I am going to present my story that I just written and I want your opinion of this story. This story may not be publishable since it get too close into exposing the dark secret of the Capitalist culture so I will allow the public to use this story as inspiration as long as they use proper citation.
Genre: comedy, action, fantasy, virtual reality, slice of life
The story take place in U.S. at an alternate timeline with some fantasy element. In this timeline, U.S. is a place with seemingly infinite resource which sustain many alternate spaces. The alternate spaces act as realistic 3-D virtual worlds and the magic allow affordable virtual reality (VR) technology to even the marginal sectors of society. All those VR worlds were protected and sustained by the invisible hand.
Little do the inhabitants know, the huge resource to sustain the VR worlds is obtained from the third world using the greed generated from the heart of U.S. customers. The Capitalists gather the greed and manifest it in a physical form called overpowered monsters (OPM) to invade foreign land. They also use OPM workers to replace domesticate workers although the displacement more often occurs from refuge of the OPM invasions.
The resistance to the evil Capitalists one day damage utopia the barrier of U.S. and wounded the invisible hand. This attack disrupts the mechanism to gather greed which then leaked within civilian areas of the country. The leaked greed manifest as OPM who consume the greed to reproduce uncontrollably and invade both the real world and the many VR worlds. The OPM post relatively little threats to the lives of U.S. citizen but they post more threat to their jobs since the private employees use this huge abundance of OPM as cheap workers.
To rescue the jobs of their citizen, a group of not-so-organized-nor-so-heroic-nor-overpowered heroes was hired on low wage to kill the OPM. To hide the fighting from the business elites, they use VR technology to enter the No Man’s World where greed is transported, manifest the greed as OPM, and kill them before they depart the world for employment. In the No Man’s World, our heroes will encounter many agents who want to obtain the OPM as cheap source of workers but they, however, can conceal their identities due to the use of avatars. Can our heroes slain enough OPM to save the jobs of the citizen even when they fight under financial hardship and possible legal controversy?
Settings and Characters
Unlike the other VR worlds, the No Man’s World is an uninhabited world which gather the garbage of VR worlds. This world consists of complex tunnels which connects many VR worlds. The environment is highly unstable, dangerous, and unpredictable; many natural disasters and dramatic environmental changes often occurs. Magic is easily manifest here and the landscape consists of a patched-up mixture of elements from many VR worlds. The greed of U.S. citizen is absorbed to here and channeled to OPM factories.
The OPM is the manifestation of greed and they can take many forms; their forms can resemble humans, animals, machines, objects, landscape features, or a mix of the mentioned. As greed, they exist as intangible mass of particles unless they are either disturbed by the magic emitted by external force, where they will manifest as OPM, or consumed by OPM themselves. They are simple-minded beings who are driven by the instincts to take something from their environment like a job, attention of human's lustful desire, material possession, greed of humans, or spiritual energy of humans. They can synchronize their minds with other OPM or the greedy desires of humans to form a highly hierarchical group. Despite their string loyalty toward their master in their group, they will betray and consume their master upon seeing the opportunities to exploit their master’s vulnerability.
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I will introduce some piece of scenes for the plot:
Hero: “You are willing to replace many workers with OPMs, all for your own profit?”
Villain: “This is the will of the invisible hand; you cannot argue against it.”
Hero: “Many people discarded their greed into the No Man’s World but you keep and even embrace your greed; how shameful!”
Villain: “You fool! Greed is the essence of life; the essence of progress. Without it, society will be trapped in stagnation.”
Female Reporter: “According to the report, the seducing OPMs use publicly indecent poses and lesbian scenes to seduce man. Those OPMs put those men under a zombie-like state by some form of mind-control and then make those men transfer their life force into the OPM.”
