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Too much for you? What, like too many words or something?



Too many words. Sorry.


Ah. Sorry, it just seems like to fully understand a character you're better off contextualising why the character is a certain way and how they came to be the person they are.

I mean it looks like you got through it well enough and liked it so, yeah.
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Ah. Sorry, it just seems like to fully understand a character you're better off contextualising why the character is a certain way and how they came to be the person they are.

I mean it looks like you got through it well enough and liked it so, yeah.


Honestly I just skimmed through it. So sorry.
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qualeshia3 wrote:


octorockandroll wrote:

Ah. Sorry, it just seems like to fully understand a character you're better off contextualising why the character is a certain way and how they came to be the person they are.

I mean it looks like you got through it well enough and liked it so, yeah.


Honestly I just skimmed through it. So sorry.


Oh...
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Yeah, sorry. But what did you think of my character that I put. Her name is Frangelica.

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Yeah, sorry. But what did you think of my character that I put. Her name is Frangelica.



I dunno. I'll read it when I have enough time to read it and then write my own entry (so probably the 26th or 27th)
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No worries! I shall rescue because I've got a character! :D

8/10, not too bad, but I'd like to know more about her!!! She sounds like she'd be fun to hang with xP
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Character's Name - Sylvania Ghal'lor Vincen

Age - 16

Strengths - Sylvania was born in the village of Gilandriok. She has 6 sisters and 2 brothers. Due to her villages beliefs, once her brothers reached a certain age, they were given away to places far, far away. [Their village only consists of women, if you didn't get that.] At the age of 16, she had reached adulthood and was given a choice to stay at the village or go out to find herself a lifemate in order to conceive a child/children. She had made the decision to leave, but not just to find a lifemate, but to work and make money in order to give to her village, since they are a rather poor village to begin with. Along her way, she had met with some travelers at an Inn she had found, and they all embarked on a quest together. Due to her high knowledge of the arcane arts, she knows how to conjure up spectors to do her bidding as long as she is awake.

Weakness - Due to a curse inflicted on her at an early age, she has the body of a child; she is only 2'4'' (she's a Halfling as well). Also due to her novicity in being an Oracle, she doesn't know much about her casting abilities and she can only summon one familiar per day that can only help out for ~2 hours per day. Her strength is almost non-existent, and she is kinda slow moving.

Occupation - Worker for Hire, Odd Jober

Fun Fact - Due to her shortness, she is rather light. She can go in a huge crowd unnoticed. Pressure plates are almost no issue for her in case she finds traps along the way. But this also almost makes her easily stepped on and easily ignored.
[If you see the picture] The scrolls she carries along with her are scrolls from her ancestors, which have never been open, and she is also looking for the missing pieces. Once she has gathered them all, it is said something miraculous will happen depending on the person who opens them.

Added picture of Sylvania, if it helps.
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Posted 12/24/16

octorockandroll wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:



Yeah, sorry. But what did you think of my character that I put. Her name is Frangelica.



I dunno. I'll read it when I have enough time to read it and then write my own entry (so probably the 26th or 27th)



Alright.
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Character's Name - Sylvania Ghal'lor Vincen

Age - 16

Strengths - Sylvania was born in the village of Gilandriok. She has 6 sisters and 2 brothers. Due to her villages beliefs, once her brothers reached a certain age, they were given away to places far, far away. [Their village only consists of women, if you didn't get that.] At the age of 16, she had reached adulthood and was given a choice to stay at the village or go out to find herself a lifemate in order to conceive a child/children. She had made the decision to leave, but not just to find a lifemate, but to work and make money in order to give to her village, since they are a rather poor village to begin with. Along her way, she had met with some travelers at an Inn she had found, and they all embarked on a quest together. Due to her high knowledge of the arcane arts, she knows how to conjure up spectors to do her bidding as long as she is awake.

Weakness - Due to a curse inflicted on her at an early age, she has the body of a child; she is only 2'4'' (she's a Halfling as well). Also due to her novicity in being an Oracle, she doesn't know much about her casting abilities and she can only summon one familiar per day that can only help out for ~2 hours per day. Her strength is almost non-existent, and she is kinda slow moving.

