Tell me if this sounds alright for a story.
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Let me know if a thread like this one exist or not.
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So I was thinking of a new approach for this novel. I've decided to write a fictional history novel about a nation's rise to power. Tell me what you think of it.

Here I go:

Title:
Kenorland Chronicles: Rise to Power

Setting:
Davaria, Kenorland

POV:
Third-Person

Premise:
An immortal man helps a poor nation rise to becoming a mighty powerhouse

Plot:
Before Kenorland became the super powerful nation and that was feared and hated and even respected by all nations, it was an ordinary large continent not home to any nation or person. Soon an immortal refugee came to Kenorland and turned it into a giant nation. This man is name Edgar Eisenhower who later became the first
Emperor of Kenorland. Though Kenorland started off as a poor nation, it quickly rose to power much later. Samuel ruled the nation of Kenorland for two hundred years then gave the crown to his eldest daughter. Enter the life of a nation that started off weak but became strong much later. Journey Edgar's life and the lives of the most
famous and well known Kenorlandic Emperors and even Empresses that changed the nation and the world forever.


Ask me any question you desire.

Enjoy!!!
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How about power struggles?
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Jophar_Vorin wrote:

How about power struggles?


What do you mean?
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qualeshia3 wrote:


Jophar_Vorin wrote:

How about power struggles?


What do you mean?


Well every nation has corruption, so how about adding greedy people?
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Jophar_Vorin wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


Jophar_Vorin wrote:

How about power struggles?


What do you mean?


Well every nation has corruption, so how about adding greedy people? :P


Oh, trust me there will be some of those people.
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how did he repopulate an entire continent
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Lowlights wrote:

how did he repopulate an entire continent


I forgot to mention that he and over a million refugees escaped their country when it was at war and landed on Kenorland.
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Its a bit unbelievable that there was a huge swath of land, unclaimed by anyone and all these other countries were like "naw, we don't really want it". Like, when America was "discovered", not only were there people already there, but everybody wanted a piece of it.

Anyways, as for the premise, it is fine, but as always I have to say that it doesn't really tell me much about the story, the characters, the setting etc. Its just a premise, which is fine, but I can't really make comments as to whether the story will work with just a premise.
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sundin13 wrote:

Its a bit unbelievable that there was a huge swath of land, unclaimed by anyone and all these other countries were like "naw, we don't really want it". Like, when America was "discovered", not only were there people already there, but everybody wanted a piece of it.

Anyways, as for the premise, it is fine, but as always I have to say that it doesn't really tell me much about the story, the characters, the setting etc. Its just a premise, which is fine, but I can't really make comments as to whether the story will work with just a premise.


The land is uncharted and was extremely difficult to find.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Its a bit unbelievable that there was a huge swath of land, unclaimed by anyone and all these other countries were like "naw, we don't really want it". Like, when America was "discovered", not only were there people already there, but everybody wanted a piece of it.

Anyways, as for the premise, it is fine, but as always I have to say that it doesn't really tell me much about the story, the characters, the setting etc. Its just a premise, which is fine, but I can't really make comments as to whether the story will work with just a premise.


The land is uncharted and was extremely difficult to find.


How exactly was it hard to find? What does that mean?
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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Its a bit unbelievable that there was a huge swath of land, unclaimed by anyone and all these other countries were like "naw, we don't really want it". Like, when America was "discovered", not only were there people already there, but everybody wanted a piece of it.

Anyways, as for the premise, it is fine, but as always I have to say that it doesn't really tell me much about the story, the characters, the setting etc. Its just a premise, which is fine, but I can't really make comments as to whether the story will work with just a premise.


The land is uncharted and was extremely difficult to find.


How exactly was it hard to find? What does that mean?


Well putting "extremely difficult to find" was a bit much. The land was simple uncharted. The refugees got lost on leaving their nation that was at war and that is when they found the land.
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