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There is a thread similar to this one but I really need feedback.
If it's not too much to ask, could you leave that thread there Mods?
Truly sorry.


I need some advice. I already broke the plot down the best way I could and I was wondering if it makes sense. Do I need to make any changes to it for it to become better. Or is it alright how it is? If you have any questions about this let me know. I can really use some advice on this plot that I broke down.




Enjoy!!!
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Looks great!
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KoolDashKid wrote:

Looks great!


Do you have any questions about the plot? Ask me anything about it.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


KoolDashKid wrote:

Looks great!


Do you have any questions about the plot? Ask me anything about it.


Don't really have any questions. Just enjoyed it in general.
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KoolDashKid wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


KoolDashKid wrote:

Looks great!


Do you have any questions about the plot? Ask me anything about it.


Don't really have any questions. Just enjoyed it in general.


Thanks.
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qualeshia3 wrote:

There is a thread similar to this one but I really need feedback.
If it's not too much to ask, could you leave that thread there Mods?
Truly sorry.


I need some advice. I already broke the plot down the best way I could and I was wondering if it makes sense. Do I need to make any changes to it for it to become better. Or is it alright how it is? If you have any questions about this let me know. I can really use some advice on this plot that I broke down.




Enjoy!!!


First off, just need to say amazing job. Your breakdown tells the story in an absolutely perfect symmetry. I especially love how CUFF and EAON are pretty much played as dark Robin Hood groups walking that thin line. I've always loved characters/groups who were neither good nor evil but did what they did due to their beliefs of helping the common good despite the grayness of their deeds. I definitely love where you're going with this.
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qualeshia3 wrote:

There is a thread similar to this one but I really need feedback.
If it's not too much to ask, could you leave that thread there Mods?


I think you're talking about

/forumtopic-960029/plot-breakdown-thread

I've left that there but am closing this one since Creative Corner is the right place for requesting feedback about one's creative writing.

You can edit your opening post there if you want to be more specific about what kind of feedback you are especially looking for.


KoolDashKid and neugenx, if you have additional feedback please share it there. Qualeshia often posts ideas in Creative Corner and requests advice so if you're interested in seeing more of what's she's working on you should drop by occasionally.
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