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Let me know if a thread like this one exist or not.
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Title:
Deus Ex Infanta

Setting:
Aokroypolis, Terris-Genesis

Genres:
Drama, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Tragedy, Romance, Fantasy, and Mystery

POV:
Third-Person

Premise:
Ten people who are Deus Ex Infantas are caught in a series of twisted and unfortunate events and try to cope with being neither Promethean or Neo-Sapien.

Plot:
Like Anti-Sapiens who are born from two Prometheans, a Deus Ex Infanta is born from two Neo-Sapiens. Deus Ex Infantas beings with god powers and abilities. Nobody knows why Deus Ex Infantas exist and it remains the biggest mystery yet. There are only ten Deus Ex Infantas in the whole world. These ten people will undergo a series of twisted and unfortunate events while trying to find their place in the world. They'll search for clues about their past and learn more about themselves.



What do you guys think? Is this a good enough plot? What changes can I make to it? Let me know what you guys think of it.

Enjoy!!!!
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Man, I have no idea. I don't know what a whole lot of the terms you just used mean nor do I know any of the themes or ideas the plot is meant to convey.
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There is not really too much information for me to emit a full valorative judgement, but it sounds intriguing enough.

Need to point out something about the names. Deus Ex Infantas translates to God of "infants". I put infants in quotations since "infantas" must be a word of your creation. In any case it just seems to me calling them Gods of Infants is not exactly appropriate.
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DViper15 wrote:

There is not really too much information for me to emit a full valorative judgement, but it sounds intriguing enough.

Need to point out something about the names. Deus Ex Infantas translates to God of "infants". I put infants in quotations since "infantas" must be a word of your creation. In any case it just seems to me calling them Gods of Infants is not exactly appropriate.


I didn't know how to word it.
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DViper15 wrote:

There is not really too much information for me to emit a full valorative judgement, but it sounds intriguing enough.

Need to point out something about the names. Deus Ex Infantas translates to God of "infants". I put infants in quotations since "infantas" must be a word of your creation. In any case it just seems to me calling them Gods of Infants is not exactly appropriate.


Actually infantas is a portugese word describing the daughters of a king or queen.
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Portugues, of course! Would have not though of it. In any case I guess I can help you name them. I'm no expert in Latin, but my mother tongue is Spanish. I can probably understand the etymology of the words better than Anglo-Saxon speakers.

First, I must ask; what is the idea behind these people?
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Portugues, of course! Would have not though of it. In any case I guess I can help you name them. I'm no expert in Latin, but my mother tongue is Spanish. I can probably understand the etymology of the words better than Anglo-Saxon speakers.

First, I must ask; what is the idea behind these people?


Well the idea is that the ten people are all gods but want to know why that is.
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Ok, I have a few ideas.

Infans ex Deus (Children of God)

Infans autem Deus (Children from God)

Theonatus (greek "theo" + latin "natus" = Godborn)

Stirpe ex Deus (Blood of God)

Stripe autem Deus

Sancti Genus (Sacred Race)

Genus Dei (Divine Race)
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DViper15 wrote:

Ok, I have a few ideas.

Infans ex Deus (Children of God)

Infans autem Deus (Children from God)

Theonatus (greek "theo" + latin "natus" = Godborn)

Stirpe ex Deus (Blood of God)

Stripe autem Deus

Sancti Genus (Sacred Race)

Genus Dei (Divine Race)


These are great. But I'm leaning towards Theonatus. Yet, what should I call the ten people in this story, far as species?
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DViper15 wrote:

Ok, I have a few ideas.

Infans ex Deus (Children of God)

Infans autem Deus (Children from God)

Theonatus (greek "theo" + latin "natus" = Godborn)

Stirpe ex Deus (Blood of God)

Stripe autem Deus

Sancti Genus (Sacred Race)

Genus Dei (Divine Race)


These are great. But I'm leaning towards Theonatus. Yet, what should I call the ten people in this story, far as species?


Deonids

Deominids

Deonisians
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DViper15 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


DViper15 wrote:

Ok, I have a few ideas.

Infans ex Deus (Children of God)

Infans autem Deus (Children from God)

Theonatus (greek "theo" + latin "natus" = Godborn)

Stirpe ex Deus (Blood of God)

Stripe autem Deus

Sancti Genus (Sacred Race)

Genus Dei (Divine Race)


These are great. But I'm leaning towards Theonatus. Yet, what should I call the ten people in this story, far as species?


Deonids

Deominids

Deonisians


Deonids sounds great.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


DViper15 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


DViper15 wrote:

Ok, I have a few ideas.

Infans ex Deus (Children of God)

Infans autem Deus (Children from God)

Theonatus (greek "theo" + latin "natus" = Godborn)

Stirpe ex Deus (Blood of God)

Stripe autem Deus

Sancti Genus (Sacred Race)

Genus Dei (Divine Race)


These are great. But I'm leaning towards Theonatus. Yet, what should I call the ten people in this story, far as species?


Deonids

Deominids

Deonisians


Deonids sounds great.




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I don't really think there is enough there to say "yes, this has potential" or "no, this doesn't have potential". What I will say though, is that I don't think fantasy babble is fun to read. Sometimes you need to make up a term or use proper nouns or whatnot, but when half of your plot summary consists of words you made up, I don't think that is really a good thing.
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sundin13 wrote:

I don't really think there is enough there to say "yes, this has potential" or "no, this doesn't have potential". What I will say though, is that I don't think fantasy babble is fun to read. Sometimes you need to make up a term or use proper nouns or whatnot, but when half of your plot summary consists of words you made up, I don't think that is really a good thing.


I do not consider this babble. Many of these words are actually real and a quick online search can reveal so. Promethean, Acropolis and Neo-Sapien are actual terms. Even in the case of Theonatus and Deonids, a simple word rooting can allow the reader to understand the meaning.

The words I used in my story... now those are babble. Alakin, Latimian, Gother, Zahati, Alatera, Vyan and Teheran have meaning only for me.
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