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Let me know if a thread like this one exist or not.
Thanks a bunches.

Here I go again: I'll need help coming up with a title for this story

Title:
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Setting:
Varisvaara(town), Xaicineia(country)

Genres:
Drama, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Action, Adventure, Fantasy, Tragedy, and Mystery

POV:
Third-Person

Premise:
A princess who loves adventures decides to help a wanted criminal clear her name. In returned the wanted criminal will save the princess's empire from an evil man.

Plot:
Miranda is a princess who love the thrill of adventures. She rather go on adventures than attend some fancy ball. But when her empire gets attacked by an evil man and his army, she must do whatever she can to save it. Miranda was forced to flee from the empire for safety reasons. She was placed in a different country and it's there she meets a girl name Ridah. Ridah is a wanted criminal who was actually framed for a crime she did not do. She wants to clear her name and find the real culprit. Ridah was once a knight serving a kind king who was murdered and she was blame. Rayleigh believes it was one of the king's sons. Miranda decides to help Ridah find the real culprit and in return she'll help Miranda save her empire. Can they do it?


Does this plot sound good or not? I think this might be the one.
Enjoy!!!
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Sounds like a very character-centric story. Could you discuss the two main characters and what makes them interesting? What gives these characters their depth?
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sundin13 wrote:

Sounds like a very character-centric story. Could you discuss the two main characters and what makes them interesting? What gives these characters their depth?


I've decided to make some changes. I've decide to make Miranda an ordinary girl who meets three bounty hunters. She and the bounty hunters go on adventures to find the most notorious criminals.


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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Sounds like a very character-centric story. Could you discuss the two main characters and what makes them interesting? What gives these characters their depth?


I've decided to make some changes. I've decide to make Miranda an ordinary girl who meets three bounty hunters. She and the bounty hunters go on adventures to find the most notorious criminals.




Same question Could you describe what gives these characters their depth?
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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Sounds like a very character-centric story. Could you discuss the two main characters and what makes them interesting? What gives these characters their depth?


I've decided to make some changes. I've decide to make Miranda an ordinary girl who meets three bounty hunters. She and the bounty hunters go on adventures to find the most notorious criminals.




Same question Could you describe what gives these characters their depth?



What do you mean by that?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

What do you mean by that?


Well, what makes a character-based story strong is largely the depth of the characters who lead it. (Now, I'm assuming that your story is character-based because that seems to be how you have written in the past and that sounds like where this story would be going, but I could be wrong. Still, that doesn't mean you don't need characters with depth). In your story, sounds like you have four main characters: Miranda and the three bounty hunters. What makes them stand out as characters? What are their defining characteristics and personalities, and what flaws or contradictions do they hold in their characters?

For example, one of my characters from my story:

Leon as a character is largely defined by his relationship to his younger brother, Arcus. His whole life has been dominated by it. His brother is a genius, but he is dangerous, so Leon has taken on the burden of both protecting him, and protecting the world from him. As such, he has all too often let his brother experiment on his body, cutting him open and putting him back together again. This has caused him to grow numb to pain and largely external sensation in general. Because of this, he began to abuse stimulants, which quickly became the only way for him to actually feel. This causes his character to transition from someone who is tired, to someone who is numb. His main flaw is that he has used other things, be it his brother or his drugs, to serve as a proxy for his own identity. His story arc involves him falling deeper into oblivion before finally losing himself, but finding a second chance within it.

So basically, what I'm asking is first, what makes your character interesting and second, what flaws do they have in their character which drive their story arc?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

What do you mean by that?


Well, what makes a character-based story strong is largely the depth of the characters who lead it. (Now, I'm assuming that your story is character-based because that seems to be how you have written in the past and that sounds like where this story would be going, but I could be wrong. Still, that doesn't mean you don't need characters with depth). In your story, sounds like you have four main characters: Miranda and the three bounty hunters. What makes them stand out as characters? What are their defining characteristics and personalities, and what flaws or contradictions do they hold in their characters?

For example, one of my characters from my story:

Leon as a character is largely defined by his relationship to his younger brother, Arcus. His whole life has been dominated by it. His brother is a genius, but he is dangerous, so Leon has taken on the burden of both protecting him, and protecting the world from him. As such, he has all too often let his brother experiment on his body, cutting him open and putting him back together again. This has caused him to grow numb to pain and largely external sensation in general. Because of this, he began to abuse stimulants, which quickly became the only way for him to actually feel. This causes his character to transition from someone who is tired, to someone who is numb. His main flaw is that he has used other things, be it his brother or his drugs, to serve as a proxy for his own identity. His story arc involves him falling deeper into oblivion before finally losing himself, but finding a second chance within it.

So basically, what I'm asking is first, what makes your character interesting and second, what flaws do they have in their character which drive their story arc?


