And here is where I'll be posting my story...
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I am going to post a story here and I would like feedback on the draft. These are drafts not the final project alright. So there will be mistakes and stuff. Bear with me alright. Let me know what you think. Take your time when reading it.

Here is the story:

Title: The Last Man Standing Is...King.

Plot: Feliciana is your average girl who just woke from a cryogenic slumber. But she isn't alone for one hundred other people wake from a frozen slumber as well. Soon they all discovered that they are the last people on the planet left to ruins. Feliciana and the other people try to survive the harsh environment. As Feliciana and the other people try to make sense of what is happening, they learn that they are not alone and are being watched. Unable to find the person watching them, everyone slowly but surely loses their minds. Soon strange and terrifying things start to happen around them. This is a game to see who can survive and be the last man standing. Who ever is the last one become King of the World.

Prologue: Awakening-

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This is just me, but this seems to be more of the story rather than a prologue. The prologues in the books I usually read have something that happens later in the story, in other words it foreshadows. Again that's just me.
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zelking wrote:

This is just me, but this seems to be more of the story rather than a prologue. The prologues in the books I usually read have something that happens later in the story, in other words it foreshadows. Again that's just me.


What do you think of it though?
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Posted 12/15/16
Intriguing, I'd want to read more.
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Posted 12/17/16

camay1997 wrote:

Intriguing, I'd want to read more.


Thanks.
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Posted 12/17/16

qualeshia3 wrote:


zelking wrote:

This is just me, but this seems to be more of the story rather than a prologue. The prologues in the books I usually read have something that happens later in the story, in other words it foreshadows. Again that's just me.


What do you think of it though?


I like it, it has a lot of potential.
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Posted 12/17/16

zelking wrote:


qualeshia3 wrote:


zelking wrote:

This is just me, but this seems to be more of the story rather than a prologue. The prologues in the books I usually read have something that happens later in the story, in other words it foreshadows. Again that's just me.


What do you think of it though?


I like it, it has a lot of potential.


Thank you very much.
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Posted 12/17/16
Chapter One will be out real soon.

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