Women in authority: “You mean that the OPMs is taking not only the employment of our workers but also the heart of our boyfriends? This is terrible; I cannot stop my boyfriend from being socialized to see women as sex objects especially when it encourages economic investment. We must kill all OPMs especially the seducing type. The report state that the seducing OPMs do not seem to fare well against romantic competitor so I would mandate at least one heterosexual women for every hero parties. We would also have to train boys in the art of trap even when the trap could harm the morality of our community.”
Manly Hero: "So you OPM use the power of lust to seduce many men into joining a zombie-like collective hivemind, make those men follow all your orders without question, and convert those men into traps to help you seduce more men. You even violate the copyright law by using the image of the Miku fictional character for your seducing. You had put many men under your mind control by seducing but you cannot seduce me with your publicly offensive poses!”
Miku OPM: “You may continue resisting but you will eventually fall under my girly power by my further sexy poses.”
*After the OPM end her speech with girly charm, the manly hero lost his mental resistance and become assimilated into the zombie hivemind. Shortly after, a female hero kill the OPM and free all the men from the mind-control*
Women: “Go back to your sense! You are my boyfriend! You had been seduced by a OPM and had fallen into its mind control for a few hours; the OPM are now defeated and you should now free yourself from your zombified state. You should resist the preaching of that OPM and stop saying that women are defined by their capacity to satisfy men’s lust.”
Boyfriend: “Women are defined by their capacity to satisfy men’s lust. Women gain their empowerment from evoking men’s lust. You do not satisfy men’s lust; you are not a woman.”
*And so a man get slapped in the face*
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I can see you have put a fair bit of effort into this story, and such efforts should be praised. So I certainly want to post my opinion about this, since it'll be the first here! Haha
BTW I am not a professional writer. In fact, I might be worse then you are. But this is coming from the view of just an average individual who sorta likes to read and let his mind run wild :P
Well, I shall first be talking about the brief synposis you have posted. BTW this is personally my opinion so I could be the dumbest person you've ever met since I may not be able to catch half the ideas you've created and only merely 'scratched the surface'.
When reading the plot, there was one thing which sort of...stumped me in focus. I think it was the first section with the concepts about 'alternative spaces'.
So in this ver. of the U.S, is the VR run by magic? Actually, broadly speaking, is magic the kind of electricity/energy source in this story? And what is the invisible hand? Is it a company of sorts or a group of individuals? What do they do? Or is that something which is explained in the story.
Also, could you explain this part to me, I seem to be unable to understand what it's actually saying.
"although the displacement more often occurs from refuge of the OPM invasions."
Now with the aspect of emotions being used as a way to create these OPM, is it just greed specifically? Or will the other emotions be used too? And when you say that the capitalists use the OPM to invade foreign land, do they actually attack the people there? Or do they just steal that country's jobs?
Just one little thing concerning the part where the invisible hand is damaged an invasion occurs, why would the OPM need to consume the greed? Aren't they born from it? If they were born from it then why would they have to reproduce? Couldn't the greed just manifest into another OPM rather then an OPM itself needing to consume greed to reproduce? Unless when the OPM consume the greed, they reproduce more then just one individual. If that is the case then i'm an idiot.
The actual settings and characters were clear to me, and they were pretty well written in terms of details and coherence with the plot line.
Reading some of the scenes, they were pretty good. There were some lines which I thought sounded pretty nice and really fleshed out a character, despite knowing nothing about the actual characters. Though, there were probably a few things I would have changed because I believe that some of the phrases provided in the characters line, 'broke the flow' of the emotion...if that makes sense. One case of this were the use of some cliche's
eg. Hero: “Many people discarded their greed into the No Man’s World but you keep and even embrace your greed [how shameful!]”
Just that last part, kind of made me tilt my head in terms of determining the degree of the hero's anger.
Also, I felt that at some points, the lines of the characters felt a bit similar. And when characters have similar-feeling lines, it usually indicates that they would have similar personalities, which might be something you weren't aiming for.
