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Here are five stories I plan working on. Tell me what you think of them. Ask me any question you want and I shall do my best to answer them. I'm working on these stories one at a time. Enjoy the rough drafts that I will post here and I welcome all feed back.

Here are the stories:


1) Title: The Rebirth of Avangelina Starbrooke

Premise: A girl who wakes from a coma is given a power and a terrible case of bad luck.

Plot: Avangelina was placed in a fatal car crash that nearly took her life but instead is put in a coma. She stayed in that coma for seven months and during the time in the coma she was given a superpower. The person who gave her the superpower is named Eve. Eve granted Avangelina with the power and disappeared. Avangelina woke up from the coma with the power to come back to life after death each and every time. Avangelina later dies by getting shot but two hours later comes back to life. She goes through life dying in every way possible and comes back to life two hours later. Avangelina tries to prevent herself from dying but can not and so she dies each time. Avangelina wants to find Eve and have her get rid of the power. Can she survive long enough to find Eve?

2) Title: Brianna and the Strange World

Premise: A girl gets trapped in a dream like world and must find a way to get out

Plot: Brianna was placed in a four year coma that she woke up from to find that her family are still alive. There is just one problem, her family is actually dead and she is still stuck in the coma. Brianna is placed in a dream world called Strange world which was created by a Stranger. If Brianna doesn't get out of the Strange World she'll remain in a coma for the rest of her life. Brianna will have to travel through different parts of Strange World in order to find a shiny white tower call Epiphania. Can Brianna reach Epiphania in time?

3)Title: The Chronicles of Zaepathia

Premise: Four people must stop an organization from destroying the world

Plot: There are three super powers that rule the world; The Grand Imperial Dynasty, United Empire of Naegigalla, and the High Elders which is known as Maximus Trio. There is also a caste system that is spread out all across the world where everyone is given a rank. Alphas for the rich and famous, Omegas for the middle class, and Zetas for the lower middle class and homeless. A group of Omegas formed an organization called the CUFF and their goal is to eradicate all wealthy class citizens and the three super powers. Doing this will put the world into chaos but CUFF doesn't care about that. Enter Four people who will work together to end the madness of CUFF who is growing stronger by the minute. Can they handle the job of stopping a semi-powerful organization?

4) Title: Alexander in Monsterland

Premise: A boy find himself stuck in a world that is currently having a monster apocalypse.

Plot: Alexander lives on a dystopian planet that just suffered from a terrible world war. But during a massive earthquake, Alexander falls into the cracks of the earth and land in a fantasy world called Aekhera. Aekhera is much like his planet which is a dystopian world. Instead of dealing with a major world war, Aekhera deals with a monster apocalypse. Monstrous creatures that feed on flesh are call Ravangers. Alexander must struggle to survive the world that he landed and find a way back to his world. Can he do it?

5) Title: Revolutionary Academy Club:

Premise: A girl meets a group of people and tries to survive a zombie outbreak

Plot: Rosebella comes from an extremely wealthy family. She has the looks and wealth but no idea how to survive an onslaught of vicious man eating zombies. She may be smart but is that enough to help her survive the zombies? Rosebella meets a club of strange people who banded together to face off against the zombies and try to survive. She joins this club and tries to stay alive. Can she do it?


Enjoy!!!
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I welcome all feedback. To be honest I might select one of these stories and focus on the one only. But if I decide to do one more than I will focus on two. Until then, I am choosing one only. The hardest part is choosing which one I want to do.
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I highly enjoy number one, and number two is pretty good as well. I do apologize for this, but the other three seemed fairly generic/cliche...rather reminiscent of what one would find in anime.

I think if any of them you turn into a full story, number two is the best. It has room for some exciting character development, and does not feel like a generic/churn-out story...
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Lord_Jordan wrote:

I highly enjoy number one, and number two is pretty good as well. I do apologize for this, but the other three seemed fairly generic/cliche...rather reminiscent of what one would find in anime.

I think if any of them you turn into a full story, number two is the best. It has room for some exciting character development, and does not feel like a generic/churn-out story...


I want to turn these stories into one story. How do I break it down into one story?
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qualeshia3 wrote:


Lord_Jordan wrote:

I highly enjoy number one, and number two is pretty good as well. I do apologize for this, but the other three seemed fairly generic/cliche...rather reminiscent of what one would find in anime.

I think if any of them you turn into a full story, number two is the best. It has room for some exciting character development, and does not feel like a generic/churn-out story...


I want to turn these stories into one story. How do I break it down into one story?


I don't think it is possible to combine all of those plots into one story without making it extremely hard to follow.
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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


Lord_Jordan wrote:

I highly enjoy number one, and number two is pretty good as well. I do apologize for this, but the other three seemed fairly generic/cliche...rather reminiscent of what one would find in anime.

I think if any of them you turn into a full story, number two is the best. It has room for some exciting character development, and does not feel like a generic/churn-out story...


I want to turn these stories into one story. How do I break it down into one story?


I don't think it is possible to combine all of those plots into one story without making it extremely hard to follow.


Then what should I do?
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qualeshia3 wrote:

Then what should I do?


Pick one xD I know you have ten million ideas for stories, but finding your favorites and tackling them one at a time is your best bet.
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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:

Then what should I do?


Pick one xD I know you have ten million ideas for stories, but finding your favorites and tackling them one at a time is your best bet.


Alrighty then.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


Lord_Jordan wrote:

I highly enjoy number one, and number two is pretty good as well. I do apologize for this, but the other three seemed fairly generic/cliche...rather reminiscent of what one would find in anime.

I think if any of them you turn into a full story, number two is the best. It has room for some exciting character development, and does not feel like a generic/churn-out story...


I want to turn these stories into one story. How do I break it down into one story?


As Sundin said, turning them into one story may prove just a little challenging...though you can always incorporate your favorite points from each into one crazy/awesome story...
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Yes. Just pick one and do it.
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