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Posted 12/23/16

Otaku_J wrote:

"We gots to go to the beach first!" Neko exclaimed while producing a couple bikinis seemingly out of thin air, and the now exasperated Zellie agreed. They arrived at an expensive looking beach resort. Zellie was nervous how they could possibly afford to stay at such a place. When the bell hop came to their bags, she tried to block him and tell him they could not afford these accommodations, the bell hop responded matter of factly that it was "The master's wishes." and everything is taken care of. Zellie was now worried who this mysterious master could be. Before she could think any more on the subject, Neko grabbed her arm and said "Zellie, they're all here!" pointing to the familiar group who just entered the resort. "Let's get our suits on and go swimming!" and like that Zellie was whisked away by Neko.


Hello! I would like to inform you that the post you put on our story does not quite fit. There was never any mention of a beach in the first place, and the group of friends have been on a journey and are continuing it. I like your creativity, but as I said, it does not fit with the story.
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Posted 12/24/16

derpcat12 wrote:
Hello! I would like to inform you that the post you put on our story does not quite fit. There was never any mention of a beach in the first place, and the group of friends have been on a journey and are continuing it. I like your creativity, but as I said, it does not fit with the story.


I agree with Otaku_J on this one. It's a public thread in the main forums which means once it gets started you really can't expect direct control over how the story develops. In your opening post you wrote "You can make it however you want, but be polite and keep the story Pg-13 please! " [emphasis mine] Also, while a beach was never mentioned, I didn't see anything in the story thus far to suggest there wasn't one nearby or that it wasn't possible for them to travel to one, and there is nothing not "Pg-13" in the story portion added. If you want tighter control of a shared story you might want to start a CR Group where you can lay out rules and expectations more specifically and control what direction a story can go.

All. Please resume the story from here:

"We gots to go to the beach first!" Neko exclaimed while producing a couple bikinis seemingly out of thin air, and the now exasperated Zellie agreed. They arrived at an expensive looking beach resort. Zellie was nervous how they could possibly afford to stay at such a place. When the bell hop came to their bags, she tried to block him and tell him they could not afford these accommodations, the bell hop responded matter of factly that it was "The master's wishes." and everything is taken care of. Zellie was now worried who this mysterious master could be. Before she could think any more on the subject, Neko grabbed her arm and said "Zellie, they're all here!" pointing to the familiar group who just entered the resort. "Let's get our suits on and go swimming!" and like that Zellie was whisked away by Neko.

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