Overall, I had to read the synopsis a few times just to get a clearer understanding of what was going on, because this was fairly unique...like really really unique. There were times I'll admit where I was a little lost, since there are a lot of new concepts that I was just never familiar with. Usually, beings born from negative emotions tend to attack the humans, but in your case they simply endanger jobs, which I find to be...quite different. I never thought a story concerning agents and particle-made organisms would be centered around the endangerment of of a entire nations economy. I'm getting this strong vibe that you are someone that takes interest into business, the economics aspect of it too, but I may be wrong, but that's the impression I got judging from the elements presented in this story.
If I were to be completely honest about this, I would be someone that probably wouldn't be too interested in this idea..but this is purely opinion based. It has very strong vibes of business being the central concept and theme which drives the story, and business isn't something I'm too interested in.
What I will say however, is that the prominence of creativity placed into this idea is quite high. Just because something's different, doesn't always mean it's bad. While a bit confusing at times because I'm not familiar with the business side of stuff and the aspects of fantasy and emotion-created beings being put together into one story, this is something you should certainly be proud of creating.
Keep up the good work! And please remember this is purely my opinion on this, so don't take out your anger on me if that is how you are feeling as you read this.
After getting feedback from SomeSortOfAnimeBlogger1210 and making further expansion of the story, I present the revision of some concepts. Note that this story is used to promote the Capitalist culture (in some sense) so some background knowledge in the Capitalist ideology can be used as reference.
The invisible hand is based on its counterpart in the Capitalist ideology but this explain very little as the Capitalists barely define the invisible hand. The invisible hand will stay poorly-defined in the story to retain the same mysterious character from its real-life counterpart. The invisible hand is connected to the VR (or alternate space) but the exact nature of the connection will not be reveal. The invisible hand is suspected to be responsible for containing most of the magic within the VR worlds and the inability of the VR administrators to fully control their VR world.
To explain more about OPM, they cannot produce greed by themselves and relay on the greed from humans. They have fast development and reproduction rates under optimal condition. Only greed is vital to their survival but they can also feed on other dark human desires, human life force, or other thing that I had yet to come up with. Their ranking in their group is determined by their services to its members especially those of the higher rank. The 'string' in 'Despite showing string loyalty,' is a misspelling of 'strong'. For their objective, they mainly use appeasement tactics in the real world due to low magic manifestation while more violence is used in VR worlds. They represent the ideal Capitalist citizen.
Besides fighting in both the VR world and real world, the two factions in the story also conduct political campaigns and lobbying on policies related to the OPM. The policies that result from those debates determines the activities of the two sides especially in the real world. The plot is light, episodic, and focus on introducing the settings. I plan to make a sequel with a stronger plot development. Here is a prelude to explain more of the background plot:
Business Man: “My company will now withdraw support for you. You had allowed the Muslim terrorists to bypass your national security and damage the core of United States. The aftershock of the attack is affecting the nation even after this few years. The invasion had caused constant leakage of greed across the nation and it dramatically depletes our national supply of OPMs; we have less OPMs to run our oversea factories and less OPMs to sell in foreign wars. The attack also cause huge initial financial loss and discourage foreign investors. And the worse part is that it scares away my foreign workers.”
President Bush: “How many times do I have to tell you? The attack is unpredictable and no one could had prepared for it.”
Business Man: “You have no excuse for your ignorance! You were brought up under the invisible hand who empower all individuals to unlock their hidden power so they can overcome all hardship of life by themselves; the invasion can only occur by your lax security!”
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Here is more scenes for the plot:
Judge: “Let the court session begin. From the report, an OPM who take the form of a cat ran into a police department to sue a person for animal abuse. The police have difficulties understanding the OPM until they get a OPM translator. After receiving the report from the OPM, the police arrest Sara. Per the claim by the prosecutor, Sara give a few cat OPMs to some kids where they suffer endless torture and life threatening assaults. The OPMs plea for mercy but they keep on suffering. Per the prosecutor, it is the only one of the OPMs to survive and escape. Sara, you may begin your testimony.”