Occupation - Worker for Hire, Odd Jober

Fun Fact - Due to her shortness, she is rather light. She can go in a huge crowd unnoticed. Pressure plates are almost no issue for her in case she finds traps along the way. But this also almost makes her easily stepped on and easily ignored.
[If you see the picture] The scrolls she carries along with her are scrolls from her ancestors, which have never been open, and she is also looking for the missing pieces. Once she has gathered them all, it is said something miraculous will happen depending on the person who opens them.

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Ratings: 2/10. I have limited familiarity with fantasy video games in general but I can guess that this character is mostly generic. The character's story centered on a poor villager who go on an adventure in a medieval fantasy world. The combination of small statue, novice character, and magic has limited originality but the combination of the Hafling race and female-exclusive society is very original.

Character's Name: Aka Yumi (this is the online username; the real life name is not stated)

Age: 16

Strengths: Aka Yumi often teach valuable life's wisdom to people who she encounter. In a MMORPG, she is skilled as a sniper and a strategist. She is also flexible both in VR war games and real life career.

Weakness: She is not physically strong and fare poorly at close-range combat in fighting games. She occasionally slack off from her duty to relax or explore.

Occupation: In real life, she is planning to take post-secondary education where she would major in literature and anthropology.

Fun Fact: She typically use a trap avatar online and has a secret interest in dressing-up feminine boys in girl's clothing.
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Character's Name Kurama "Hammer" Harper

Age 27

Strengths His combat ability is greater than any other pilot he's ever served with, including his superior officers. Also qualified in psychological warfare.

Weakness Is always late, struggles with interpersonal relationships, has below average flying abilities when not in combat situatuions or combat simulations

Occupation Space fighter pilot

Fun Fact Remains the only pilot to get a perfect score on the combat portion of the academy final in the last 17 years

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Name: Suzuki Ryouichi

Age: ~40 oni.

Strengths: He has limited invisibility, and his very strong physically. He is pretty skilled with a kanabo (iron club).

Weakness: It's hard for him to win against his wife. His invisibility only works in a persons peripheral vision if he is moving or he has to stand perfectly still. His supernatural strength enhancement depends on him keeping his physical strength up in the gym. His clan kept a weak form of invisibility at the cost of having full supernatural strength.

Occupation: Businessman (public relations and accounting) and freelance assassin.

Fun fact: The main character that is his assassination target is purposefully dating his son with his wife's' approval. Business wise, it would look bad if he backs down on the assassination.
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3/10 I don't feel like I know this character at all, it seems like there is a ton of context missing, his personality is unexplained and his name is the same as a character from the manga Cage of Eden. I don't know if that last one is on purpose or not but it's distracting either way. I give some credit for the character conflict mentioned in the fun fact, but that isn't enough to warrant a passing grade because it simply gives a situation. If you really wanted to tell us about the character and his personality you should have explained how he reacts to this situation and the manner in which he deals with it.

Name: Walpurga Lamiis

Age: changes throughout the story

Strengths: Walpurga was born and raised in the Duchy of Habict where she quickly became somewhat of an anomaly. In a time when the people all across the land had little more than war on their mind Walpurga had no aspirations to be a warrior. Unsure what she wanted to do, she spent a little while drifting from one apprenticeship to another in hopes that something would really stick with her. While this would unfortunately prove fruitless, it did allow her to develop some small level of skill in many areas such as cooking, sewing and animal husbandry. This still did not stop her from receiving combat training, however. She was recognized from an early age as having strong magical affinity which resulted in her being given mandatory training as a mage until the age of 14 where she was considered an adult and allowed to pursue whatever career path she chose. While her magic powers certainly have their drawbacks, they are exceptionally strong nonetheless. Eventually she would meet Praevar by chance while he was preparing to lead an attack on Habict. While she did not know of his intentions at the time, he befriended her and inspired her to combat her crippling social anxiety and let down her guard when interacting with people for the first time. This finally gave Walpurga what she had been missing her whole life: a reason to fight. So she took up arms and joined Praevar's group of rebels, in part to protect her new friend and in part to oppose her country, which she saw as being responsible for her misery. Although Praevar was initially hesitant about bringing someone so young onto the battlefield, she convinced him that her life would have no direction without his cause and that he would not be able to keep up the fight without power like her own. Walpurga is polite and very reliable, quickly earning the trust of her companions despite her under-developed social skills.

