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If you have any questions, please feel free to ask away. I shall do my very best to answer your questions. The story will be placed here as well. And by story I mean the rough drafts only. Please tell me what you think of it.

Here I go:

Title: Guardian Chronicles:

Genres: Drama, Tragedy, Action, Adventure, Magic, Hurt/Comfort, Humor, Fantasy, Romance, and Science-Fiction

POV: Third-Person

Premise:

Plot: Guardians are magical beings who's sole purpose in life is to choose a suitable person to become king or emperor of a nation. There are only five known Guardians and they are placed all over the world looking for suitable rulers to rule a nation. Never has there been more than six Guardians until now. Meet Pandora, a teenager and mysterious sixth Guardian who is searching for a good future ruler. Then there Majandra who is a former princess who lost everything when another country took it over. She works at a local bookstore and dreams of capturing a labyrinth so she can obtain infinite amount of wealth. Majandra also wants to get her country back but she knows that will not be easy. Pandora and Majandra meet and become friends who decide to go on an adventure together. Their goal is to capture a labyrinth and take back Majandra's nation. Pandora sense that Majandra will make an excellent empress and that is why she is so eager to help. Along the way the two girls meet a slave boy name Hakim from the famous Khrilm Clan who decides to join them on their quest. The three of them meet different people, see many places, and learn new things along the way. They'll even meet the other Guardians and help Pandora learn more about her past. Together all three of them won't stop at nothing to reach their goals. Can they do it?

Main Characters:

Pandora Lilith Adams: A mysterious sixth Guardian

Majandra Crestfield: Former Princess of Naegigalla

Hakim Drooves: Slave Boy and member of the Khrilm Clan

Avangelina Seraphina Royalhart: Grand-Princess of Arikaisha/Sub-Viceroy of District N1



Enjoy!!!
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If Guardians decide who is to rule a nation, how can someone else take over that nation? Wouldn't that be going against the will of the Guardians? And if Maj wants to take back her nation, isn't the way to do that simply by convincing the Guardian that she is suitable (which she already did judging by your description). I don't get the purpose of turf wars in a world where the leaders are established by a third party...
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sundin13 wrote:

If Guardians decide who is to rule a nation, how can someone else take over that nation? Wouldn't that be going against the will of the Guardians? And if Maj wants to take back her nation, isn't the way to do that simply by convincing the Guardian that she is suitable (which she already did judging by your description). I don't get the purpose of turf wars in a world where the leaders are established by a third party...



Mainly Guardians go after nations with terrible rulers who rule with greed and sheer arrogance while searching for people who can take the place of the terrible ruler. That could be the ruler's child(if the child is fit) or some random person.

Guardians may have chosen leaders but some countries have not been chosen by a Guardian to find someone to rule a nation. So some countries have heartless and cruel rulers that do whatever they want. Guardians started appearing one hundred years ago and only show themselves a few times every three years.


I got the idea from the anime Magi.
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Why would anyone actually listen to the Guardians?
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sundin13 wrote:

Why would anyone actually listen to the Guardians?


Guardians are servants to the Cosmic Emperor and are very powerful. Guardians are similar to angels that leave heaven to land on Earth to help a person in need. They appear to a person in their true forms and make that person a suitable ruler. Guardians are pretty much an angel who chooses a person to bring out their greatness.


At first listening or even believing a Guardian is silly until that Guardian shows it's true powers and is sincere about help the person become ruler.

Guardians find suitable people to become kings and emperor when there is a serious need for one.


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qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Why would anyone actually listen to the Guardians?


Guardians are servants to the Cosmic Emperor and are very powerful. Guardians are similar to angels that leave heaven to land on Earth to help a person in need. They appear to a person in their true forms and make that person a suitable ruler. Guardians are pretty much an angel who chooses a person to bring out their greatness.


At first listening or even believing a Guardian is silly until that Guardian shows it's true powers and is sincere about help the person become ruler.

Guardians find suitable people to become kings and emperor when there is a serious need for one.