Sara: “I never thought that the cat OPMs can suffer such horror from a bunch of kids even when they are among the weakest types of OPMs. They live be begging to be adapted so they can find their owner’s weakness and drain their owner’s life force; they are supposed to be prepared for animal abuse which is common among pet owners.”
Cat OPM (translated): “I am prepared for some animal abuse but I had not expected to be given to such rude kids; I even heard that those kids are the most horrible pet caretakers. You and your comrades of heroes even said it yourself; you hand us to those rude kids so we will suffer a horrible death.”
Sara: “But you and your band of cat OPMs can easily escape from those kids at anytime.”
Cat OPM (translated): “Why should we escape when we are finding a weakness in those kids. Those kids keep hiding their weakness from us. You must had told those kids to hide their weakness from us.”
*The court later end with the defendant declared not guilty. Sometime later, an evil meeting take place*
Mysterious Man #1: “This meeting will discuss a recent court debate along with the other court debates where the OPM had to argued for their case. In those debates, the OPM show that they lack the cognitive capacity to effectively argue for their case. I propose a publicly funded lawyer to argue for the OPMs. Any objection?”
Villain: “So you heroes came to stop me from smuggling OPMs. Do you think you can beat me in my own VR world? I decide the reward and punishment of the inhabitants in this world; I decide that you cannot gain any experience points nor currency by defeating OPM. On the other hand, I decide that any players can get a huge experience point, huge currency drop, and even a rare weapon drop for defeating you heroes. OPM, defeat these heroes so you can get a huge reward.”
Hero #1: “So you are using systematic violence instead of your own strength. How low can you get?”
*A few months later*
Villain: “I am aware that the heroes will take screenshots of my abuse of power but I completely forgot that another VR world is competing for the same demographic users as my VR world; my world is now losing players as they go to that other VR world after seeing the screenshots. For competing with me at the worse possible time, I will send my OPMs that I invented to invade that VR world. My OPM will steal the experience points of the players in that world. The players cannot distinguish my OPMs from the monster NPCs nor the origin of my OPMs so they will think that my OPMs is part of the game system in that VR world. Ha ha ha ha.”
*During the invasion*
Player #1: “I had been fighting these monsters but I do not seem to get any experience point. Is this due to the strange status effect that I have?”
Player #2: “It is likely due to the status effect. I had been observing an OPM that is keeping a distant from us. That OPM is likely the caster of this status effect.”
Player #1: “How can you tell an OPM from a monster NPC?”
Player #2: “I have some experience as a hero. The status effect should disappear after I kill the OPM but we should prepare for more possible tricks.”
*The OPM is then sniped and killed. The players later realize that the stolen experience point will go toward the player who kill the OPM. Thus, the local GMs easily sponsor a campaign to eradicate the OPMs and successfully repel the invasion*
Villain: “Oh no! I had focused too much on designing my unique OPMs that I forget to assess the practical issues of the invasion in my design.”
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Cultist: “Look at the invisible hand. No matter how hard you look at it, you can only see this: it is a flawless government system, it judges people per their work and innovation, it is driven by the greed of all human, and it is 100% anarchy.”
Heretic: “What are you saying? The invisible hand seems to judge people more accordingly to their wealth and ownership than their work and innovation. Also, how can I see the invisible hand when it is invisible?”
Cultist: “It is easy: we are in a lawless land where everyone can unlock their hidden omnipotent without restrain from the official government; you can use your willpower to develop a sixth sense and see the invisible hand in its natural purity. Invisible hand, use your authority to punish this heretic and fill me with abundant luxury.”
*A miracle by the invisible hand occurred*
<The actually miracle by the invisible hand and the subsequent events is up to your imagination>
*A heroine codenamed Tsukineko handle various part-time jobs related to the OPMs. Before the invasion, she lives a lonely but peaceful life isolated from external conflicts like many U.S. citizen. Now, she is participating more in her community in response to the threats by OPMs. She wonders whether her current life is better than that before the invasion; the OPMs at first take her job and her boyfriend but now she gets to meet many people who share her interests and activities. *
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Now that I had completed the outline for the first story, I will begin the outline of the second story. I plan on making more sequel.
