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Title: The Three C's

Genres: Drama, Humor, Hurt/Comfort, Family, Slice of Life, Science-fiction, and Romance

POV: Third-Person

Premise: Ten girls from wealthy families live behind everything to live like commoners in hopes of searching for something.

Plot: The Three C's is something that worth finding in your life. They make up your experiences, hardships, and struggles in your life that represent you best. The story centers on ten girls from wealthy families forced to live modest lives. These girls move to a large town called Illfreycombe leaving behind their wealth and status to live the life of a commoner. In order to find their three c's these girls will learn the hardships, pains, and joys of being a commoner. They've gone from rich lives to modest lives in hopes of finding their three c's. Can they do it?

Main Characters:

1) Avangelina Seraphina Maiandra Lisanna Royalhart: Grand-Princess of Arikaisha.
2) Carrera Anthonia Juliandra Lisara Veckendeck-Lilsmen: Crown Princess of Amon.
3) Lillianna Belladonna Rosemary Magnolia Florentine: Princess of Gardenia.
4) Vilhelmina Catharina Georgina Krystal Holycrest: Crown Princess of Neo-Germania.
5) Krisanthy Iradessa Tiyana Coronado: Princess of Laurasia
6) Chiara Charybdis/Charlotte vin Seymour: Crown Princess of Pannotia.
7) Pristina Azalura Janaya Eisenhower: Grand-Princess of Kenorland.
8) Ethelinda Parthena Velorina Anchoretta Ravenwood: Princess of Jachira.
9) Bathsheba Rosmaelia Marianne Anya Dragongazer: Crown Princess of Kidora
10) Aurelia Maxima Borealis Aisenford: Grand-Princess of Zaepathia.
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Why ten characters? Usually slice of life shows do best when focusing on the dynamic between a small cast of characters. That said, how do these characters all interact in the story and is it just a coincidence that 10 different princesses from around the world simultaneously abandoned their rich lives?
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sundin13 wrote:

Why ten characters? Usually slice of life shows do best when focusing on the dynamic between a small cast of characters. That said, how do these characters all interact in the story and is it just a coincidence that 10 different princesses from around the world simultaneously abandoned their rich lives?


I lessen it to five.


There is a law that every royal and noble across the world must obey. That law is that the child of a reigning monarch or nobleman must leave their wealth and status behind when they turn sixteen to live the life of a commoner. They must remain a commoner for four years then they'll go back to their regular lives. This is to create better rulers who understand the needs of man.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Why ten characters? Usually slice of life shows do best when focusing on the dynamic between a small cast of characters. That said, how do these characters all interact in the story and is it just a coincidence that 10 different princesses from around the world simultaneously abandoned their rich lives?


I lessen it to five.


There is a law that every royal and noble across the world must obey. That law is that the child of a reigning monarch or nobleman must leave their wealth and status behind when they turn sixteen to live the life of a commoner. They must remain a commoner for four years then they'll go back to their regular lives. This is to create better rulers who understand the needs of man.


Okay, that works. I assume that they aren't all turning 16 on the same day and some have already been in the world for a while.

Anyways, how do they interact with each other? Do they all live together?

EDIT: As for the number, I think the best way to figure out how many characters to have would be by answer the question of how they interact. You should use however many characters create the core group dynamic that you are looking for. Also, don't forget that you will need characters who aren't royals.
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sundin13 makes some good points about 10 characters (and those long names....holy cow) in a novella. Ten characters might be workable if these ladies opt to go on a road tour not so much as rich folks pretending to be poor but whether as a traveling harem show enroute from the recent Burning Man extravagansa in the Nevada desert to possibly seeking employment at one of the working circuses (a la Michiko & Hatch).

Unless these people are totally cut off from their elitist ties I don't think anything they do will be believable because they really won't have any skin in the game since they have a perpetual safety net. There are consequences when poor people fail and it's not just economic. If you introduce well-offs into a blue-collar or pauper environment (and it's been done many times in novels) will you be able to convince your readers that 4 years of "temporary" economic hardship will enlighten these test subjects re empathy toward the lesser men/women. It's a hard sell, qualeshia3.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Why ten characters? Usually slice of life shows do best when focusing on the dynamic between a small cast of characters. That said, how do these characters all interact in the story and is it just a coincidence that 10 different princesses from around the world simultaneously abandoned their rich lives?