Well, Miranda is a girl who want to find the bandits that attacked her village and killed her family. She'll do whatever it takes to find them even if it means joining some bounty hunters. The Leader of the bounty hunters(Rayleigh) is searching for the man who murdered his wife and daughter. The other two (Samara and Andry) were orphans who fled an orphanage that was attacked by a group of thugs.
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qualeshia3 wrote:

Well, Miranda is a girl who want to find the bandits that attacked her village and killed her family. She'll do whatever it takes to find them even if it means joining some bounty hunters. The Leader of the bounty hunters(Rayleigh) is searching for the man who murdered his wife and daughter. The other two (Samara and Andry) were orphans who fled an orphanage that was attacked by a group of thugs.


So what are their character flaws?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

Well, Miranda is a girl who want to find the bandits that attacked her village and killed her family. She'll do whatever it takes to find them even if it means joining some bounty hunters. The Leader of the bounty hunters(Rayleigh) is searching for the man who murdered his wife and daughter. The other two (Samara and Andry) were orphans who fled an orphanage that was attacked by a group of thugs.


So what are their character flaws?


I haven't thought of that to be honest.


I don't know what to put for character flaws. I need help with that.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:

Well, Miranda is a girl who want to find the bandits that attacked her village and killed her family. She'll do whatever it takes to find them even if it means joining some bounty hunters. The Leader of the bounty hunters(Rayleigh) is searching for the man who murdered his wife and daughter. The other two (Samara and Andry) were orphans who fled an orphanage that was attacked by a group of thugs.


So what are their character flaws?


I haven't thought of that to be honest.


I don't know what to put for character flaws. I need help with that.


Think about it The way I wrote my novel was that I had an overarching story and within it, all of the different characters had their own story path which played into the bigger picture. Character flaws are a huge part of what makes a character dynamic, what makes a character surprising and what gives a character the ability to hold their own story arc. I suggest checking out a lot of Joss Whedon's stuff. He tends to write characters with very clear flaws, and he also excels at handling the group dynamic which is important when you have a story such as yours.

As for how to choose find a character's flaw (and the character in general), think about their life. Not just the big events like the murder of their family, but everything. Think about the type of home they grew up in. For Rayleigh, did he grow up in a more well to do family without a care in the world before being thrust into this after the death of his wife, or did he grow up on the wrong side of the tracks (so to speak) before pulling himself out of it when he found a family only to fall back into the rough lifestyle. What was his relationship with his family like? Was he a great father, or was he always busy and a little bit distant? All the way up to what is his role in the group now. Has he taken the other two under his wings, or did they cling to him when they had nowhere left to go and he still doesn't completely accept their presence?

After you get a really firm grasp on who a character is, and they start feeling human, their flaws begin to come to light (same thing for redeeming characteristics of villains). Also, keep in mind the themes of your story, as character flaws often tie into that (for example, identity is one of the main themes of my story, and Leon's character flaw is his lack of self-identity).
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Rayleigh grew up poor and did some bad things in his life. He eventually changed his ways when he met a woman and she had his child. He was apart of a mafia that he decided to runaway from. Unfortunately, the mafia weren't please with that and killed his wife and daughter. Rayleigh became a bounty hunter to get revenge. Rayleigh was a great father and husband.

Samara and Andry are around Miranda's age and they were two orphans from an orphanage that was attacked by bandits. They eventually found Rayleigh and decided to join up with him. They pretty much found Rayleigh.
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Rayleigh grew up poor and did some bad things in his life. He eventually changed his ways when he met a woman and she had his child. He was apart of a mafia that he decided to runaway from. Unfortunately, the mafia weren't please with that and killed his wife and daughter. Rayleigh became a bounty hunter to get revenge. Rayleigh was a great father and husband.

Samara and Andry are around Miranda's age and they were two orphans from an orphanage that was attacked by bandits. They eventually found Rayleigh and decided to join up with him. They pretty much found Rayleigh.


Okay, well the Mafia background for Rayleigh gives you a pretty easy in when it comes to character flaws. Perfect people don't get into the mafia :P

As for the other three, you are in a bit more of a difficult spot because they are younger, but again, dive into their pasts and look for things you can build on. You can play a little bit more with child psychology (development of morals) and the role of authority in rationalizing misdeeds. Maybe watch Natalie Portman's character in Leon the Professional?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

Rayleigh grew up poor and did some bad things in his life. He eventually changed his ways when he met a woman and she had his child. He was apart of a mafia that he decided to runaway from. Unfortunately, the mafia weren't please with that and killed his wife and daughter. Rayleigh became a bounty hunter to get revenge. Rayleigh was a great father and husband.

Samara and Andry are around Miranda's age and they were two orphans from an orphanage that was attacked by bandits. They eventually found Rayleigh and decided to join up with him. They pretty much found Rayleigh.


Okay, well the Mafia background for Rayleigh gives you a pretty easy in when it comes to character flaws. Perfect people don't get into the mafia :P

As for the other three, you are in a bit more of a difficult spot because they are younger, but again, dive into their pasts and look for things you can build on. You can play a little bit more with child psychology (development of morals) and the role of authority in rationalizing misdeeds. Maybe watch Natalie Portman's character in Leon the Professional?


Okay.


Well Rayleigh hates the mafia and criminals all together even though he was one. He's stubborn, headstrong, and smart.
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hello..how van i make 500 pts?
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no i want more this is too short. i like the story. interesting
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