Fall of Utopia Fantasy 2: To the End of Dream
Carry some major themes and plot elements from Zetsuen No Tempest. This plot center on the rebellion against the invisible hand and the beginning of governance by humans. The inhabitants are divided into two sides: those who want to protect the invisible hand to preserve the current VR worlds and those who want to destroy the invisible hand. The plot begins partway within the previous story and continue after it. The male protagonist, codenamed Red Rebel, is a mysterious talented hero who will accept low wage and harsh working conditions to destroy the invisible hand.
*The heroine and her allies appear before a villain. The villain get a brief shock but then make an evil smile*
Villain: “So, you and your comrades made it this far. I must admit: you may have the capacity to overthrow the invisible hand and you may bring a new era of freedom. However, do you think that the destruction of the invisible hand will allow you to live a happy life with your lover, red rebel? Had you ever wonder why he can easily change his biological sex even in the real world? Red rebel is not a human; he is a VR lifeform who embody of a person’s will of revenge. He was born from the lost memories of a human who lost his future and lover. You may had originally work with red rebel against the invisible hand to get your revenge but you now work with him by love; he is the only one to help you in tour most desperate time and the one who accept you for who you are. Abandon your love and stop red rebel; if you do not then you could never by with your only true love because Red Rebel will disappear from existence wen the invisible hand is overthrown.”
Ally Male Hero: “So what! If he will disappear then heroine can get another man. In fact, she can make a clone of Red Rebel!”
*And so, a man get slapped in the face for not understanding a woman’s feeling*
Climatic Scene of First Arc
Heretic: “We have come to stop your evil plan! We do not know exactly what the invisible hand is but we will destroy it nevertheless!”
Cultist: “So you attempt to destroy the invisible hand even when you do not know what it actually is. I will explain what the invisible hand is to you especially to point to your foolish. You cannot destroy the invisible hand; the invisible hand does not exist in a physical world! The invisible hand is an intangible entity that exist in the spiritual plane! Your foolishness does not even end there: your battles with the OPMs and the agents is causing the very chaos that is needed for its physical manifestation! The invisible hand is manifesting a physical form right next to us as I speak to show its glory! Look at the invisible hand! No matter how hard you look at it, you can only see this: it is a flawless government, it judges people per their work and innovation, it is driven by the greed of all human, and it is 100% anarchy.”
Heretic: “But how can I see the invisible hand when it is invisible?”
Cultist: “It is easy to see the invisible hand: we are in a lawless land where everyone can unlock their hidden omnipotent without restrain from the official government nor the law; you can freely use your willpower to develop a sixth sense and see the invisible hand in its natural purity. Invisible hand, use your authority to punish this heretic and fill me with abundant luxury.”