Weaknesses: Unlike most magi, Walpurga's magic powers are tied to her emotions, meaning that although she can summon immensely destructive spells, they're triggered by rises in emotions rather than by her will. Naturally when she was a small child who had not developed proper emotional restraint this lead to tragic accidents which caused her to emotionally wall herself off from those around her in order to live a peaceful life. Sadly, it would not be that easy, as her tremendous powers would be unwillingly awoken again. Walpurga having such impressive magical prowess but no intention to become a warrior and that did not sit well with the citizens of her country, who would either ostracize her as some kind of contrarian punk while others tried to bully her in hopes of forcing her magic out of her. This would only lead to her aversion of people to strengthen resulting in extreme social anxiety. The perpetual nosedive of her mental health would stop her from advancing in any one of the many career paths she tried her hand at and would make her more and more miserable until she met Praevar who helped her get over her problems and being herself while also suppressing her destructive powers. Even after she began her journey to healing her control over her magic would still be an issue. Although she no longer needed to take such extreme measures to keep her powers in check, she still had a difficult time summoning her spells at will, often needing an emotional trigger to release her power. That isn't the only limitation to her ability, however, as while she can do incredible amounts of damage with her spells, she can't use very many of them at once. She'll be fully capable of felling large numbers of enemies with er attacks (when the conditions are right, of course) but that attack will really need to count as it could be the last one she unleashes in the battle. While Walpurga does begin to recover from her poor state of mind after joining up with Praevar, her recovery process takes time and she won't be completely healed in anything resembling a short amount of time so she still maintains some degree of awkwardness and distance. Her companions understand this and respect her of course, but that doesn't stop her from feeling like it's a massive flaw of hers.

Occupation: Mage

Fun fact: She is very passionate about theater and literature.
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6/10 There's some originality here, especially how she struggles to use her power and control it. Still, I think I've seen most of this before in bits and pieces. It's a good foundation, but she's not a full person yet. Her name is great, by the way.

Name: Clara Aurelia Laforet

Age: 18

Strengths: She loves her younger sister (age 15 going on 16) fiercely. She's practical and realistic about her troubles and approaches the problems in her life with a calm mind. She is very dependable and steady and she is almost always in good health. Since her father passed away 2 years ago she has been caring for her sister and their delicate and mentally unstable mother. Her family loves her very much. Her father was a officer in the army and a bit of a scholar of the classics, thus her middle name. Her mother was a famous pianist who suffered a nervous breakdown at the height of her career. She taught her daughters to play, though neither inherited her talent. Clara's father encouraged her to use her mind, even though society of her time does not permit many avenues for her. She wanted to help her father with the factories he and his partners were going to run after he left the army, but when he died, in the chaos of those early days of mourning, the partners pressured her to sell her shares. She does not like to dwell on this overmuch, preferring to look toward the future. She is strong and hopeful, and she knows she cannot give up for the sake of those who depend on her. She is strong and has developed enormous thriftiness.

Weaknesses: She is very lonely. All her friends and acquaintances faded away in the face of her family tragedy and loss of status. She wants to find love, but she cannot let go of the duty of caring for her mother and sister. She is too ready to take up the burden of responsibility and unwilling to put it down. Her practicality leads her to put away her troubles and never look at them. She has not cried since the day her father died, but often thoughts of the past and regrets about what she lost and gave away cause her to lie awake at night. She is smart, but she is neither beautiful nor talented, and she can be impatient with others less practical and restrained than herself. She is proud, and wishes she were not. She resents her family at times which leads to fights.

Occupation: She has none, and is too proud to seek one out.

Fun fact: She is deathly afraid of water since she was bitten by a turtle while swimming as a young girl.
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10/10. Highly original.

