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Posted 9/14/16 , edited 20 days ago
Edit- Character concept for Sloth. I spent a while trying to find the best fit for this character. Over the hills and far away by Nightwish, or Du Riechst so Gut by Rammstein. Put those two together


"Now repeat after me"

I am a worthless individual with no talent at all" This statement allows me to basically do whatever I want without any real disadvantages, and pushes me to the extreme like never before.

Number 1. 7 key Characters, and 7 servants/ emotional response

Number 2. The seven deadly sins. I mean It is a general concept that can be used by anyone as long as you can create something unique. Not like I am stealing anything, this is based off of the seven sins, but It is not the entire focus.

Number 3. The spectrum of colors that create a rainbow.

Number 4. Hahaha, you wish

Number 5. Main Character/ Characters

Allma Significance of that name? Wouldn't you like to know.

So one of the main focuses within the story is the color of the characters. In a way it allows people to identify with whatever one appeals to them. I always seen identification within a story to be crucial, and when we are visually satisfied, what can be better than that?

Allma, better known as Pride.
( Just a rough draft of the overall design)




" Not another lonely soul tonight, I see before me someone who has only dreamed of a life worth living, but instead found the tragic hammer of insatiable hunger. This person does not find relief from her own Gluttony, nor does she find reason to stop her actions.

So she smashes through with this ideal, this gift, this life. What is certain, all shall witness. What has been given; a chance, to take that which is yours, what has been bottled up inside, to dethrone those who seek to claim your just reward.

Nothing more dangerous than an Ideal with a life now guarded by the sins we have accepted..... No more lies can follow a heart that has been opened"


" She sleeps. She even dreams more often than anyone I know. Maybe just a shred of dignity behind those eyes, a soul that feels no need to prove something, but the moment one enters her domain, No hope for those who try." Her strength is from within, her will; like steel.

Only from the Blue sky, and the frozen winds will we see Resilience. The power from those who wait will test the ideals of many. a true warrior of the storm"


Number 6. We begin

Sins of a dream catcher

Not all fall alone. This dream, taken by those who accept this gift, the few. They are called upon by the only one who can alter such perception, through their subconscious their minds are pushed to the absolute limit without fail. What they create is unique to them, what they catch defines them.

They were brought to this realm from the sins of the world, and as these individuals build on their ideals, their power and strength will increase. Their desire for truth and release are their only way to survive.

Given a servant to their dream they must ultimately form a pact between each other in order to obtain their ability to capture other dreams, and ultimately release themselves from this state of being.

Allma, They called her by her name, the one who felt the numbing pain of immortality. She found her place like no other. We call them Dream Catchers.

Opening. And so the seven were summoned.


A scene of mountains passing by with lightning speed as we are in view of a desolate scene of an empty field of rock and dirt, seconds later seven seals appear in a circle. Several beams of light shine down on the seals, all of them differ in color. Red, Yellow, Green, Blue, Purple, Pink, and Orange.

A loud humming noise can be heard channeling down the beams as Figures begin to materialize. Seven women left bare are now in view with their respective colors. A voice begins to speak.

“ Not all fall alone on this endless dream. I want to take a moment to show my gratitude for this opportunity that has presented itself to you. You all have the chance to redeem your sins from the world you once knew. You will be tested, You will be driven by your sins that you have taken with you from the place you called home.

“Greed” Showing a woman with long yellow hair with eyes closed. “Lust”, A woman with short Pink hair, like the rest with eyes closed. “Envy”, Long green hair. “Wrath” Medium red hair. “Sloth” Long blue hair. “Gluttony” Short Orange hair. “Pride” Black Medium Hair.

“ These are your sins you have brought over to this new world, and with them you shall Grow stronger with your ideals you harbor against one another in order to build on your power and strength to overcome this new world”

A thunderous crackle is heard as several bare men appear beside each woman.

“ These are your servants”

Spiked collars begin to appear around each of the mens necks.

“ These servants are your key to acquiring the necessary fragments in order to advance on your quest. A bond you must build between each of you in order to share a common connection with a pure soul…………”

The sound of a Sword slicing through one of the mens neck is heard. A lifeless body seen falling to the ground. The voice Not pleased.

“ What have you done to your servant!?”

The woman with medium black hair begins to materialize an outfit. A collar just past her chin with a black outfit, and a very long sword.

The rest of the women grin as Chains begin to form around their servants collars. The voice speaks again.

“Outcast in your own world! You Fool! I have given you life! And still you cast aside your only chance of survival!”

One by one the rest of the women conjure up their unique outfit and weapon. The blonde haired woman speaks.

“ What a fool you are, how fitting your sin be taken as such”

Wrath Speaks.

“ Enough talk! You will all kneel before my power!” A devilish grin followed by the release of her servant as he charges in for Greeds servant. Pride Looks on, but soon runs off in a random direction as she tries to escape the crowd.
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You know, I thought about working with the seven deadly sins for a while but I decided to go with the equally overused "Greek/Roman Gods" theme (though I tried to keep it super subtle) with some interwoven astronomy focusing on Pluto and it's moons.

Anyways, I'll read this later!
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sundin13 wrote:

You know, I thought about working with the seven deadly sins for a while but I decided to go with the equally overused "Greek/Roman Gods" theme (though I tried to keep it super subtle) with some interwoven astronomy focusing on Pluto and it's moons.

Anyways, I'll read this later!


Gods, sins, I mean they all offer a great starting point for a lot of stories. I just think something can be taken from other peoples attempts, especially if you just use the idea and build on another focus around it.

I don't really have a lot of info on God's to be honest, and I wouldn't want to even try and attempt it.

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Humms wrote:


sundin13 wrote:

You know, I thought about working with the seven deadly sins for a while but I decided to go with the equally overused "Greek/Roman Gods" theme (though I tried to keep it super subtle) with some interwoven astronomy focusing on Pluto and it's moons.

Anyways, I'll read this later!


Gods, sins, I mean they all offer a great starting point for a lot of stories. I just think something can be taken from other peoples attempts, especially if you just use the idea and build on another focus around it.

I don't really have a lot of info on God's to be honest, and I wouldn't want to even try and attempt it.



Yeah, they are really interesting, strong and universal motifs to work off of so I don't think its really a problem as long as you fill in the blanks with something unique.
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A silent character, eh? How exactly are you going to write that?
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sundin13 wrote:

A silent character, eh? How exactly are you going to write that?


She cannot speak her own words to others, but that doesn't prevent her mind from connecting with others in order to communicate, plus the one she is chained to can understand what she is trying to say since they are both connected by a bond. A link between two minds, and a Web of ideals.

"Fragments can achieve the impossible in order to benifit our ideals."

Just one thing to keep in mind.
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