*The miracle by the invisible hand and the subsequent events will be implied in the later scene but it will not be mentioned directly*
Prelude of the Second Arc
*Red Rebel had a dream. In that dream, one of his comrade talk about the wonderful miracles by the invisible hand: the invisible hand is now doing what it was supposed to do; it is now judging people per their deeds. He suspects that the invisible hand was the one doing the talking in the dream under the guise of his comrade but he can see no lies in its claim; right now, in United States, people who do bad deed constantly receive bad luck and people who do good deed with good luck. The invisible hand is still draining huge amount of resource from the developing nations but it is now enforcing an effective governance in US and maintaining economic stability. Some Capitalists are still following the invisible hand despite receiving bad lucks from their bad deeds. Red Rebel conclude that this loyalty to the invisible hand persist because many of its followers are dependent on it for individual empowerment to the point where they cannot imagine a life without the invisible hand. These recent miracles by the invisible hand is likely due to the appearance of a competitor…*
*Red rebel reflects on his life history: he was the shadow of a human born to carry out revenge; an embodiment of revenge. He initially cares nothing more than to carry the will of revenge by his human source but that change as he begins to absorb more aspects of humanity from his human source; he can now express the full range of human emotions and desires. He once prioritizes the vengeful goal from his human source at all cost but he now begins to question his initial purpose. He is once willing to absorb the humanity from his human source to gain the social capacity to make alliance and negotiate with people without hesitation but he now begin to doubt this action which could eventually put his human source into eternal sleep. He also begins to show concern to his new friends who work with him; He will disappear after the invisible hand is overthrown but how would his friends respond to his disappearance? Will they grief for his departure? Will they get mad at him for hiding the truth in this whole time? Regardless of the outcome, he resolves to overthrow the invisible hand. He is still motivated by the revenge from his human source but he is now driven by a more greater motivation: to create a future for the people dear to him. *
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I will complete the outline for the second story.
Climatic Scene of Second Arc
Villain: “Your rebellion against the invisible hand is foolish! Do you think that you can live without the invisible hand? Before the invisible hand come into your life, you are genetic VR lifeform who are fated for a plotless life; you are once destined to die as a meaningless bystander and disappear as a background character. If the invisible hand is overthrown, then you will be destined for your old dreaded fate.”
Red Rebel: “Your word may be true and unarguable. However, I had seen those who can progress without the invisible hand; a future that is unimaginable to the Western citizen. The dwellers of the unimaginable do not even take place in dark genre; some even dwell in utopia. If prosperity can exist in the barren, then there might be a possibility for one like me to exist in the unimaginable life without the invisible hand. Even if I cannot live in the unimaginable, I can at least prepare the unimaginable for those who would otherwise meet the same tragic ending as me.”
Villain: “So the invisible hand has lead you to this route. Let see where your route end.”
*The invisible hand is overthrown which result in the disintegration of all VR worlds in the United States. The VR elements disappear with the VR worlds while the non-VR elements of the VR worlds appear in the real world on the same place where it enters the VR worlds. U.S. suffer from brief instability as its citizen adjusts to the life without the invisible hand. This revolution prevents greed from being gathered to sustain the OPMs army oversea. Without the militaristic OPMs to supress rebellion in Mexico, the transnational corporation flee from Mexico while their puppet government eventually surrendered to the Zapatista…*
Zapatista Representative (in Spanish): “Victory is ours! We will now be building this nation for our future. May those who seek refuge in U.S. come back to help build our nation. We will now be executing this puppet dictator for betraying our people to the foreign corporate.”
Puppet Dictator (in Spanish): “Please do not execute me! I was supporting the transnational corporate so the invisible hand will give favor to Mexico! The invisible hand make me commit acts of horror toward my own people for the foreign interest! I only enforce the policies of murder and thievery of my own people so the invisible hand could make Mexico meet the economic standard of the first world!”
Russian Imperialist (in Russia): “So United States has now fallen from its glory; this is now the time for Russia to establish itself as the new top economic power. Mu ha ha ha ha.”
Cuban citizen #1 (in Spanish): “Now that the WTO and NAFTA has been severely weakened by the revolution in U.S., Cuba is now experiencing an economic bloom as the Capitalists can no longer enforce economic sanction against Cuba. The Cuban government is now relaxing many of its economic regulations from the harsh economic period; I can now buy my own car and enjoy fresh vegetable from oversea.”
*The heroine now reflects on her recent past. She had worked for revenge before she meets Red Rebel. After meeting Red Rebel, she learned that Red Rebel will disappear when the invisible hand is overthrown which disturbed her. Red Rebel eventually realize her worry and comforted her. He put her at ease when he explains his origin; he further claims that he will exist in a human form after overthrowing the invisible hand. She cannot be sure whether he is honest but she accepts his claim due to her devotion to him. After Red Rebel disappear, she researches his origin and identify his human source. She concludes that Red Rebel can still exist within his human source and decide to meet that human…*
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I decide to add some details on my story. The phrase "The Job Thieves" will be add as a subtitle on the first story of Fall of Utopia Fantasy. The No Man's World symbolize a sector of the Capitalist societies that is hidden from public despite its huge relevance.