I lessen it to five.


There is a law that every royal and noble across the world must obey. That law is that the child of a reigning monarch or nobleman must leave their wealth and status behind when they turn sixteen to live the life of a commoner. They must remain a commoner for four years then they'll go back to their regular lives. This is to create better rulers who understand the needs of man.


Okay, that works. I assume that they aren't all turning 16 on the same day and some have already been in the world for a while.

Anyways, how do they interact with each other? Do they all live together?

EDIT: As for the number, I think the best way to figure out how many characters to have would be by answer the question of how they interact. You should use however many characters create the core group dynamic that you are looking for. Also, don't forget that you will need characters who aren't royals.




They'll be staying together in a large house with mentors and stuff being taught how to live like a commoner. These girls will live in a large town full of people that don't know them. They will work part time jobs and attend regular school and try to blend into normal society.
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bemused_Bohemian wrote:

sundin13 makes some good points about 10 characters (and those long names....holy cow) in a novella. Ten characters might be workable if these ladies opt to go on a road tour not so much as rich folks pretending to be poor but whether as a traveling harem show enroute from the recent Burning Man extravagansa in the Nevada desert to possibly seeking employment at one of the working circuses (a la Michiko & Hatch).

Unless these people are totally cut off from their elitist ties I don't think anything they do will be believable because they really won't have any skin in the game since they have a perpetual safety net. There are consequences when poor people fail and it's not just economic. If you introduce well-offs into a blue-collar or pauper environment (and it's been done many times in novels) will you be able to convince your readers that 4 years of "temporary" economic hardship will enlighten these test subjects re empathy toward the lesser men/women. It's a hard sell, qualeshia3.



It's very common for royals and nobles to have long names.

Well they are completely cut off from their wealth and status as royals in order to live like common folk. The girls must complete four years of living like this because it is the law. They can't stop it until they've completed all four years. During their four years of learning how to blend into commoner society, it mandatory that they learn the ways of the lesser people. We're trying to create monarch who will focus on the poor in a way that hasn't been done.


Just my two cents.


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I do apologize, as I more skimmed through this thread...but I do wonder: WHY is it a law that these girls must live four years this way? WHAT caused it? HOW is it handled in the world? Each of these kind of needs an answer, otherwise there would not be much connection between reader and character(s)
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I think that it makes sense if one country decides to enact these measures, but the fact that this is happening in a ton of countries across the world and all the girls go to the same place is a bit unbelievable.

That said, I do think the bigger concerns revolve around what you are actually going to do with the characters and the story.
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Also, how do people not recognize them?

Mostly, that wouldn't really make sense. The way to teach them to survive without a ton of luxury is to not give it to them in the first place. Just because their parents have tons of money, that doesn't mean they automatically have to hire servants to do everything for their kids. There are plenty of more natural ways to get future monarchs to interact with average people (and there's a difference between average and extremely poor). e.g. Prince William and Prince Harry doing military service - they weren't just there for show, they did stuff. Queen Elizabeth did too, particularly during World War II, because, well... it was World War II.

I'm sure there's some non-stupid anime examples, too. But the whole split-life thing doesn't really work well - see that one arc in Magi with Cassim.

Unless the conflict is about *how* it doesn't really work, and and their split sense of self - one where they have to blend in, and one where they have to decidedly not (and there are reasons for that too). But then it's not really slice-of-life.

If you want to just make it a rich-kids fish-out-of-water comedy... a) don't, that's tacky, but if you must, b) leave the politics out of it (monarchy).


