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Here is the new novel that I am working on. Chapter one will be out shortly. I made the prologue too short so sorry about that. Anyway here is what the story is about and here is the prologue.

About the story



The prologue:


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On the story description: first and foremost, if Athena killed someone, that kind of excludes being framed. Setup maybe, but certainly not framed. Also, the worst criminals are put in for manslaughter and robbery? In your description of the story, if you're hyping it up to such levels, be ready to deliver and sell why they're what you claim they are. Also, may help to frame what the Death Royale is without relying on readers' knowledge of Battle Royale. And have some hook why it's worthwhile to continue reading than just watch Battle Royale.

On the prologue: When going first person,frame the thought process. What is your character feeling at the time. Are they panicked, fearful, angry? Is this person thinking clearly at the time or are they overburdened with emotions? Channel what that character is feeling at the time.
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qwueri wrote:

On the story description: first and foremost, if Athena killed someone, that kind of excludes being framed. Setup maybe, but certainly not framed. Also, the worst criminals are put in for manslaughter and robbery? In your description of the story, if you're hyping it up to such levels, be ready to deliver and sell why they're what you claim they are. Also, may help to frame what the Death Royale is without relying on readers' knowledge of Battle Royale. And have some hook why it's worthwhile to continue reading than just watch Battle Royale.

On the prologue: When going first person,frame the thought process. What is your character feeling at the time. Are they panicked, fearful, angry? Is this person thinking clearly at the time or are they overburdened with emotions? Channel what that character is feeling at the time.


Thank you.


Athena was pretty much at the wrong place at the wrong time when the murder took place.


To be honest, I didn't know where to go with this story. I just came up with the idea. I probably wrote even finish it. I'm going back to my other story and working on that.
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