The genre for the second story will include: fantasy, virtual reality, comedy, romance, and action.
I will also add an additional scene for the second story.
Prelude Scene to the Climactic of First Arc
*At the cultist base*
Cultist: “So the heretic is now launching an invasion on our main base to stop us from summoning the invisible hand…and they apparently leave Red Rebel on the heretic base; this is suspicious. Why will the heretic invade us without Red Rebel who can dramatically improve the moral of the invaders and lead them to victory? The invasion force in front of us may be a distraction; the enemy may be sending a secret force from another location. Even when we are in a very desperate situation, we shall not deploy our elite units unless Red Rebel appear.”
*At the heretic base*
Red Rebel: “You mean that you launch an important invasion without me! I had been managing my finance and my personal life so I can prepare enough time for this invasion; I even recruit a boy as a cross-dressing maid to take care of my home during this invasion. I had further been managing the logistics of the organization to provide more funding for this invasion. Do you know how vital my skills are to the force?”
Rebel Officer: “That is the point; we launch an important invasion behind your back to surprise our enemy. The enemy concentrate their spying activities on you because of your many past achievements so they can barely keep track of our other key fighters. We are also suspicions of your background. Since most of our members are now on the front-line invasion, you will now be guarding our base and doing menial labors even when you are an inspiring hero.”
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I now present a short plot which fill in the plot hole from the last story and continue after the cliff hanger of the second plot.
Fall of Utopia Fantasy: Diary of a Priest
Genre: Fantasy, Drama
Diary #1: “I become a priest of the invisible hand despite being its enemy because I am needed to make the invisible hand into a complete god. The invisible hand is an incomplete god who need my expertise of its nature to become whole. Its completion will make it vulnerable to external attacks but its completion is more important then its survival.”
Diary #2: “The priests of the invisible hand have a very low socio-status within the Capitalist religion. The priests receive marginal wage and often take the blamed for any scandal or hardship of the cult. That is why an antagonistic people like me usually occupy this position.”
Diary #3: “I seem to be progressively losing my conscious. The source seems to be a being who is born from my desire of revenge: Red Rebel. As the priest of the invisible hand, I cannot carry out my act of revenge so Red Rebel is born to carry it out for me. The birth of a powerful entity like Red Rebel is possible due to my connection to the invisible hand.”
Diary #4: “I access the ongoing memories of Red Rebel: He is socially accepted and has many companions; his life seems to be more worthy of living than my life. My life has been one of loneliness, alienation, and lack of opportunities. A hospital stay is prepared in anticipation of my eternal sleep. I cannot achieve what I want in life but Red Rebel may achieve it in my place.”
Diary #5: “I now wake up from my sleep and learn that the invisible hand is overthrown. During my sleep, I had been sub-consciously obtaining information of current events from Red Rebel which I use to help the invisible hand become complete. A girl, who apparently have connection to the heretic, come to meet me. She has a feeling of uneasiness and stood beside me for hours but she does not interact much with me. She shed tears at one time during our meeting.”
Diary #6: “Despite my recent dependency on the invisible hand, I had decided to carry out my revenge because I resolved to follow my own future. However, I had become confused on when and where I made this decision. I remember that my decision occurred during my time in the hospital but my memory of the decision take place outside of the hospital. I remember that my decision occurs during a large-scale conflict between two major factions but I do not remember being in any large-scale conflicts myself."
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I had complete the key plots of my story which focus on character interaction. I will now come up with the combat roles of the characters:
Tsukineko take the role of a healer and buffer.