I don't really get it. I think the angle of "Guardians establish rulers" doesn't really make sense. By your descriptions it seems clear that Guardians don't show themselves very often and don't actually do much to make sure the people they declare rulers, continue to be rulers. I can't imagine this system working without very clear, very direct intervention by the Guardians which would prevent what sounds like a large war of one country taking over another country's land.

I also don't think that angle (or at least that way of presenting that angle) is necessary to the story, but its up to you how you want to use it.
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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Why would anyone actually listen to the Guardians?


Guardians are servants to the Cosmic Emperor and are very powerful. Guardians are similar to angels that leave heaven to land on Earth to help a person in need. They appear to a person in their true forms and make that person a suitable ruler. Guardians are pretty much an angel who chooses a person to bring out their greatness.


At first listening or even believing a Guardian is silly until that Guardian shows it's true powers and is sincere about help the person become ruler.

Guardians find suitable people to become kings and emperor when there is a serious need for one.




I don't really get it. I think the angle of "Guardians establish rulers" doesn't really make sense. By your descriptions it seems clear that Guardians don't show themselves very often and don't actually do much to make sure the people they declare rulers, continue to be rulers. I can't imagine this system working without very clear, very direct intervention by the Guardians which would prevent what sounds like a large war of one country taking over another country's land.

I also don't think that angle (or at least that way of presenting that angle) is necessary to the story, but its up to you how you want to use it.


Well I'm still working on how to make it make sense. So don't fret. You'll have to read to understand.

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sundin13 wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

Why would anyone actually listen to the Guardians?



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Have you seen the anime Magi? What she's talking about is basically the Magi from Magi (right?)

Yeah, don't do that. There's inspiration and then there's being a little too obvious. I don't think it's a common enough concept that it wouldn't point right back to that (e.g. Alibaba and Cassim's relationship is a common enough thing that it doesn't point right back to the two in your current icon even if the mangaka probably got the idea from them).

It's okay if you're just writing this for practice, though, which brings me back to my real point: why are you making threads like this? Write it. On your computer, or in a notebook, by yourself, without asking the forum what they think. Then edit it. Then show it to people for critique. Then edit it some more. Then publish it. That's how writing works. It's solitary. It doesn't require a bunch of forum threads. You're distracting yourself from the real thing here.

You also might be making things too complicated. Why not try writing something that takes place in just one country, and after you get the hang of writing things and finish that, etc., then start with more complicated things.
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LavenderMintRose wrote:
Have you seen the anime Magi? What she's talking about is basically the Magi from Magi (right?)

Yeah, don't do that. There's inspiration and then there's being a little too obvious. I don't think it's a common enough concept that it wouldn't point right back to that (e.g. Alibaba and Cassim's relationship is a common enough thing that it doesn't point right back to the two in your current icon even if the mangaka probably got the idea from them).

It's okay if you're just writing this for practice, though, which brings me back to my real point: why are you making threads like this? Write it. On your computer, or in a notebook, by yourself, without asking the forum what they think. Then edit it. Then show it to people for critique. Then edit it some more. Then publish it. That's how writing works. It's solitary. It doesn't require a bunch of forum threads. You're distracting yourself from the real thing here.

You also might be making things too complicated. Why not try writing something that takes place in just one country, and after you get the hang of writing things and finish that, etc., then start with more complicated things.


I haven't seen it so I didn't notice that it was similar. That said, I think one of the big problems with writing "summaries" like this is that they don't give the context needed to make things understandable to people who aren't in the writer's head, so I don't think that showing them is really very helpful.

I agree with the rest of what you've said. First priority is writing something.
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Alrighty then. I promise not to make anymore threads like this. I just get too excited for no reason you know.
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You can ask questions as you write it, just like... don't ask for comments before you start. Start, and then if you have an issue... skip over that part, and write the stuff after it, then see if you can work it out as you do that, and then after that, while you're editing, that's a good time to make threads about specific issues, I guess. ^_^;

I need to follow my own advice and write things, though, too...
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