I understand the desire to have royal characters in everything, though - I am so into that. But most of mine have them going the other way - the normal person who has to become royal (or pretend to be) for some reason. Have you tried that?


edit: Also, you seem to be going back and forth between lighthearted slice-of-life, and heavy, Game-of-Thrones grimdark... have you tried doing something in the middle? The way Geass, Magi, etc. tend to be, actually. The middle is usually better than either extreme.
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I do apologize, as I more skimmed through this thread...but I do wonder: WHY is it a law that these girls must live four years this way? WHAT caused it? HOW is it handled in the world? Each of these kind of needs an answer, otherwise there would not be much connection between reader and character(s)




This law was set by the God-Empress who felt that royals and nobles did not understand the way of the common folk. Majority of the royals and nobles were spoiled rotten and selfish people who only cared about their wealth. The God-Empress made a mandatory law that every royal and noble all around the world must follow. That the children of the royals and nobles must leave their wealth and status behind to lead a common life at the age sixteen for four years. If they can not do that then they'll be arrested for not obeying the God-Empress. The royals and nobles didn't like the idea at first but they gotten use to it. No one dares oppose the God-Empress for her word is law. The God-Empress want to make better leaders who understand the people needs.
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Also, how do people not recognize them?

Mostly, that wouldn't really make sense. The way to teach them to survive without a ton of luxury is to not give it to them in the first place. Just because their parents have tons of money, that doesn't mean they automatically have to hire servants to do everything for their kids. There are plenty of more natural ways to get future monarchs to interact with average people (and there's a difference between average and extremely poor). e.g. Prince William and Prince Harry doing military service - they weren't just there for show, they did stuff. Queen Elizabeth did too, particularly during World War II, because, well... it was World War II.

I'm sure there's some non-stupid anime examples, too. But the whole split-life thing doesn't really work well - see that one arc in Magi with Cassim.

Unless the conflict is about *how* it doesn't really work, and and their split sense of self - one where they have to blend in, and one where they have to decidedly not (and there are reasons for that too). But then it's not really slice-of-life.

If you want to just make it a rich-kids fish-out-of-water comedy... a) don't, that's tacky, but if you must, b) leave the politics out of it (monarchy).


I understand the desire to have royal characters in everything, though - I am so into that. But most of mine have them going the other way - the normal person who has to become royal (or pretend to be) for some reason. Have you tried that?


edit: Also, you seem to be going back and forth between lighthearted slice-of-life, and heavy, Game-of-Thrones grimdark... have you tried doing something in the middle? The way Geass, Magi, etc. tend to be, actually. The middle is usually better than either extreme.


Well the God-Empress who made the law is a very strict and stern woman, who wanted to punish the royals and nobles for their arrogance and greed. So she made a law that every royal and noble must follow regardless of how they felt about it.

The girls are super famous but believe it or not there are places that don't know who they are.

Pretty much the God-Empress is telling the royals and nobles to spoil their children rotten now because when they turn sixteen they won't be spoiled anymore. So royal families are training their children to prepare for the world of the common folk.

Writing a story similar to Code Geass and Magi? I SHOULD TRY THAT!!!
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Lord_Jordan wrote:



I do apologize, as I more skimmed through this thread...but I do wonder: WHY is it a law that these girls must live four years this way? WHAT caused it? HOW is it handled in the world? Each of these kind of needs an answer, otherwise there would not be much connection between reader and character(s)




This law was set by the God-Empress who felt that royals and nobles did not understand the way of the common folk. Majority of the royals and nobles were spoiled rotten and selfish people who only cared about their wealth. The God-Empress made a mandatory law that every royal and noble all around the world must follow. That the children of the royals and nobles must leave their wealth and status behind to lead a common life at the age sixteen for four years. If they can not do that then they'll be arrested for not obeying the God-Empress. The royals and nobles didn't like the idea at first but they gotten use to it. No one dares oppose the God-Empress for her word is law. The God-Empress want to make better leaders who understand the people needs.


I apologize for asking for more from this, but I feel like the God-Empress is just there as some sort of character, neither good nor bad...so what is her story, and why must people obey her other than just "she exists and therefore people fear/love/follow her"?

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The God-Empress is just a person who rules the planet and is the direct descendant of the Cosmic Emperor. People only fear/love/follow the God-Empress because they fear the Cosmic Emperor who rules the cosmos and beyond. Anyone who rules the planet is a God-Emperor or God-Empress but that person must have the blood of the Cosmic Emperor flowing through their veins. So not just anyone can become a God-Emperor or God-Empress. You have to be the legit descendant of the Cosmic Emperor. And the Cosmic Emperor has over a hundred descendants scattered throughout the world.

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