Red Rebel take an offensive tank role. Across the VR worlds, he tend to use heavy weapons with destructive potential like pole-arm, heavy twin swords, and bazooka. If possible, he will cause environmental destruction within the VR world to damage or hinder the enemies indirectly. He prefer such things as radio jammer and surprise attack to disrupt enemy formation. His adaptability and high combat skills allow him to be an effectively fighter on the many VR worlds; this is in contrast with many other combatants who can fight effectively only on a specific VR world. His adaptability include the capacity to enter a brief high-energy state and some transformation for greater mobility on a specific environment. This profile make him suited for military operation in No Man`s World with his resilience to environmental disturbance and the minimal impact of his destructive combat style.
Red Rebel's lover take both an archer and a de-buffer role.
The priest of the invisible hand take the role of a healer, buffer, and an assassin.
The cult leaders in the story tend to take the role of close-range combatant, de-buffer, or immobilizer.
The many heroes, agents, heretics, and non-elite cultists do not have a tendency to take a specific combat roles since they represent a diversity of groups from diverse backgrounds.
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I had not finish the plot and I do not plan to complete the plot after writing the key scenes. I will list plot elements that is unique in this story (some of which may not be apparent in the scenes that did get written):
1) Deviation of "monsters attack innocent civilians but are then stopped by heroes": the monsters in this story are mostly harmless toward humans and pose little physical threats. Their main danger come from their ability to steal jobs from humans and they are stopped by monster hunters who are not very heroic themselves. Furthermore, the monsters are rarely killed in public; they are often killed out of public view so the killers will not get lawsuited or ostrached in any way. The traditional monsters represent a feared entity that physically harm a person, are used as a means for hero status, and embody the traditional idea of evil. The monsters in this story represent an entity that is feared for their job-stealing capacity and embody the self-interest morality of Capitalism.
2) Magical VR worlds as proxy war: Some anime like Accel World have VR that are isolated from the affairs of real world. In this story, events in VR worlds is an extension of the affairs and conflicts from the real world. Past anime like the Hack series and Sword Art Online gave magical capacity to VR to allow more individual agency and the magical VR world also exist in this story. The proxy wars in VR worlds war is justified from the ability to disgiuse oneself with a VR avatar and the location of the VR worlds as a smuggling route for potential monster employees.
3) Low fantasy and alternate earth with magic: This story is an alternate earth with the same major events as real life and a basis in real life issues and conflicts. The magic here is not overpowered and is often used in combination with modern technology. The magical elements represent the many faces of humanity and the magical elements that is prominent in the plot is a metaphoric representation of globalization with a focus on US and current events.
4) Realistically powered characters: the prominent characters are not overpowered in any way although they can be more influential than the bystanders. They could be overwelmed by situational forces and individual limitations. They do not drive the plot by themselves; the plot are driven by many other background characters and each prominent character represent an agency of the different factions in the story. The prominent characters also have more realistic grey morality. Their morality do differ but not on the good-bad axis.
5) Rebellion against a God: the invisible hand which is protected and accepted as a symbolic ruler by the Capitalists in this story. The invisible hand in this story is used to sustain the magic in the many VR worlds, produce overpowered monsters, and provide key logistic support for Neo-Colonialism by United States. The invisible hand play a passive, but vital, role both in the plot and in its administration over the Capitalist religion. The invisible hand is technically the lead antagonist but only because of its logistic role; it allow the villains to achieve their respective ambitions and its defeat will end the threats from the villains. The invisible hand is very inclusive and will even accept its enemy to work on its shrine; this allow it to gain great power but makes it vulnerable to internal threats.
6) Romance: Red Rebel and his lover. The romance play a minor role in the plot and act as a small part of a community bounding that allow Red Rebel to develop a more human-like morality. The romance are not well developed, get unresolved, and have an ambigious ending.
7) Dark morality: the Capitalist characters and Red Rebel, the protagonist of the second story. Despite their dark morality, they do not commit great acts of horror within the plot due to situational forces.
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