Name: Red Rebel (online name)

Age: Unknown. Since he is a virtual lifeforms born in a virtual reality that is sustained by magic, his age is likely under 5 even when he look like a teenager and can take the responsibility of an adult.

Strengths: He display impressive skills as a manager, strategist, and fighter during the rebellion against the invisible hand. He has great social skill and understanding. He will persist even in a seemingly hopeless situation and will address the flaws in his morality. He can make a living on very low wage and so will accept demanding jobs for marginal payment. He can change his biological sex for political purpose.

Weaknesses: He lack interest in romantic affair and will commit acts of cruelty for his personal goal. As a virtual lifeforms born as an extension of a human, he will eventually fade when that human die. His also need the invisible hand to survive since the invisible hand allow him to manifest in a physical form. His cognitive capacity, including his social awareness, become compatible with humans only by absorbing the humanity from his human source and causing his humans source to fall into a deep sleep.

Occupation: He take several roles as a rebel officer including combatant and political advertiser.

Fun Fact: At a time when his sense of self was still developing, a group of girls convince him into wearing girl's clothing in his biological male sex by claiming that trap can be useful in the future.
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Character's Name: Akane *unknown last name*

Age: 15-17 (no definite age yet decided)

Strengths: good with guns and weapons, very athletic and cautious. She lives in the woods on the country side, has no parents or family (not gonna write a whole essay on her backstory so i'll leave it at that)

Weakness: no education so dumb when it comes to academics, not interested in romance but is still very perverted, straight foward attitude so others may find her rude, unsocial due to no human interaction in a long time,

Occupation: neet, just a savage-ish tomboy living with her family of raccoons (yeah i know.. weird)

Fun Fact: she wishes she was a red panda, (wears a red panda costume/cloak that was gifted from her deceased grandmother)
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Character's Name: Akane *unknown last name*

Age: 15-17 (no definite age yet decided)

Strengths: good with guns and weapons, very athletic and cautious. She lives in the woods on the country side, has no parents or family (not gonna write a whole essay on her backstory so i'll leave it at that)

Weakness: no education so dumb when it comes to academics, not interested in romance but is still very perverted, straight foward attitude so others may find her rude, unsocial due to no human interaction in a long time,

Occupation: neet, just a savage-ish tomboy living with her family of raccoons (yeah i know.. weird)

Fun Fact: she wishes she was a red panda, (wears a red panda costume/cloak that was gifted from her deceased grandmother)


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Character's Name: Xye

Age: 19

Strengths: Spite. She will do anything out of spite. If she's aiming a gun at someone and they say, "You don't have the guts." She'll shoot them right then and there, no hesitation. She will momentarily though her morals out of the window. She literally travelled to a parallel universe to beat the shit out of the asshole who destroyed hers because she never got to do anything with her life. There's also her existential crisis, that sort of motivates her to do something big but that ends up hindering her most of the time

Weakness: When engaging in combat with anything that's not an AI, she's often overwhelmed by their spontaneous attack patterns. She grew up playing MMO's and would decimate mobs of monsters but when it came to PVP, she'd always get her ass kicked and cried about it to her pro older brother. She has close no endurance and little stamina. Due to her sporadic depression, it's easy for her to give up at times since she knows in the end, she's going to die and nothing will matter at that point. Her selfishness is also a weakness. Once she stopped fighting for just herself and started fighting for others, she was finally able to feel like she acheived something with her life even though she died without completing her original goal.

Occupation: Previously a bodyguard for one of the Zodiacs (elite) of her nation. Unfortunately, she's a fugitive now and a couch potato at her new acquaintance’s place.

Fun Fact : She can manipulate dark matter. But she doesn't do anything with it besides heighten the power behind her punch when she wants to intimidate someone. (You can do alot of stuff with her ability but the effects on the body are not pretty, so she can't do anything flashy without being bed ridden for a few days ) She also likes narrating in dire situations. "And if you look to the right, you'll see Zen getting his ass whooped. What will Zen do? Find out in 5, 4, 3, 2, 1 ...."
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