindful of the setting. The woman is being portrayed in a dark hallway with a black dress and boots and such. If the hallway is very dark, be careful that the black details of the figure do not get lost in the shadows of her environment. The figure you have described has features that contrast nicely and portray a unified theme; a hard black and white contrast paired with a soft frilly dress and hair that ends in curls. It doesn't sound too complicated to me. You will want to make sure you emphasize the strong character design by not letting the background be too overbearing. By ensuring that we focus primarily on the woman and her creepiness, I think you will succeed in making the people who view the drawing feel more unnerved.

Also have a specific kind of hallway in mind when you start to draw: an old building? A hospital? The context matters. Another thing: are there any windows in the hallway? That would open up more possibilities for light sources and cast shadows for the figure. Or will the lighting depend only on the lantern? Lighting depending only on the lantern will probably be harder to draw, but having light cast up into the woman's face might make her creepier.

If you are trying to make it extremely spooky, I would say the most important thing to pay attention to is the woman's body language. Are her arms limp by her sides, the lantern clasped loosely in her hand? You said she is singing gently so I have the image of her walking towards us slowly. I see her as an unhinged person, so play on that if you can (if that is your intent).

Does her mask have eyes? Are they black and glittering like an insect's or are they empty sockets? That will also tell us something about the woman's state of mind.
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How about her hair is jagged as if she had been pulling out herself and cutting it with blunt scissors.
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Seems like a good enough concept to draw. You seem like you know the direction you want it to take. Whether it's spooky or not will depend on the drawing itself. I think it has the potential to be spooky.
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